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One quick lethal blow One tormenting flash A taste of the pain Should we ever part Harsh poison chalice Steer far from my lips AP: 2nd place 2020 Submitted on December 18, 2017 for A DECEMBER STANDARD CONTEST sponsored by BRIAN STRAND

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Date: 12/20/2017 7:08:00 AM
I read this in several ways Line. A strong write. In a realistic abusive relationship it seems physical violence against a woman with a threat of more if she leaves, but, in a psychotic female mind it could be read as her threat to him if he leaves. Love the duality of the piece.
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Date: 12/20/2017 10:00:00 PM
So ideal for the reader to become the co-creator. Thanks - good teamwork, James.
Date: 12/19/2017 9:06:00 AM
This piece should do well. Good luck in Brian’s contest.
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Date: 12/19/2017 9:44:00 AM
Thanks, Richard.
Date: 12/18/2017 12:20:00 PM
Very powerful, Line. I love the last two lines especially, Good Luck !!
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Date: 12/18/2017 10:01:00 PM
Thanks, Mike. Much appreciated.
Date: 12/18/2017 10:20:00 AM
Potent penning! My best to you dear poetess :) xomo
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Date: 12/18/2017 11:15:00 AM
Thank you so much, Maureen.
Date: 12/18/2017 1:50:00 AM
- A powerful little poem, Line - Best wishes in the contest - Merry Christmas, enjoy your holiday with joy and peace :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 12/18/2017 11:16:00 AM
Thank you so much, Anne-Lise. Very best wishes to you as well.

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