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Grateful thanks to Demetrios for helping me to make my haiku even better by amending the final line:-)

Autumn Haiku

withered leaves falling
carpet of autumnal bliss
adorning the ground 

Jan Allison
23rd October 2014

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Matthew Anish

October 24, 2014 at 3:12 PM

Nice haiku! You stuck to the 5 75 haiku form - which is all to the good. Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Jan Allison

October 24, 2014 at 3:17 PM

Thanks for the lovely comment Matthew - i always use the 5 7 5 format:-) Hugs jan xxx

Liam Mcdaid

October 24, 2014 at 11:09 AM

such a beautiful picture jan you painted

Jan Allison

October 24, 2014 at 12:14 PM

Thanks so much for the lovely comment Liam:-) Hugs Jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis

October 24, 2014 at 5:38 AM

A wonderful Haiku worthy of Autumn! Excellent, dear Jan! Hugs

Jan Allison

October 24, 2014 at 7:32 AM

Thank you so much Demetrios:-) Hugs jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

October 24, 2014 at 12:13 AM

I agree Jan...autumn is bliss!

Jan Allison

October 24, 2014 at 2:54 AM

Thanks for dropping by to comment Connie:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Brenda Meier-Hans

October 23, 2014 at 8:55 PM

Sounds like you seen my front yard Jan. Nice Haiku.

Jan Allison

October 24, 2014 at 2:53 AM

LOL Brenda thanks for dropping by:-) Hugs Jan xxx

M. L. Kiser

October 23, 2014 at 5:08 PM

They truly are "nocturnal bliss".

Jan Allison

October 23, 2014 at 5:10 PM

Thanks for dropping by ML Hugs Jan xxx

Phyllis Babcock

October 23, 2014 at 4:26 PM

Nice description of autumn in this haiku. Leaves are almost all down here in Sask. and I am not looking forward to snow. love phyl

Jan Allison

October 23, 2014 at 4:31 PM

yes same here on the Isle of Man where I live - hopefully we won't get snow this year:-) hugs Jan xxx

James Fraser

October 23, 2014 at 3:58 PM

Love this Autumn Haiku Jan, my favourite season captured splendidly in your words, James :) xx

James Fraser

October 23, 2014 at 4:28 PM

Understandable when you look outside, it's very hard not to, James xxxx

Jan Allison

October 23, 2014 at 4:01 PM

Thanks James I'm having an autumnal day have written two poems on it today:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

October 23, 2014 at 11:18 AM

- Lovely haiku, dear Jan ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison

October 23, 2014 at 11:20 AM

Thanks so much Anne Lise - yours this morning was simply exquisite:-) hugs Jan xxx

Frederic Parker

October 23, 2014 at 10:44 AM

Nice picture of autumn, I live in florida so it's a carpet I don't have to clean any more

Jan Allison

October 23, 2014 at 10:56 AM

Oh Florida how simply wonderful. I've visited twice - such a beautiful beautiful place:-) Hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

October 23, 2014 at 10:03 AM

A well veiled sexual metaphor. Withered and falling your lover leaves. Your neighbor Greg Autumnal drops in for a cup of sugar. You give it to him. Right there in the living room. Carpet of Autumnal bliss lying on the ground sexually spent. One heck of a nature haiku because after all it is our nature to love. Or it has something to do with autumn? Haha, wink, wink, nod,nod, say no more, say no more...

Jan Allison

October 23, 2014 at 10:29 AM

Shhhhh Maurice my dear you are giving away all my secrets! Hugs Jan xxx