Barricade

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I built my shrine ...
        My brittle heart, sheltered to hide
      Choked so often by trust's entangled vine
        Strong stones, placed side-by-side ...
  I raised each wall sound and tall for my castle keep
  The parapets high, the foundations sure and deep
    Yet ... it all crumbled to a heap ...
  With but a single soft press of your lips ... to mine.





~ 3rd Place ~  in the "Writing Challenge 1, June 2019, Crumbling Rhyme" Poetry Contest, Dear Heart, Judge & Sponsor.

* This is a form called Crumbling Rhyme, created by the sponsor *

(Syllables = 4, 8, 10, 6, 12, 12, 8, 12, counted at HowManySyllables.com)

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Constance La France

Date: 6/30/2019 6:33:00 PM

Greg congratulations on your win in my writing challenge with this excellent write and sorry for the delay in visiting ~

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/30/2019 9:23:00 PM

Thank you very much, Constance, for my placement and your kind words ... this was a fun challenge and I enjoyed it very much! Blessings, my friend! :o) <3

Jan Allison

Date: 6/30/2019 5:50:00 PM

absolutely exquisite Greg congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/30/2019 9:22:00 PM

Oh, thank you so much, Jan, that's very sweet of you ... blessings, friend! :o) <3

Susan Ashley

Date: 6/25/2019 8:27:00 PM

Your swoon-worthy poem leaves me breathless, Gregory. I was captured by your passionate muse from start to exquisite finish. Congratulations on your wonderful win with this enchanting romantic piece. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/30/2019 9:21:00 PM

This is such a wonderful comment, Susan, and I thank you so much ... I'm very pleased that you liked this one, and grateful that you took the time to read and comment! Blessings, Dear Poet! :o) <3

Jeanne Mcgee

Date: 6/25/2019 4:27:00 PM

This is one of my favs of the poems submitted. So poetic. each line leads t the next to crumble at the last. Love It Gregory. Congratulations on your placement.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/30/2019 9:20:00 PM

Thank you SO much, Jeanne, I greatly appreciate the kind words ... I'm so happy that you liked my poem! Blessings, my friend! :o) <3