Richard Lamoureux Poet Terzanelle

Behind Castle Walls

I thought I was safe behind Castle walls
Within my Kingdom I made the rules
There outside the gate I heard her calls

Why did I choose to listen to fools
I opened the drawbridge, let her in
Within my Kingdom I made the rules

I had not known where she had been
Her ideas corrupted my mind
I opened the drawbridge, let her in

In the beginning she seemed so kind
At my table together we ate
Her ideas corrupted my mind

Completly unaware of my fate
She beguiled me, with that lovely smile
At my table together we ate

I became subdued after a while
She beguiled me, with that lovely smile
I thought I was safe behind castle walls
There outside the gate her lover calls


Written February 3rd for Shadow's Castle Contest.

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Lukas Ficklin June 8, 2016 at 12:31 AM This one is very good Richard. I might have to try this form.. A spin off pantoum. Richard Lamoureux June 8, 2016 at 5:45 PM Thanks for reading one of my older ones Lukas.

Jake Ponce May 31, 2014 at 10:24 AM I'm in awe of this poem's swirling quality. I didn't notice what form it was in when I read it but I must say that it flows really well like dizzying spiral of good and unfortunate events that we all may have already experienced. Richard Lamoureux June 1, 2014 at 7:31 AM Thank you Jake I quite enjoy writing this form. I appreciate you reading one of my older pieces.

Paul Callus March 1, 2014 at 5:05 PM Don't we all open up to someone...once...or more. And at what price...what consequences? Great poem. // paul Richard Lamoureux March 1, 2014 at 7:40 PM Thanks Paul.

Kelly Deschler February 6, 2014 at 6:46 PM I think that we all have built our castle walls to hide behind. And, it is always difficult to let someone new invade our privacy. I enjoyed your interesting take on the castle theme. Very nicely done, Richard! Congratulations on your win, as well!

Monterey Sirak February 6, 2014 at 8:29 AM You come up with something amazing for every challenge. Love the underlying meaning here; no matter how safe we think we are, no matter how thick the walls we build, it only takes a single chink or an unlocked gate for everything to change. Richard Lamoureux February 6, 2014 at 10:28 AM You are insightful my friend, that is one of the qualities I so appreciate about you.

Charmaine Chircop February 6, 2014 at 6:42 AM Provoking,seductive,captivating..I love the story of it all Richard. Richard Lamoureux February 6, 2014 at 7:14 AM Thanks Charmaine.

Scott Thirtyseven February 6, 2014 at 3:59 AM Off to a wedding and the coast for a good few days, so I'm clearing my backlog of "can I please Tweets". I'll be back on Wednesday, feel free to tell me how it goes. May success be our shadows, Scott Scott Thirtyseven February 12, 2014 at 2:11 AM Thank you, we had an excellent trip on New Zealand's North Island, east coast. Firstly to a great wedding in Gisborne, and then to my fav bay in NZ -if not what little of the world I have seen- Tolaga Bay. Have written a poem about it the bay, for posting soonish. I hope the tweet went well, this poem deserves it. Cheers Scott Richard Lamoureux February 6, 2014 at 5:39 AM Good morning Scott, which coast are you heading too? I hope you have a great trip.

Debbie Mills-Kelly February 5, 2014 at 1:49 PM What a gorgeous piece.... so well written and it tells such a great story of love waxing and waning . Really a great write !! Richard Lamoureux February 5, 2014 at 2:18 PM Thanks again Debbie, I appreciate the visit.

Kayod5 Kayode February 5, 2014 at 10:02 AM Congrats Richard. Richard Lamoureux February 5, 2014 at 10:17 AM Lol, my eyes must be failing, I didn't spell it wrong. Richard Lamoureux February 5, 2014 at 10:16 AM Oops I see I spelled your name wrong sorry Kayod5 Richard Lamoureux February 5, 2014 at 10:14 AM Thanks again Kayod5. What is the significance of your poetry soup name?

Robert Rogers February 5, 2014 at 8:11 AM "...subdued end:, I meant!...:-)// Sinclair

Robert Rogers February 5, 2014 at 8:10 AM Excellent construct to the crushing, yet subded end! Great stuff RL!!!...:-) Congrats in your win in the contest, back-at-cha', "You deserve it!! Your friend,//Sinclair Richard Lamoureux February 5, 2014 at 8:14 AM Thanks Robert.

Scott Thirtyseven February 5, 2014 at 12:54 AM Another fantastic poem. Loved the ending. A well deserved win. I'll ask about Tweeting later, if you don't mind? Richard Lamoureux February 5, 2014 at 8:14 AM Go ahead Scott, I'm pleased you like it.

Dr. Vandana Sharma February 4, 2014 at 11:07 PM nicely done with the form, I too have tried my hands at this form . Richard Lamoureux February 5, 2014 at 8:16 AM It can be challenging, thanks for the thoughtful comment.

Joseph May February 4, 2014 at 9:49 PM I like the message in this write Richard...well done ...congrats on your win... Richard Lamoureux February 5, 2014 at 8:16 AM Thanks Joseph.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma February 4, 2014 at 9:39 PM Awesome write Richard !! Congrats on well deserved win!! Richard Lamoureux February 5, 2014 at 8:17 AM Thanks Dr. Upma.

Cherl Dunn February 4, 2014 at 7:25 PM also made the change to houska castle. thanks for the heads up it does work better, cheri Richard Lamoureux February 4, 2014 at 7:41 PM ;0)

Cherl Dunn February 4, 2014 at 7:23 PM A seductive write with a haunting feeling left behind, loved it alot, nicely done my friend enjoyed it's passionate flare. thank you for your wonderful words on my work. cheri Richard Lamoureux February 4, 2014 at 7:41 PM My pleasure Cherl, yours was one of my favorites.

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri February 4, 2014 at 11:46 AM Wow big congrats on yor enchanting win! The last stanza came as a surprise. Richard Lamoureux February 4, 2014 at 6:37 PM It is nice to be able to surprise, thanks for the kind comment.

Abdulhafeez Oyewole February 4, 2014 at 11:07 AM A very beautiful one dear. Big Congrats to you on your smashing win. Exams engulf me, by His grace I'm back. How's your day going? Richard Lamoureux February 4, 2014 at 6:38 PM Hi AO I hope exams went well!

Skat A February 4, 2014 at 9:04 AM Richard, nicely pinned. Thank you for the morning visit. Congratulations On Shadow's contest....................... SKAT Richard Lamoureux February 4, 2014 at 9:07 AM Thanks SKAT.

Nette Onclaud February 4, 2014 at 8:49 AM amd you beguile me ,rich!.. sweet congrats on your win!.. huggs Richard Lamoureux February 4, 2014 at 9:06 AM You are sweet Nette.

Darren Watson February 4, 2014 at 7:35 AM Beautifully constructed and told a story we could follow , Thoroughly deserved congratulations. Richard Lamoureux February 4, 2014 at 8:36 AM Thanks Darren

Harry Horsman February 4, 2014 at 6:33 AM congrats Richard,, like this a lot.... Richard Lamoureux February 4, 2014 at 8:37 AM Thanks Harry

Dr.Ram Mehta February 4, 2014 at 6:07 AM Enjoyed your write on castle and congrats on the win, Richard Richard Lamoureux February 4, 2014 at 8:37 AM Thanks Dr.Ram

Eileen Manassian February 4, 2014 at 12:14 AM Congrats, Richard....Love seeing your name on the winner's list. On my list......YOUR ALWAYS A WINNER.... hugs Richard Lamoureux February 4, 2014 at 12:26 AM Awww thanks Eileen, your a winner in my books as well!

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