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For JCB Brul Autumn Reverie contest

In the season of change, so many see delight - but all I see is death.

Silent One.

Image by Abyss taken from Google

 

Autumnal Angst

autumn's palette colours fauna and flora - amber and brown shades spread

golden flames too timid to enkindle - last rose turns rusty from red

tears of mercy bleed from heaven's garden - dewdrops drip on naked thorns

clouds compose in charcoal clumps of miserable gloom - chill in the air

in the silence of mute birds - flock of feathers emigrate - meadows sleep 

moon shivers in lonesome polluted horizons - darkness veils daylight

morning frost shrouds evergreen foliage - icicles and iced cobwebs

inhale arctic zephyrs from blustery breeze - breathe out white bitter breaths

gently nature expires leaving a trail of decay - kingdom of death
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Kendrick Avatar
November 21, 2023 at 12:19 PM
That winter sounds like a rough one. Very descriptive and the two seasons. I am glad that I chose this one to read today. Thanks for sharing it with us. Sara K
Slaughter Avatar
November 9, 2023 at 10:16 AM
Beautifully ethereal and rather mournful at the same time, S O.
Empress Avatar
November 8, 2023 at 11:25 AM
Back with congratulations! Well deserved win! Your string of monokus really are brilliant! Top fave! Love it
Goldsmith Avatar
November 8, 2023 at 9:04 AM
Back with Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your "Autumnal Angst" write again. Enjoy your day/win writing away........
Ray Choudhury Avatar
November 8, 2023 at 5:26 AM
Congratulations on your win. Sending to my faves. BW ~ Mala
Fowler Avatar
November 5, 2023 at 5:53 PM
Your string of Monoku and accompanying picture is stunning. There is so much life in death...nicely done! :)
Dietrich Avatar
October 31, 2023 at 10:48 AM
wow, you wrote many monoku here. You are so creative, S. O.
Hind Avatar
October 30, 2023 at 5:58 PM
I was almost mourning with this poem. You wrote it beautifully...
Goldsmith Avatar
October 29, 2023 at 8:11 AM
I love how your "Autumnal Angst" tells a wonderful story through the many Monoku lines. Very Creative... The quote/picture shows death for autumn but new life will be here for spring. A FAV for me. Have a wonderful day writing away..................
Delaney Avatar
October 28, 2023 at 1:54 PM
All these images are so real and their darkness is real and yet beauty has many faces. Suddenly the suns rays will light up the icy cobweb. I’ll bet you have a nice smile, SO.
Poet Avatar
October 28, 2023 at 11:57 AM
Simply said, dear friend, you are outstanding in every respect. Despite the sentence syllable restrictions, the beautiful images flow together naturally. Blessings
Pandit Avatar
October 28, 2023 at 6:31 AM
Excellent in both form and substance, my friend. Splendid images--seamlessly woven despite the syllable constraints.
One Avatar
October 28, 2023 at 10:16 AM
Thank you Vijay..
Mcintosh Avatar
October 28, 2023 at 4:28 AM
My favorite - morning frost shrouds evergreen foliage - icicles and iced cobwebs - just love these. You always aspire to inspire. Love and prayers, Gina
One Avatar
October 28, 2023 at 10:16 AM
Thank you Gina.
Empress Avatar
October 28, 2023 at 3:20 AM
Wow this is too good! I wrote mine too but havent posted and now as i read yours i feel like mine is nothing! You’ve highlighted all aspects of autumn in sheer poetic eloquence! Its like you do this effortlessly! I guess, it comes easy for the silent one! I especially love rusty roses and thorns and also how moon shivers. And that last monoku! Gosh i have no words im speechless! The imagery and how artistic it is is beyond impeccable and has a delicate soft touch. And ofcourse alliterations
One Avatar
October 28, 2023 at 10:17 AM
I'm not worthy of such praise.. Thank you for your kind comment.
Empress Avatar
October 28, 2023 at 3:22 AM
All giving this a very poetic vibe! Through and through! I am in awe inspired to make my monoku even better as i read this! You truly inspire so many . And you have an eye for nature and its palette of colors and you splash them so vividly with words
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