Bay Area Nigh December

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Bay Area Nigh December A tryst on a San Francisco trolley that exhibits penchant amidst a glance, for 'tis wintry time launch all, too jolly save two turtledoves, culled cooed romance left in steep devotion, neglects folly. Atone solemn occasions ere chapel doors left open, soul worshippers pass stained glass multicolored figurines, dapple its windows amidst Christmasy lights, trained eyes in wonder, gulp an adam's apple. Snowflakes patterned distinctly, blankets bare grounds painstakingly, changing verdant green to an achromatic dressed whitewash wear, rotating perspective picturesque scene consistent seasons shift that we now fare. The Golden Gate bridge, waning its glit of citrus rising, squirting into blind eyes forced to shades, now visibly shone 'twas love delicate trace of your countenance guise as it chalks a blackboard wrote from above. 2020 November 14 *8th Place* Quintain-Sicilian ~~Emile Pinet

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Jenna Logan

Date: 12/10/2020 2:58:00 PM

San Francisco is one of my favorite cites, and you've highlighted some of it's most amazing features in your winning lines. Congratulations, William.

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/10/2020 3:56:00 PM

Thank you, Jenna, I am glad that we agree about San Francisco as being one of the favorite cities, beautiful all around, thanks again, Aloha!

Jan Allison

Date: 12/9/2020 2:55:00 PM

I would love to visit the US and see San Francisco for real. love the imagery William many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/9/2020 3:06:00 PM

Thank you, Jan, though I may have left more than my heart there, like one of the kids and her family--I'm sure that it will be memorable, my friend, Aloha!

Sam Kauffman

Date: 12/9/2020 11:05:00 AM

Congratulations William on your win! Your imagery is lush with the richness of your scenery. San Francisco is a great backdrop for your words! Aloha my friend!

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/9/2020 11:52:00 AM

Thank you, Sam, as 'twas home once upon a time, though cold, it never snowed there in all my years in the bay area, thanks again my friend, Aloha!

Emile Pinet

Date: 12/9/2020 8:37:00 AM

Congratulations William, your poem earned a distinguished place in my contest, well done my friend, Emile.

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/9/2020 9:26:00 AM

Thank you, Emile, for the opportunity and placement, Aloha!

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 11/14/2020 10:59:00 AM

A beautiful Quintain (Sicilian ) William. Love the poem and moving picture, good luck for the contest... Belle

Hilo Poet
Date: 11/14/2020 7:21:00 PM

Many thanks, Belle, I was inspired by yours -- looks like a winner, best wishes to you too my friend, Aloha!