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Bad Bargain Made

I welcome death I'm not afraid Ten years within this cell I've stayed My wealth immense a cruel game's been played Innocent but still a debt it must be paid For with the Devil I have made a trade A life of fame and fortune weighed It seems my selfish nature I obeyed I watched as all I had was on parade By truth the jury could not be swayed Soon in a grave my body will be laid Halloween Monorhyme contest October 24th 2017

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Vladislav Raven

Date: 11/16/2018 9:32:00 AM

Hi Richard, this is a creatively wonderful write from your pen. Your words paint a living canvas. Such powerful thoughts displayed. I have had times when I would have made a bargain with the Devil, Instead, I reached out to God and I am glad I did. An amazing work my friend. Has to be a fave. Have a wonderful Friday. Your friend always....Mike.

Eve Roper

Date: 2/10/2018 2:44:00 PM

Congratulations on your win, Richard , enjoyed reading! Not wise to make a trade with the Devil :-( Hugs Eve ~`*

Tom Cunningham

Date: 2/8/2018 1:54:00 AM

Well you won't be cold where you're going. Congratulations Richard Regards Tom

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/8/2018 8:09:00 AM

Thanks Tom.

Line Gauthier

Date: 2/5/2018 8:16:00 PM

Congrats on your winning poem, Richard.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/8/2018 8:09:00 AM

Thanks Line.

Alexis Y.

Date: 2/5/2018 7:09:00 PM

Hi Richard, Your title alone compelled me to read this well written piece. Nothing good can can from selling your soul to the devil. Thanks for participating in my contest. Congratulations on your 1st place win in my contest:-) Alexis

Joanna Daniel

Date: 10/31/2017 9:56:00 AM

I agree with Eileen here, even I was reminded of Dr. Faustus, well written monorhyme, Richard:) and I like monorhymes:)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/4/2018 1:22:00 AM

Thanks Jo, somehow I missed this comment. Thanks for the visit.

Becca Teagan

Date: 10/26/2017 9:32:00 PM

Not a good thing, when we obey our selfish nature ;) I am not crazy about monorhyme poems, but this is a good one for the contest!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/27/2017 7:55:00 AM

Hi Becca, not my favorite form as well. Thanks for the visit Becca.

Kudzai Mhangwa

Date: 10/26/2017 10:01:00 AM

Nice poem Richard! All the best in the contest

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/27/2017 7:55:00 AM

Thanks Kudzai

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/25/2017 7:22:00 PM

That was a great tale you told in monorhyme, Richard. Sold his soul and even truth can't save him!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/27/2017 7:59:00 AM

Thanks Andrea.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 10/25/2017 5:51:00 PM

Oh Dear....This reminds me of the play Dr Faustus by Christopher Marlowe. We went over that in my literature class. Making deals with the devil only ends in heartache. So happy I know the author of this poem! I know your faith would never allow that, dear. :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/27/2017 8:00:00 AM

Yep, no deal with the devil for me. Have a great weekend Eileen. Hugs Rick.

John Gondolf

Date: 10/25/2017 1:30:00 PM

Enjoyed your devilish little monorhyme, Richard. Good luck in the contest.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/25/2017 1:33:00 PM

Thanks John.

Janis Thompson

Date: 10/25/2017 1:26:00 PM

Would be good for the Dark II contest also if monorhyme is judged soon which is very likely. Deals with the devil are a sad, sad thing. Best wishes for this contest also.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/25/2017 1:33:00 PM

Thanks Janice.

Silent One

Date: 10/25/2017 5:45:00 AM

Dark write, never make a bargain with the devil...

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/25/2017 8:46:00 AM

No worries!

Russell Sivey

Date: 10/25/2017 3:29:00 AM

Yes! I love Halloween poetry! And yours is full of Halloween treats! I just loved the way you wove that tremendous selfish nature and Devilish trade within this poem! I also liked the way you portrayed that even with fame and fortune life still doesn't improve! What a brilliant piece, Great Work!!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/25/2017 8:47:00 AM

Hi Russell, this comment coming from the master of Halloween is a true treat. Thanks for visiting. It is good to have you back posting again Russell.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 10/24/2017 6:54:00 PM

Hi Richard, oh I like this, now I know for sure this isn't you!!! You are too wise to be this person! I also made a bad bargain, but just at the dollar store!! Great write!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/24/2017 6:58:00 PM

Ha ha, I like your sense of humor Arthur.