Richard Lamoureux Poet Iambic Pentameter

Beauty Floats

Floating beauty, she glides across the lake.
Her gown flutters in the wind with each stride.
It feels like a dream but I am awake.
This vision comes to me on gentle tide.

I take her hand as she steps on the shore.
She says, "I'm yours to do with as you please."
"What you dream of, I can promise much more!"
Her gown drops and blows away on the breeze.

Gentle curves beckon for me to explore.
Her skin pale white welcomes lustful caress.
I give and give and still she begs for more!
Power beyond my own I must confess.

For I am nothing but a mortal man!
Power flowing from a secret hot place.
To gain human seed was part of her plan.
Looking content she leaves without a trace.

For Georgio's Iambic verse contest.
I am not well experienced with this form but thought I would try.
Written Sept, 29th 2014 by Richard lamoureux.

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Timothy Hicks October 13, 2014 at 5:03 PM Very seductive. All the imagery in the first three stanza's painted a nice moonlit scene. But in the end it almost seems like she was some kinda demon, perhaps?? Like getting a kiss in the middle of the night from a stranger.... then going away back into the lake. I don't know if that's an odd interpretation or not, but that's what I got from it. I've never tried Iambic Pentameter... I have a difficult time detecting what's a stressed syllable or not. Richard Lamoureux October 13, 2014 at 5:29 PM Timothy! You are back! I was so concerned about you, where have you been?

Regina Mcintosh October 4, 2014 at 11:22 AM Excellent. I have entered a couple of these and they always make me change so much that it ends up feeling like it is someone elses poem so I tend to stay away from them when I figured this part of it out. I have a lot to learn about it, but don't like my poems to be completely taken apart. I enjoyed yours God bless you and happy writing. Love and prayers, Gina Richard Lamoureux October 4, 2014 at 5:03 PM Thanks so much Gina, what a thoughtful comment.

Sharon Gulley October 3, 2014 at 8:47 PM Congrats on your wonderful win Richard another brilliant poem....Hugs Sharon G. Richard Lamoureux October 4, 2014 at 5:04 PM Hugs and thanks back to you.

Laura Breidenthal October 2, 2014 at 4:23 PM I am in awe of this piece. Truly brilliant! Always, Laura Richard Lamoureux October 2, 2014 at 6:43 PM What a great comment, thanks!

Verlena S. Walker October 1, 2014 at 9:23 PM Rated Rick and enjoyed. Lovely... Verlena Richard Lamoureux October 2, 2014 at 8:13 AM ;0)

Anne-Lise Andresen October 1, 2014 at 8:20 AM - Beautiful thoughts in your poem Richard !! - Love it! - Congratulations !!!! (I see it is a winning poem) - oxox // Anne-Lise :) Richard Lamoureux October 1, 2014 at 8:26 AM Thanks and a big hug.

Charmaine Chircop October 1, 2014 at 8:16 AM Oe my what a beautiful sensual poem.Adding it to my favourites Richard..Charma Richard Lamoureux October 1, 2014 at 8:25 AM Good morning and thanks Charmaine.

Jan Allison September 30, 2014 at 11:56 AM It should have been at the top of the podium in my eyes!! many congrats Hugs Jan xxx Richard Lamoureux October 2, 2014 at 8:02 PM You are sweet! Jan Allison October 1, 2014 at 9:03 AM Oh don't apologise Richard I get to see your handsome face 3 times!:-) Hugs Jan xxx Richard Lamoureux October 1, 2014 at 8:31 AM Thanks Jan, sorry for the multiple messages, the system is doing weird things this morning. Richard Lamoureux October 1, 2014 at 8:30 AM Richard Lamoureux October 1, 2014 at 8:29 AM

Brenda Meier-Hans September 30, 2014 at 9:07 AM Congratulations on your win with this lovely man dream poem Richard. Richard Lamoureux October 1, 2014 at 8:29 AM Thanks Brenda.

Dr.Ram Mehta September 30, 2014 at 5:58 AM I am also like you, tried the iamb first time seriously, Richard. congrats Richard Lamoureux October 1, 2014 at 8:28 AM Thanks Dr. Ram, I have not had a chance to read the entries yet.

Eileen Manassian September 29, 2014 at 10:45 PM You haven't written sensual in a long time, Richard. Liquid Dreams had competition now. That was one of my favourites. I've missed this side of you. Great write. Richard Lamoureux September 29, 2014 at 11:16 PM That seems so long ago. I'll have to take a look, I'm sure there have been more recent ones.

Tim Smith September 29, 2014 at 8:40 PM The perfect boys fantasy...well done Richard Lamoureux September 29, 2014 at 11:14 PM Where would we be without our fantasies? Thanks my friend.

Charlotte Puddifoot September 29, 2014 at 7:03 PM a sensual flight of fantasy here - I like very much! I'm no expert on the form, but it looks pretty good to me Richard Lamoureux September 29, 2014 at 11:13 PM Thanks Charlotte, I appreciate the vote of confidence. I made som changes to get the beat right.

Jan Allison September 29, 2014 at 6:06 PM Simply stupendous Richard amazing imagery and oh so sultry and sexy. Boy no wonder she left with a smile on her face LOL!!! hugs Jan xxx Jan Allison September 29, 2014 at 6:11 PM Oh your name suits you down to the ground Richard!!! Hugs Jan xxx Richard Lamoureux September 29, 2014 at 6:09 PM Ha ha! I try to live up to my name *lol*!

Casarah Nance September 29, 2014 at 5:29 PM Hmm that was you...hehe. I loved this Richard, very delicious, hey one thing babe, second line "he" should be "her" This was awesome, I'm faving it, :) hugs :) Richard Lamoureux September 29, 2014 at 5:58 PM Thanks for catching my typo. Hugs back to you. Thanks for faving!