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Beg To Have

I ask for your help
I have never been too proud to beg
Beg your pardon
Beg for a morsel of your time
Time to write a different script
Time undertakes my logic
Logic has never been my strongest point
Logic lacks what I need
Need bounces off my equilibrium
Need feeds off yesterday's mistakes
Mistakes I repeat 
Mistakes you never seemed to make 
Make like a bird and fly away
Make your waves on a different ocean
Ocean line yourself out of here
Ocean spray your inconsistancies 
Inconsistancies with a capital C
Inconsistancies I can't see
See me walk
See me run
Run past forward
Run further away
Away from the thing I was
Away from your simple
Simple pleasures
Simple mind
Mind playing tricks on me
Mind over your matter
Matter of facts I didn't understand
Matter converted to energy
Energy that cost too much
Energy we both wasted
Wasted on yesterday 
Wasted on nothing
Nothing ever really lasts
Nothing is nothing but a whisper
Whisper insanity in my ear
Whisper until my mind erases you
You have consumed me for too long
You who drip from your empty
Empty cup
Empty promises
Promises I hung my hat on
Promises you never meant to keep
Keep away from me
Keep what I can't have
Have my dreams
Have a cup of my broken
Broken
Dreams









I read Debbie Guzzi's poem and thought I would give the form a try.

Copyright © Richard Lamoureux | Year Posted 2014

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Cherl Dunn Date: 1/13/2015 12:52:00 PM Nicely written and well expressed, cheri Login to Reply

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/8/2014 7:10:00 AM Awesome!! I too like to try this form but I dint yet arrive to what topic I must move round..:) I read twice to get the full effect.. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 9/8/2014 9:03:00 AM Thanks, that makes my day Olive.

Verlena S. Walker Date: 8/7/2014 11:57:00 PM Nicely done Rick... I like the form. Done well... Verlena Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 8/8/2014 8:38:00 AM I find it very interesting. I'm off to visit you Verlena.

Robert Lindley Date: 8/3/2014 6:42:00 PM You did great with this form my friend. Yes, it is great to have those old memories to draw from when writing. I am unluckily blessed with so many of the sad ones to write about.. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 8/3/2014 6:48:00 PM Myself as well but the good ones are piling up nicely.

Jerry T Curtis Date: 8/2/2014 7:28:00 AM Wow, How many cups of coffee did this take ? OH maybe that was me, I was reading really fast, lol. Extremely well done Richard.......and I shall read it again, perhaps a little slower. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 8/2/2014 8:41:00 AM Thanks for the smile Jerry!

Moein Jr Date: 8/1/2014 10:32:00 AM Dear Richard,your blitz is fast like a thunder,warm like sunshine & soft like a pillow! yes ! but a special pillow,the one which when you put your head on,you'll experience the most splendid dreams... Best wishes, your fan Moein :))) Login to Reply

Ndaba Sibanda Date: 8/1/2014 9:39:00 AM Richard, you managed to portray your thoughts and feelings in a vivid and powerful way. Well done! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 8/1/2014 10:06:00 AM Thanks Ndaba, I appreciate the kind comment and visit.

David Williams Date: 7/31/2014 2:41:00 PM Richard well done with this form...David Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 8/1/2014 9:19:00 AM Thanks David.

Justin Bordner Date: 7/30/2014 2:48:00 AM Everything that's ever done is everything that ever is Richard. I appreciate the passionate hopelessness in this poem. I respect how you do not evade your pain. The ending is bitter sweet. J.A.B. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/30/2014 7:20:00 AM Thanks Justin, sometimes having someone leave is the best thing even though a the time it feels like they are ripping your heart out. I drew on a very old memory for this poem.

Monterey Sirak Date: 7/29/2014 8:15:00 AM You are amazing! So many great lines. I will just have to fav the whole thing. Might have to try this form myself. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/29/2014 8:32:00 AM I think this form would suit you nicely Monterey, thanks for faving it.

Eileen Manassian Date: 7/29/2014 3:44:00 AM Smooth..... so smooth. Love it. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/29/2014 8:33:00 AM Thanks Eileen.

Charmaine Chircop Date: 7/28/2014 5:18:00 PM Hello back to you Richard, I really love the concept of your blitz poem,I really like the way it flows too.I started writin a blitz poem but stopped half through.Maybe I will try again when I get inspired..But Wow,you did it,and its fantastic!!! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/29/2014 8:35:00 AM Thanks Charmaine, I took two runs at it, still not sure if I got it right. Either way I found it fun to write.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 7/28/2014 3:19:00 PM hey, this form is really catching on.If it were not quite such a long form, I think it would make a great contest challenge! well done, my friend. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/29/2014 8:36:00 AM Thanks Andrea.

Sara Kendrick Date: 7/28/2014 10:50:00 AM Very expressive work that is filled with emotion..Enjoyed reading your work.."Nothing ever really lasts Nothing is nothing but a whisper"..There is One Who loves with an everlasting love where man or woman can't do that all by themselves God can..Thanks for the visit to my page..Your encouraging comments were uplifting..Sara Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/28/2014 11:12:00 AM My pleasure, I share your view on what is permanent, the A and the Z. Thanks for your visit Sara.

Eileen Manassian Date: 7/28/2014 7:33:00 AM Richard...I loved what you did with this...Yes, YES..it was coherent. :) I could never pull this off! ;) I'm going to check out Debbie's blog. By the way...I have a funny blog up today..if you've got time. Hugs Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/28/2014 9:31:00 AM Hi Eileen, on my way. Have another read of this one, it is now finished.

Debbie Guzzi Date: 7/27/2014 9:34:00 PM did you get to 50 lines hon? It seems short? good but short read my blog. HUGS Light & Love Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/28/2014 9:33:00 AM I didn't know the rules, I wrote it based on what I got from reading yours. I have now added to it, I know the title doesn't follow the rules but hopefully the overall form is somewhat on track. Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/28/2014 1:00:00 AM Ok will check it out.

Brooke Dylan Date: 7/27/2014 7:54:00 PM WHAT A WONDERFUL poem... I feel like running fast forward..lol .. hugs Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/28/2014 9:34:00 AM Hi Brooke, have another look I have added to the piece. Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/27/2014 8:11:00 PM Thanks Brooke, just playing around with this one. I'm not sure if it is very Coherant.