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For JCB Brul Autumn Reverie contest

In the season of change, so many see delight - but all I see is death.

Silent One.

Image by Abyss taken from Google

autumn's palette colours fauna and flora - amber and brown shades spread golden flames too timid to enkindle - last rose turns rusty from red tears of mercy bleed from heaven's garden - dewdrops drip on naked thorns clouds compose in charcoal clumps of miserable gloom - chill in the air in the silence of mute birds - flock of feathers emigrate - meadows sleep moon shivers in lonesome polluted horizons - darkness veils daylight morning frost shrouds evergreen foliage - icicles and iced cobwebs inhale arctic zephyrs from blustery breeze - breathe out white bitter breaths gently nature expires leaving a trail of decay - kingdom of death

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/21/2023 12:19:00 PM

That winter sounds like a rough one. Very descriptive and the two seasons. I am glad that I chose this one to read today. Thanks for sharing it with us. Sara K

Jim Slaughter

Date: 11/9/2023 10:16:00 AM

Beautifully ethereal and rather mournful at the same time, S O.

Ink Empress

Date: 11/8/2023 11:25:00 AM

Back with congratulations! Well deserved win! Your string of monokus really are brilliant! Top fave! Love it

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 11/8/2023 9:04:00 AM

Back with Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your "Autumnal Angst" write again. Enjoy your day/win writing away........

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 11/8/2023 5:26:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. Sending to my faves. BW ~ Mala

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 11/5/2023 5:53:00 PM

Your string of Monoku and accompanying picture is stunning. There is so much life in death...nicely done! :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/31/2023 10:48:00 AM

wow, you wrote many monoku here. You are so creative, S. O.

Paige Hind

Date: 10/30/2023 5:58:00 PM

I was almost mourning with this poem. You wrote it beautifully...

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 10/29/2023 8:11:00 AM

I love how your "Autumnal Angst" tells a wonderful story through the many Monoku lines. Very Creative... The quote/picture shows death for autumn but new life will be here for spring. A FAV for me. Have a wonderful day writing away..................

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 10/28/2023 1:54:00 PM

All these images are so real and their darkness is real and yet beauty has many faces. Suddenly the suns rays will light up the icy cobweb. I’ll bet you have a nice smile, SO.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 10/28/2023 1:10:00 PM

a stunning and brilliantly created Monoku. I loved every line; the imagery evoked deep feelings within me--the darkness and muteness that comes with the onset of winter. I loved, "in the silence of mute birds - flock of feathers emigrate - meadows sleep. Just seeing fall disappear from the landscape makes me sad; I feel a little dead inside and even a tad moody. Your poem spoke to me on so many levels. Faving it. Hope you have a wonderful evening, Sara

Sotto Poet

Date: 10/28/2023 11:57:00 AM

Simply said, dear friend, you are outstanding in every respect. Despite the sentence syllable restrictions, the beautiful images flow together naturally. Blessings

Di11y Da11y

Date: 10/28/2023 9:44:00 AM

Go on then, I am pretty much Autumned out now and didn't think there was another word that could now be written. However I'm a massive fan of ice laden webs and felt the sadness of dew on a thorn. I shall offer my hand to shake for a job well done on this one. No doubt it will place highly :)

Silent One
Date: 10/28/2023 10:16:00 AM

Thank you, appreciate your feedback.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 10/28/2023 6:31:00 AM

Excellent in both form and substance, my friend. Splendid images--seamlessly woven despite the syllable constraints.

Silent One
Date: 10/28/2023 10:16:00 AM

Thank you Vijay..

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 10/28/2023 4:28:00 AM

My favorite - morning frost shrouds evergreen foliage - icicles and iced cobwebs - just love these. You always aspire to inspire. Love and prayers, Gina

Silent One
Date: 10/28/2023 10:16:00 AM

Thank you Gina.

Ink Empress

Date: 10/28/2023 3:20:00 AM

Wow this is too good! I wrote mine too but havent posted and now as i read yours i feel like mine is nothing! You’ve highlighted all aspects of autumn in sheer poetic eloquence! Its like you do this effortlessly! I guess, it comes easy for the silent one! I especially love rusty roses and thorns and also how moon shivers. And that last monoku! Gosh i have no words im speechless! The imagery and how artistic it is is beyond impeccable and has a delicate soft touch. And ofcourse alliterations

Silent One
Date: 10/28/2023 10:17:00 AM

I'm not worthy of such praise.. Thank you for your kind comment.

Ink Empress
Date: 10/28/2023 3:22:00 AM

All giving this a very poetic vibe! Through and through! I am in awe inspired to make my monoku even better as i read this! You truly inspire so many . And you have an eye for nature and its palette of colors and you splash them so vividly with words