Russell Sivey Poet Pantoum

Bellow An Umbrella

Rain seems to fall under my umbrella
Down below it falls directly on me
It leaves an impression, a firm aura
The wetness of the water simply sees

Down below it falls directly on me
The rain flows right onto my tender face
The wetness of the water simply sees
And shows me how the rain falls into place

The rain flows right onto my tender face
Under the umbrella it seems real safe
And shows me how the rain falls into place
The rain seems to rub on the neck and chafe

Under the umbrella it seems real safe
But the rain comes down below the cover
The rain seems to rub on the neck and chafe
Leaving one wet and feeling depressed more

But the rain comes down below the cover
It leaves an impression, a firm aura
Leaving one wet and feeling depressed more
Rain seems to fall under my umbrella

Russell Sivey

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Len Gasun March 18, 2013 at 2:52 AM This is an excellent pantoum and a very delightful one to read my dear friend Russell! I extremely enjoyed reading it this afternoon. I have tried this form once before but I failed. I hope I can try it again next time. You're really very talented poet that's the reason you're one of my favs. Thank you so much for sharing your gems. Thank you so much also for the very wonderful & inspiring comments on my poems. Have a great and blessed day always my dear friend! love & hugs, Leonora

Donna Jones March 17, 2013 at 9:59 PM Very fun poem Russell....loved it...but might get a new umbrella...Donna

Anne-Lise Andresen March 17, 2013 at 1:05 PM Remind me that I buy you a new umbrella for Christmas gift, Russell. - Summer rain in your hair means good luck but now early spring means colds! - A very good poem in a form that I do not know anything about. - But, you're good. - Thanks for your comments on my Haiku. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Jack Horne March 17, 2013 at 11:27 AM love this, my friend - excellent pantoum

Constance La France March 17, 2013 at 11:10 AM Russell, you captured the Pantoum, a very difficult form, for me anyways and it sounds like you have a useless umbrella, I think I have the same kind, always end up wet, constance