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Written: January 01st, 2023 __________________________________ My diaphanous wallet held the moon, a curious sensation rose in my chest pale at night I stole a massive cosmic cluster for a tinge of ethereal light. Secretly wears Saturn's rings Venus continues her romance brought me her prized assets kissed quickly planet Mars snuck through discrete carrier bag, dedicated to city redecorating. Widespread cognizance prevailed drape of wings and sapphire plume, designed bespoke by the Seraphim nimbus swirls and nebulous sky, within the cosmic shower ring, a sempiternal empyreal cherubic niche, I swiftly seized it as it whizzed by. 5th place contest winner

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Date: 1/3/2024 6:23:00 PM
Dear Lasaad, it is such a pleasure for me to return with my heartiest congratulations for your wonderful win in Brian's contest with this amazing poem. So honored to share the podium with you, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 1/3/2024 7:08:00 AM
Ah Dr Sotto, congratulations on your well deserved win, you always write in such a deeply intriguing manner that leaves readers in awe inspired and captivated by the depth of your words woven in such eloquence. I love so many lines especially the astral theme that is so very ethereal. “ Venus continues her romance brought me her prized assets“ love that the most and also “ drape of wings and sapphire plume, designed bespoke by the Seraphim“ wow! The alliterations and diction here is impeccable
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Date: 1/2/2024 12:31:00 PM
Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Date: 1/2/2024 11:27:00 AM
A brilliant creation we are privileged to observer and be a part of my friend. I too, would like to seize it as it whizzed by. What a journey we could have exposed to the speed and beauty of the entire universe. Your vocabulary is exquisite as always and imagery painted a luminescent picture for us to see and feel. Thanks for sharing your gift of poetry with us. A poet friend in Texas, Bill
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Date: 1/2/2024 3:58:00 AM
Thats an interesting first line, does that mean you have a lot of money? Lol.. just kidding my friend.. another poem full of poetic verses that spring out of the page with imagery and flow.. nicely done my friend..
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Date: 1/1/2024 7:01:00 PM
Be lightning, indeed! Dear Lasaad, your use of vivid poetic language to capture and re-release emotion and imagery upon the poetic page is truly astounding. Your exquisite poem is as enchanting as the night sky is ethereal - simply stunning, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 1/1/2024 3:56:00 PM
I truly enjoyed this 'cosmic' poem, Sotto. Reading it made me want to travel with the speed of light through the cosmos wanting to swiftly seize creativity (which I see as the lightening you mentioned) Maybe my initial interpretation is off base, but I liked how this poem made me feel. You're truly an amazing poet, Sotto. Have a great week, your poetess friend in Texas, Sara
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Date: 1/1/2024 3:39:00 PM
The firmament as seen through the illustrious eyes of a true poet, (a sempiternal empyreal cherubic niche) I hope one day I can seize one too, if I can see through our not so diaphanous light pollution, brilliant writing and diction as always, cheers David
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Date: 1/1/2024 3:26:00 PM
So ethereal and almost seems like I'm in a twilight zone. I am haunted by your verses. The whole poem is breathtaking.
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Date: 1/1/2024 12:52:00 PM
I enjoyed reading your wonderful "Be Lighting" write/great picture. May this be your best year ever. Have a blessed day writing away in 24................
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Date: 1/1/2024 10:41:00 AM
Beautifully adorned in splendor of your vocabulary--your poem delights the cosmic journey. An exquisite write, my friend. Glad you have recovered from your hand surgery, Lasaad.
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Date: 1/1/2024 9:42:00 AM
If cosmic showers are as beautiful as meteor showers, I'm all in. I love this planetary poem with all of it's otherworldly descriptions.
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