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Be Still My Heart

Be still my heart, my eyes behold
Beauty like never seen,
Expressions I cannot withhold
Straight from Vogue magazine.

Her raven hair flows down
The bodice of her gown
Beneath a pouty frown,

I must depart,
Be still my heart.

FIRST PLACE WINNER
written August 31, 2021
for "Quietus-August 2021" Contest
sponsored by Unseeking Seeker
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Copyright © L Milton Hankins | Year Posted 2021

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Ann Peck Date: 10/8/2021 10:35:00 AM I love your poem -- beautiful but also brings a smile. Congratulations onj your win! Login to Reply L Milton Hankins Date: 10/8/2021 12:18:00 PM Thank you so much, Ann. Hope you had a fine week.

Christuraj Alex Date: 10/4/2021 9:23:00 AM Beautiful comparisons and Narration! Great work in few lines. Congratulations! Login to Reply L Milton Hankins Date: 10/4/2021 12:09:00 PM Thank you so much, Christuraj. You are very kind.

John Lawless Date: 10/4/2021 7:40:00 AM ...now put the magazine back under the mattress.....Milt, this had me laughing as I flashed back to teenage Playboy days Login to Reply L Milton Hankins Date: 10/4/2021 8:14:00 AM (chuckling) Glad you enjoyed it, John. I live alone, so need to hide my magazines! Golly, you reminded me of those National Geographic days, too, when that was my only access to naked humans!

Paula Goldsmith Date: 10/2/2021 12:24:00 PM Congratulations on your win. Your "Be Still My Heart" is a lovely write. Have a blessed day with your win............... Login to Reply L Milton Hankins Date: 10/2/2021 12:43:00 PM Thank you so much, Paula. It has been an especially good day for me!

Caren Krutsinger Date: 9/3/2021 10:45:00 AM Gorgeously done; a winner for sure. Login to Reply L Milton Hankins Date: 9/3/2021 10:45:00 AM Ah, thanks, Caren. I can hope!

Regina Mcintosh Date: 9/1/2021 11:38:00 AM Lovely write. God bless you always and I hope its a winner. Love, Gina Login to Reply L Milton Hankins Date: 9/1/2021 1:00:00 PM Gina, thanks so much. I always appreciate your comments.

Mike Gentile Date: 9/1/2021 10:00:00 AM I ike the way you rhymed with different patterns and stanza size, made it interesting to read, well done hood luck! Login to Reply L Milton Hankins Date: 9/1/2021 10:03:00 AM This is the "quietus" format I found in one of the contests. You should give it a try. I think the line syllables are 8-6-8-6, then 6-6-6 monorhyme and last rhyming couplet with equal number of syllables. Fun to work with.