Be Lightning

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Written: January 01st, 2023
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My diaphanous wallet held the moon,
a curious sensation rose in my chest
pale at night
I stole a 
massive cosmic cluster
for a tinge of ethereal light.
 
Secretly wears Saturn's rings
Venus continues her romance
brought me her prized assets
kissed quickly
planet Mars snuck through
discrete carrier bag,
dedicated to city redecorating.

Widespread cognizance prevailed
drape of wings and sapphire plume,
designed bespoke by the Seraphim
nimbus swirls and nebulous sky,
within the cosmic shower ring,
a sempiternal empyreal cherubic niche,
I swiftly seized it as it whizzed by.
 
5th place contest winner

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Susan Ashley

Date: 1/3/2024 6:23:00 PM

Dear Lasaad, it is such a pleasure for me to return with my heartiest congratulations for your wonderful win in Brian's contest with this amazing poem. So honored to share the podium with you, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Ink Empress

Date: 1/3/2024 7:08:00 AM

Ah Dr Sotto, congratulations on your well deserved win, you always write in such a deeply intriguing manner that leaves readers in awe inspired and captivated by the depth of your words woven in such eloquence. I love so many lines especially the astral theme that is so very ethereal. “ Venus continues her romance brought me her prized assets“ love that the most and also “ drape of wings and sapphire plume, designed bespoke by the Seraphim“ wow! The alliterations and diction here is impeccable

Silent One

Date: 1/2/2024 12:31:00 PM

Congratulations on your placement in the contest..

Bill Baker

Date: 1/2/2024 11:27:00 AM

A brilliant creation we are privileged to observer and be a part of my friend. I too, would like to seize it as it whizzed by. What a journey we could have exposed to the speed and beauty of the entire universe. Your vocabulary is exquisite as always and imagery painted a luminescent picture for us to see and feel. Thanks for sharing your gift of poetry with us. A poet friend in Texas, Bill

Silent One

Date: 1/2/2024 3:58:00 AM

Thats an interesting first line, does that mean you have a lot of money? Lol.. just kidding my friend.. another poem full of poetic verses that spring out of the page with imagery and flow.. nicely done my friend..

Susan Ashley

Date: 1/1/2024 7:01:00 PM

Be lightning, indeed! Dear Lasaad, your use of vivid poetic language to capture and re-release emotion and imagery upon the poetic page is truly astounding. Your exquisite poem is as enchanting as the night sky is ethereal - simply stunning, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

David Kavanagh

Date: 1/1/2024 3:39:00 PM

The firmament as seen through the illustrious eyes of a true poet, (a sempiternal empyreal cherubic niche) I hope one day I can seize one too, if I can see through our not so diaphanous light pollution, brilliant writing and diction as always, cheers David

Paige Hind

Date: 1/1/2024 3:26:00 PM

So ethereal and almost seems like I'm in a twilight zone. I am haunted by your verses. The whole poem is breathtaking.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 1/1/2024 12:52:00 PM

I enjoyed reading your wonderful "Be Lighting" write/great picture. May this be your best year ever. Have a blessed day writing away in 24................

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/1/2024 10:41:00 AM

Beautifully adorned in splendor of your vocabulary--your poem delights the cosmic journey. An exquisite write, my friend. Glad you have recovered from your hand surgery, Lasaad.