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Autumn's Bar Mitzvah

. Out mine vindow as if i breaking some fast Mine eyne devour The she In the vind’s gust az vind does with ease cause lift hern she * ("vind": wind, etc.) artistic license mine poetic friendz '' '' ;) james

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 3/12/2023 10:06:00 AM

A creative write. Have a blessed day writing away.............

James Peranteau
Date: 7/6/2023 11:36:00 AM

;)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/17/2022 11:44:00 AM

It just dawned with me that you are writing like someone with an accent. So which nationality is it that uses V in place of W. Hmmm

James Peranteau
Date: 10/17/2022 12:33:00 PM

vell, let me think for a second here vooman...this iz driving me nuts! I'll get back to you with that answer later ;)

Joe Maverick

Date: 10/15/2022 8:09:00 PM

A good vind-ication as summer takes its Vacation James.' Are these two women in This write btw? The wind and the season? I can't see you keeping such a State of affairs Going without getting all puffed out you know.'

James Peranteau
Date: 10/16/2022 7:22:00 PM

you are half right dear poet...the boy wuz preening himself preparing to announce that this day, he would be the man; and az he wuz adjusting his tie, he looked out his bedroom window and there she wuz, pretty az can be! Likewise with the wind's help(lifting her skirt)the almost man, received his first thought...."it's great to be a man"! Have a great Vinter sir...much love, james