Away

Softly she enters the path into wood
Dressed in summer's white linen, black hat unband
Toddlers follow, these of her motherhood

In bloom today trees ..dogwoods, cottonwood
She carries her butterfly net in hand
Softly she enters the path into wood

Tiny little girls become sisterhood
Drawn to nature are they, bugs, blooms, and
Toddlers follow, these of her motherhood

She spies butterflies in the thick hardwood
Escape today,  play her spirit's demand
Softly she enters the path into wood

Away from the creekside where sometimes flood
Away into the scary woods not planned
Toddlers follow, these of her motherhood

Away she goes into the deep away 
Stray away from everyday dismay
Softly she enters the path into wood
Toddlers follow, these of her motherhood

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 3/24/2010 6:00:00 PM
Such a lovely write. Enjoyed very much
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Date: 3/24/2010 1:57:00 PM
Lovely poem Sara, lovely picture also >> James
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Date: 3/24/2010 12:06:00 PM
A WONDERFUL WRITE.. I AM SORRY ABOUT THE POEM ..I JUST DID NOT LIKE HER 2 CALL ME A -HO- On THE SOUP. ALSO SHE TOLD MY DAUGHTER COMMENT THAT HAVE NO TO BE SAID ON THE SOUP. ENJOYED thank u 4 u comment . SARA
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Date: 3/24/2010 8:27:00 AM
How nicely written, Sara! Bringing back memories of the Australian movie when some girls of a boarding school dissappeared in caves in New South Wales (soory, forget the title!). They were wearing white dresses. Maybe you've seen the movie...Thank you for your comments...Gert
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Date: 3/24/2010 4:23:00 AM
This is beautiful. I think it would win in Brian's contest. Sara, you have written well this villanelle. It is one of my many favorite forms. I love repeating line forms. And this one moves along so smoothly that the repetitions are subtle. EXCELLENT! Smiles, Dane Ann
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Date: 3/23/2010 8:22:00 PM
Very nice, Sara! What a great creation of this form. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes, Caroline.
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Date: 3/23/2010 4:39:00 PM
Happy Birthday Sara.. I see Doris commented so and want to extend my wishes also... enjoyed your latest write... see u on PP..luv.. Linda-Marie..
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Date: 3/23/2010 3:59:00 PM
enjoyed mom Happy Birthday
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Date: 3/23/2010 2:13:00 PM
An interesting write. Not a style you see often. I really have to get into some of these forms of poetry. God Bless PHyl
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Date: 3/23/2010 1:52:00 PM
Unusual syle. I like mucho. Adds a charming touch of daring and mystery. LOve, daver
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Date: 3/23/2010 9:33:00 AM
VERY NICE WRITE LOVED IT FALESHIA
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Date: 3/23/2010 9:25:00 AM
"The Butterfly Hunt" by Berthe Morisot (1841-1895/French) Oil on canvas.. Written after seeing this painting..Sara
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