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Beautiful and Mysterious


The trees are in their summer gowns and the woodlands are lush and green.
Under the summer sunshine the water mirrors the azure sky, and on the still
water, among the stones and reeds drift many swans.  I first saw them in Autumn
and made a count and had to re-count because of the cygnets, very difficult
with all those moving spins.  I have enjoyed these lovely birds, but now my heart
is sad for I know all will change when first they feel the cold. They will leave
flapping their wings over my head.  Lover by lover they paddle in cool waters for
now their cygnets following, mysterious and beautiful.  They rest among the
rushes by the lakes edge in quiet harmony, peaceful and unaware of the world.
 
delight in this day
soon the swans will have flown far-
p e a c e    but for the ducks

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July 14, 2017

Haibun/Beautiful and Mysterious
Copyright Protected, ID 920395

The Creative Collective Anthology Series
sponsor, Geraldine Taylor

First Place

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Written for the contest, Wordscapes
sponsor, John Lawless

Fourth Place
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Kimathi Avatar
September 10, 2017 at 6:28 AM
Beautiful, inimitable imagery this is! Congrats BW, for your well-deserved first placement in the contest! :-)
Johnson Avatar
September 7, 2017 at 4:29 PM
So very nice, Broken Wings. ...peaceful and unaware of the world. What peace!
Smith Avatar
September 7, 2017 at 10:47 AM
Lovely, peaceful write, back to congratulate you...
Rebstock Avatar
July 16, 2017 at 9:50 PM
Could picture it all. Enjoyed. Peace except for the ducks,
Lorette Avatar
July 16, 2017 at 8:42 PM
Delightful poem, Broken Wings! Good luck! :)
One Avatar
July 16, 2017 at 9:06 AM
This is lovely..
Kiser Avatar
July 15, 2017 at 2:00 PM
Lovely flow and imagery.
Sivey Avatar
July 15, 2017 at 7:51 AM
You have done a wondrous job with this Haibun! This can be a very fun form to write in and you have made it look so easy...but it's not...and this one is very beautiful! I really like swans and they express beauty in just their nature! You have captured that with you poem! Very nicely done! Great Work!
Daniel Avatar
July 15, 2017 at 6:25 AM
A great haibun indicating peace, Constance:) lovely feeling of moving along the water:)
Smith Avatar
July 14, 2017 at 1:04 PM
Such a peaceful write BW, best wishes in the contest...
Sands Avatar
July 14, 2017 at 12:22 PM
Very nice Broken Wings. I really enjoyed this :)
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