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The trees are in their summer gowns and the woodlands are lush and green.
Under the summer sunshine the water mirrors the azure sky, and on the still
water, among the stones and reeds drift many swans.  I first saw them in Autumn
and made a count and had to re-count because of the cygnets, very difficult
with all those moving spins.  I have enjoyed these lovely birds, but now my heart
is sad for I know all will change when first they feel the cold. They will leave
flapping their wings over my head.  Lover by lover they paddle in cool waters for
now their cygnets following, mysterious and beautiful.  They rest among the
rushes by the lakes edge in quiet harmony, peaceful and unaware of the world.
 
delight in this day
soon the swans will have flown far-
p e a c e    but for the ducks

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July 14, 2017

Haibun/Beautiful and Mysterious
Copyright Protected, ID 920395

The Creative Collective Anthology Series
sponsor, Geraldine Taylor

First Place

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Written for the contest, Wordscapes
sponsor, John Lawless

Fourth Place

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017




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Date: 9/10/2017 6:28:00 AM
Beautiful, inimitable imagery this is! Congrats BW, for your well-deserved first placement in the contest! :-)
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Date: 9/7/2017 4:29:00 PM
So very nice, Broken Wings. ...peaceful and unaware of the world. What peace!
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Date: 9/7/2017 10:47:00 AM
Lovely, peaceful write, back to congratulate you...
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Date: 7/16/2017 9:50:00 PM
Could picture it all. Enjoyed. Peace except for the ducks,
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Date: 7/16/2017 8:42:00 PM
Delightful poem, Broken Wings! Good luck! :)
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Date: 7/16/2017 9:06:00 AM
This is lovely..
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Date: 7/15/2017 2:00:00 PM
Lovely flow and imagery.
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Date: 7/15/2017 7:51:00 AM
You have done a wondrous job with this Haibun! This can be a very fun form to write in and you have made it look so easy...but it's not...and this one is very beautiful! I really like swans and they express beauty in just their nature! You have captured that with you poem! Very nicely done! Great Work!
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Date: 7/15/2017 6:25:00 AM
A great haibun indicating peace, Constance:) lovely feeling of moving along the water:)
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Date: 7/14/2017 1:04:00 PM
Such a peaceful write BW, best wishes in the contest...
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Date: 7/14/2017 12:22:00 PM
Very nice Broken Wings. I really enjoyed this :)
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