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Beauty Floats

Floating beauty, she glides across the lake. Her gown flutters in the wind with each stride. It feels like a dream but I am awake. This vision comes to me on gentle tide. I take her hand as she steps on the shore. She says, "I'm yours to do with as you please." "What you dream of, I can promise much more!" Her gown drops and blows away on the breeze. Gentle curves beckon for me to explore. Her skin pale white welcomes lustful caress. I give and give and still she begs for more! Power beyond my own I must confess. For I am nothing but a mortal man! Power flowing from a secret hot place. To gain human seed was part of her plan. Looking content she leaves without a trace. For Georgio's Iambic verse contest. I am not well experienced with this form but thought I would try. Written Sept, 29th 2014 by Richard lamoureux.

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Date: 10/13/2014 5:03:00 PM
Very seductive. All the imagery in the first three stanza's painted a nice moonlit scene. But in the end it almost seems like she was some kinda demon, perhaps?? Like getting a kiss in the middle of the night from a stranger.... then going away back into the lake. I don't know if that's an odd interpretation or not, but that's what I got from it. I've never tried Iambic Pentameter... I have a difficult time detecting what's a stressed syllable or not.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/13/2014 5:29:00 PM
Timothy! You are back! I was so concerned about you, where have you been?
Date: 10/4/2014 11:22:00 AM
Excellent. I have entered a couple of these and they always make me change so much that it ends up feeling like it is someone elses poem so I tend to stay away from them when I figured this part of it out. I have a lot to learn about it, but don't like my poems to be completely taken apart. I enjoyed yours God bless you and happy writing. Love and prayers, Gina
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/4/2014 5:03:00 PM
Thanks so much Gina, what a thoughtful comment.
Date: 10/3/2014 8:47:00 PM
Congrats on your wonderful win Richard another brilliant poem....Hugs Sharon G.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/4/2014 5:04:00 PM
Hugs and thanks back to you.
Date: 10/2/2014 4:23:00 PM
I am in awe of this piece. Truly brilliant! Always, Laura
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/2/2014 6:43:00 PM
What a great comment, thanks!
Date: 10/1/2014 9:23:00 PM
Rated Rick and enjoyed. Lovely... Verlena
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/2/2014 8:13:00 AM
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Date: 10/1/2014 8:20:00 AM
- Beautiful thoughts in your poem Richard !! - Love it! - Congratulations !!!! (I see it is a winning poem) - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/1/2014 8:26:00 AM
Thanks and a big hug.
Date: 10/1/2014 8:16:00 AM
Oe my what a beautiful sensual poem.Adding it to my favourites Richard..Charma
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/1/2014 8:25:00 AM
Good morning and thanks Charmaine.
Date: 9/30/2014 11:56:00 AM
It should have been at the top of the podium in my eyes!! many congrats Hugs Jan xxx
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/2/2014 8:02:00 PM
You are sweet!
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Jan Allison
Date: 10/1/2014 9:03:00 AM
Oh don't apologise Richard I get to see your handsome face 3 times!:-) Hugs Jan xxx
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/1/2014 8:31:00 AM
Thanks Jan, sorry for the multiple messages, the system is doing weird things this morning.
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Date: 10/1/2014 8:30:00 AM
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/1/2014 8:29:00 AM
Date: 9/30/2014 9:07:00 AM
Congratulations on your win with this lovely man dream poem Richard.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/1/2014 8:29:00 AM
Thanks Brenda.
Date: 9/30/2014 5:58:00 AM
I am also like you, tried the iamb first time seriously, Richard. congrats
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/1/2014 8:28:00 AM
Thanks Dr. Ram, I have not had a chance to read the entries yet.
Date: 9/29/2014 10:45:00 PM
You haven't written sensual in a long time, Richard. Liquid Dreams had competition now. That was one of my favourites. I've missed this side of you. Great write.
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Date: 9/29/2014 11:16:00 PM
That seems so long ago. I'll have to take a look, I'm sure there have been more recent ones.
Date: 9/29/2014 8:40:00 PM
The perfect boys fantasy...well done
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/29/2014 11:14:00 PM
Where would we be without our fantasies? Thanks my friend.
Date: 9/29/2014 7:03:00 PM
a sensual flight of fantasy here - I like very much! I'm no expert on the form, but it looks pretty good to me
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/29/2014 11:13:00 PM
Thanks Charlotte, I appreciate the vote of confidence. I made som changes to get the beat right.
Date: 9/29/2014 6:06:00 PM
Simply stupendous Richard amazing imagery and oh so sultry and sexy. Boy no wonder she left with a smile on her face LOL!!! hugs Jan xxx
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Jan Allison
Date: 9/29/2014 6:11:00 PM
Oh your name suits you down to the ground Richard!!! Hugs Jan xxx
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/29/2014 6:09:00 PM
Ha ha! I try to live up to my name *lol*!
Date: 9/29/2014 5:29:00 PM
Hmm that was you...hehe. I loved this Richard, very delicious, hey one thing babe, second line "he" should be "her" This was awesome, I'm faving it, :) hugs :)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/29/2014 5:58:00 PM
Thanks for catching my typo. Hugs back to you. Thanks for faving!

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