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Become the Swan

Example for my contest which is what I call a "Charlie-Quadku" (lol)

outside the shell 
the ugly duck 
without true heart... 
gets uglier
 
the ugliest 
of the ugly 
with a true heart... 
becomes the swan

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Line Gauthier

November 13, 2019 at 7:57 PM

A gem, Charles. A FAVE for me.

DM Babbit

September 5, 2019 at 1:43 PM

Nice

Beata Agustin

September 2, 2019 at 2:04 AM

Thanks for the example; likewise for the message of your poem. Thanks for sponsoring contests to help enhance poetic prowess... God bless you.

Andrea Dietrich

September 1, 2019 at 5:04 PM

I was just going to do four lines when I tried this. You don't mind people doing multiple verses?

Andrea Dietrich

September 1, 2019 at 5:04 PM

Love how you turned it around and made the swan story as we know it at the end. Nice example for your contest, charles.

John Gondolf

September 1, 2019 at 6:19 AM

Not withstanding being an example for your contest, this is wonderful poetry, Charlie, nicely penned my friend. John

William Kelii Kekaula

September 1, 2019 at 4:58 AM

Nice lead--but alas, I chickened out, Aloha always William

Jan Allison

August 31, 2019 at 12:34 PM

thanks for a great example Charlie:-) hugs Jan xx

Constance La France

August 31, 2019 at 8:31 AM

Charlie, this is amazing and a great example for your contest and true 'cause those babies are ugly at birth but then one day transform to the SWAN, I am going to start working on mine right after my two dance classes today - I like your Charlie-Quadku, Charlie !