Baby Shalom's Shattered Dreams

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Daddy, mommy, why are you laying me down on the grave?
I was dreaming before that you’ll be putting me in my cozy crib.

Are you so remorseful and that's the reason you are crying?
I’m only five months old trying to understand  your feeling.

You got married so young and you didn’t know what to do
You didn’t  take care of me in your womb but, still I love you so.

I was dreaming and wishing you to nurture me with your love
Give all the things I need until I grow and make you proud.

I am so deeply wounded,  but I forgive you with what you did
I’ll just be your little angle to guide you both and your next kid.

As we bid  goodbye then , bring with you my shattered dreams
I do plead, to my brothers or sisters make them whole again.

Daddy, mommy, thank you so much for my very  beautiful name
Don’t forget your Baby Shalom whose love will forever be the same.




First Place
Contest: Unborn Babies Dream
Judged: 10/14/2012
Poet Sponsor: Scribe Marlon Linton

Written: Oct. 11,2012

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 10/19/2012 1:37:00 AM
THANKXXX LEONORA FOR YOUR VERY SWEET COMMENTS LUV .. HAPPY BLESSED WEEKEND TOO..
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Date: 10/18/2012 10:22:00 PM
NEW SOUP MAIL........... my SUPER BFF..... XOX~PD
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Date: 10/18/2012 2:38:00 PM
hmmm, I wonder if you have any poems I have not seen. I will look thru the list. Maybe Ihave seen all your poems, but I really enjoy them and hope to see many more new ones from you. Luv, Andrea
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Date: 10/18/2012 12:05:00 PM
A nice sentiment of unconditional love Leonora - I suppose the infant's spirit hasn't learned to grudge - J.A.B. %
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Date: 10/18/2012 10:46:00 AM
So touching. It echoes in our hearts.
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Date: 10/18/2012 6:51:00 AM
poignant write Leonora.... A belated congrats ......
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Date: 10/18/2012 6:26:00 AM
Very emotive and expressive work..That would be a very hard life experience to deal with at any age..Great topic chosen on which to pen some lines..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Date: 10/18/2012 2:59:00 AM
such a sorroeful pight for a child who wanted to live....a beautiful, intense write, leonora.:) huggs!
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Date: 10/18/2012 3:00:00 AM
super congrats, wow!..:)
Date: 10/17/2012 2:15:00 PM
wow, such a sad one, and just what this unborn infant would want for the parents, full of innocence having no ill will! congrats on the win.
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Date: 10/16/2012 12:30:00 PM
Congratulations on your win in the "Unborn Babies Dream" contest Loenora. Love, Carol
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Date: 10/15/2012 11:52:00 AM
Many congrats Leonora on winning the contest, "Unborn babies dream" by Linton. Best wishes - Hitendra Mehta
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Date: 10/15/2012 11:11:00 AM
Congrad's on your winning write. Light & Love
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Date: 10/14/2012 8:46:00 PM
Hola Leonora stopping by to say hi, and that i miss stopping by your work,,, sorry I have not been around in days. I'm having family sadness.. However, i will fully return in a few days, I'm only stopping by to make sure you do not forget me..JK... About your poem:your poem, is a very sad .. the beginning of your poem, is a corner stone, I had engraved once in my past life... Like I said earlier, congrats with your wonderful win,,xox~PD
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Date: 10/14/2012 8:30:00 PM
BIG BIG Congratulations on your win my dear friend Norie. so touch with this awesome poem of yours. Hugs! **Maria**
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Date: 10/14/2012 7:37:00 PM
Very touching, lovely. Congratulations on your win. lee
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Date: 10/14/2012 7:28:00 PM
Hi Leonora,,,MISS YOU... had family sadness.. stopping by to , congratulate you with your deep and wonderful win in THE SCRIBE'S "Unborn Babies Dream" contest. Have yourself a good night~ PD
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Date: 10/14/2012 6:51:00 PM
So sad, I hear the little voice and wonder how many times this happens. You picked a tearjerker to tell Leonora.
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Date: 10/14/2012 4:09:00 PM
WARM CONGRATS LEONORA ON A SPLENDID WRITE AND TOP NOTCH WIN .. ELEGANT PERFECTION SWEET.
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Date: 10/12/2012 9:57:00 AM
Leonora; This is just so beautiful. I tbrings tears to one's eyes. It is very heartfelt. You should enter it in the contest. Leonora, I work with a man that is from Thailand. We get all of our shipments from Thailand. I am glad that you like my poem. Lucy
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Date: 10/12/2012 8:20:00 AM
i have no words to say how touching your poem is. As a midwife I see such sorrow. good luck Seren
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Date: 10/12/2012 6:45:00 AM
For a grief and losing her unborn child, no one knows how big the grief can be without even having experienced it. - A very sensitive subject, describing it lovingly and very well Leonora. - I wish you good luck in contest - hope you win. - Have a beautiful day. - oxox love Anne-Lise :)
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