Autumnal

She rode her bike into Autumnal n ightmares. One moment she’s looking up at the leaves, the next she’s on the ground d ead, well she wishes she was… A fter she was captivated, she was c aptured. She was stored in a c abinet like a piece of broken c hina. C ampers gathered and searched for her. A f ingerprint was a c lue- a note left and the young girl was found… she is l ost. Will she ever feel s afe again? Her childhoo d is O V E R - now she knows there are M onsters. Knowing what she will find, the d ust under the bed gathers for a l ifetime. The b east is b ehind b ars!

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Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/5/2023 11:11:00 AM

- When all ends well... grateful that he was caught - Congratulations on your win in the contest, Kim :) - hugs

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 10/5/2023 8:45:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. WOW!!! What an "Autumnal" sad write/story. "Great Job" Have a blessed day writing away....................

Vijay Pandit

Date: 10/4/2023 5:35:00 AM

Thankfully she is safe. Monsters lurking everywhere. You gave that family a voice here, Kim. Sad but it did happen.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/4/2023 5:54:00 AM

Gulping…oh how we wish there was no monsters. Thank you kindly, Vijay.

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 10/4/2023 2:50:00 AM

Dreadful things happen all over the world. We are happy when the monster is defeated with no loss of life. Your poems get better and better. Hugs and blessings xx

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/4/2023 5:54:00 AM

Thank you for the encouragement, Victor! I so appreciate you <3

Paige Hind

Date: 10/3/2023 2:38:00 PM

A very graphic poem....glad they caught him.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/3/2023 6:46:00 PM

One…child is safe. Glad she is. There are others out there… tears

Joseph May

Date: 10/3/2023 9:43:00 AM

Glad they caught the monster, You captured he stoery well Kim

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/3/2023 11:37:00 AM

Thank you, Joe!

Sally Eslinger

Date: 10/3/2023 8:56:00 AM

Wow! The scene described! The story told! The creative concept! The words & symbols chosen! Amazing work! Paula, this is original!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/3/2023 9:03:00 AM

A recent news item! So scary! So sad! Oh…such things should not happen! My heart hurts and breaks for this girl! But at least she is with her loved ones now.