Alison A Smith Poet Rhyme

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Written 5th Seprember, 2026 for BiteSize Contest no152 Poetry Contest sponsored by Line Gauthier another N/A

The Waggle Chiasmus: a six-line concrete verse in 6–7–8–8–7–6 syllables, rhyming ABCCBA, arranged in a figure-eight.

Bee's Map

                Within the crowded dark,
         She dreams of                  a golden bloom.
Weaves a swift,                                        geometric loop,
       Then traces right,                       a graceful swoop,
               To banish gloom.         from the room.
                               And share a silent spark.

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Andrea Dietrich September 18, 2026 at 10:24 PM Oh I just noticed the name of this form which I took at first to be a shape poem. For me it looks like a hive. A cute poem I somehow missed. When you wrote another NA, I could really relate to that!🥹 Alison A Smith September 18, 2026 at 11:18 PM I had fun making it ... that's really all that matters. Many seem to like it.❤️

David Crandall September 7, 2026 at 8:48 PM Pretty poem, nice rhyme scheme! I know bees really do have a kind of dance that represents how to get to a bloom! David Crandall September 8, 2026 at 6:45 AM my dad was a beekeeper by hobby, so I used to sit on the wall separating our yard from the neighbors to get a vantage point and watch their dance. Alison A Smith September 7, 2026 at 9:15 PM The bee dance has been well documented.

Phatt Matt September 6, 2026 at 5:01 PM Wow it's amazing of you can rhyme and construct them so carefully like this it's just beautiful. ~Matt Alison A Smith September 6, 2026 at 5:52 PM Thank you Matt

sara Etgen-Baker September 6, 2026 at 3:46 PM What an awesome poem...love the construct. Faving. Alison A Smith September 6, 2026 at 5:52 PM Much appreciated Sara

Gershon Wolf September 5, 2026 at 10:06 PM This is WILD!! Wild, awesome, unique, amazing. So creative, so imaginative. FIRST PLACE for you, I say, whatever the outcome. Instant FAVE ~ Blown Away, gw Alison A Smith September 5, 2026 at 10:15 PM Thank you it took some working out to keep it to 6 lines and still tell the story and create an attempt of a bee’s dance.🐝

Paige Hind September 5, 2026 at 4:37 PM wow, awesome!! I LOVE THIS, I FEEL THIS <3 Alison A Smith September 5, 2026 at 5:22 PM The bee dance is an awesome sight

CayCay Godwin September 5, 2026 at 4:30 PM This is a delightful, creative piece of words with a visual. I wonder if this could be revised somewhat for the silhouette contest. (That contest is on my mind because I haven't had even one creative muscle flex in response to it.) Alison A Smith September 5, 2026 at 5:22 PM Possibly ... happy to brainstorm some ideas with you. Soup mail me

Paula Goldsmith September 5, 2026 at 12:58 PM What a creative/fun write. Great Picture... Love Both..... I love honey. Have a fun weekend writing away..........

Heidi Sands September 5, 2026 at 10:44 AM Great poem. Well done! :) Alison A Smith September 5, 2026 at 1:53 PM Thanks Heidi

Joseph P. DiMino September 5, 2026 at 10:17 AM Indeed, our mandate to bring forth and share that inherent light within. Lovely poem. Alison A Smith September 5, 2026 at 1:53 PM Thanks

Silent One September 5, 2026 at 7:54 AM This is very creative, dear Alison.... Nice selection of words also..

Akham Nilabirdhwaja Singh September 5, 2026 at 6:46 AM A lovely poem.Wish you the best in thecontest. Alison A Smith September 5, 2026 at 7:35 AM Thank you for your kind words.