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Behind Castle Walls

I thought I was safe behind Castle walls Within my Kingdom I made the rules There outside the gate I heard her calls Why did I choose to listen to fools I opened the drawbridge, let her in Within my Kingdom I made the rules I had not known where she had been Her ideas corrupted my mind I opened the drawbridge, let her in In the beginning she seemed so kind At my table together we ate Her ideas corrupted my mind Completly unaware of my fate She beguiled me, with that lovely smile At my table together we ate I became subdued after a while She beguiled me, with that lovely smile I thought I was safe behind castle walls There outside the gate her lover calls Written February 3rd for Shadow's Castle Contest.

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Lukas Ficklin

Date: 6/8/2016 12:31:00 AM

This one is very good Richard. I might have to try this form.. A spin off pantoum.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/8/2016 5:45:00 PM

Thanks for reading one of my older ones Lukas.

Jake Ponce

Date: 5/31/2014 10:24:00 AM

I'm in awe of this poem's swirling quality. I didn't notice what form it was in when I read it but I must say that it flows really well like dizzying spiral of good and unfortunate events that we all may have already experienced.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/1/2014 7:31:00 AM

Thank you Jake I quite enjoy writing this form. I appreciate you reading one of my older pieces.

Paul Callus

Date: 3/1/2014 5:05:00 PM

Don't we all open up to someone...once...or more. And at what price...what consequences? Great poem. // paul

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/1/2014 7:40:00 PM

Thanks Paul.

Kelly Deschler

Date: 2/6/2014 6:46:00 PM

I think that we all have built our castle walls to hide behind. And, it is always difficult to let someone new invade our privacy. I enjoyed your interesting take on the castle theme. Very nicely done, Richard! Congratulations on your win, as well!

Monterey Sirak

Date: 2/6/2014 8:29:00 AM

You come up with something amazing for every challenge. Love the underlying meaning here; no matter how safe we think we are, no matter how thick the walls we build, it only takes a single chink or an unlocked gate for everything to change.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/6/2014 10:28:00 AM

You are insightful my friend, that is one of the qualities I so appreciate about you.

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 2/6/2014 6:42:00 AM

Provoking,seductive,captivating..I love the story of it all Richard.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/6/2014 7:14:00 AM

Thanks Charmaine.

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 2/6/2014 3:59:00 AM

Off to a wedding and the coast for a good few days, so I'm clearing my backlog of "can I please Tweets". I'll be back on Wednesday, feel free to tell me how it goes. May success be our shadows, Scott

Scott Thirtyseven
Date: 2/12/2014 2:11:00 AM

Thank you, we had an excellent trip on New Zealand's North Island, east coast. Firstly to a great wedding in Gisborne, and then to my fav bay in NZ -if not what little of the world I have seen- Tolaga Bay. Have written a poem about it the bay, for posting soonish. I hope the tweet went well, this poem deserves it. Cheers Scott

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/6/2014 5:39:00 AM

Good morning Scott, which coast are you heading too? I hope you have a great trip.

Debbie Mills-Kelly

Date: 2/5/2014 1:49:00 PM

What a gorgeous piece.... so well written and it tells such a great story of love waxing and waning . Really a great write !!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/5/2014 2:18:00 PM

Thanks again Debbie, I appreciate the visit.

Kayod5 Kayode

Date: 2/5/2014 10:02:00 AM

Congrats Richard.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/5/2014 10:17:00 AM

Lol, my eyes must be failing, I didn't spell it wrong.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/5/2014 10:16:00 AM

Oops I see I spelled your name wrong sorry Kayod5

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/5/2014 10:14:00 AM

Thanks again Kayod5. What is the significance of your poetry soup name?

Robert Rogers

Date: 2/5/2014 8:11:00 AM

"...subdued end:, I meant!...:-)// Sinclair

Robert Rogers

Date: 2/5/2014 8:10:00 AM

Excellent construct to the crushing, yet subded end! Great stuff RL!!!...:-) Congrats in your win in the contest, back-at-cha', "You deserve it!! Your friend,//Sinclair

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/5/2014 8:14:00 AM

Thanks Robert.

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 2/5/2014 12:54:00 AM

Another fantastic poem. Loved the ending. A well deserved win. I'll ask about Tweeting later, if you don't mind?

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/5/2014 8:14:00 AM

Go ahead Scott, I'm pleased you like it.

Vandana Sharma

Date: 2/4/2014 11:07:00 PM

nicely done with the form, I too have tried my hands at this form .

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/5/2014 8:16:00 AM

It can be challenging, thanks for the thoughtful comment.

Joseph May

Date: 2/4/2014 9:49:00 PM

I like the message in this write Richard...well done ...congrats on your win...

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/5/2014 8:16:00 AM

Thanks Joseph.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 2/4/2014 9:39:00 PM

Awesome write Richard !! Congrats on well deserved win!!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/5/2014 8:17:00 AM

Thanks Dr. Upma.

Cherl Dunn

Date: 2/4/2014 7:25:00 PM

also made the change to houska castle. thanks for the heads up it does work better, cheri

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/4/2014 7:41:00 PM

;0)

Cherl Dunn

Date: 2/4/2014 7:23:00 PM

A seductive write with a haunting feeling left behind, loved it alot, nicely done my friend enjoyed it's passionate flare. thank you for your wonderful words on my work. cheri

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/4/2014 7:41:00 PM

My pleasure Cherl, yours was one of my favorites.

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri

Date: 2/4/2014 11:46:00 AM

Wow big congrats on yor enchanting win! The last stanza came as a surprise.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/4/2014 6:37:00 PM

It is nice to be able to surprise, thanks for the kind comment.