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Autumn Haiku

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Grateful thanks to Demetrios for helping me to make my haiku even better by amending the final line:-)

withered leaves falling
carpet of autumnal bliss
adorning the ground 

Jan Allison
23rd October 2014

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Matthew Anish

Date: 10/24/2014 3:12:00 PM

Nice haiku! You stuck to the 5 75 haiku form - which is all to the good. Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Jan Allison
Date: 10/24/2014 3:17:00 PM

Thanks for the lovely comment Matthew - i always use the 5 7 5 format:-) Hugs jan xxx

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 10/24/2014 11:09:00 AM

such a beautiful picture jan you painted

Jan Allison
Date: 10/24/2014 12:14:00 PM

Thanks so much for the lovely comment Liam:-) Hugs Jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 10/24/2014 5:38:00 AM

A wonderful Haiku worthy of Autumn! Excellent, dear Jan! Hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 10/24/2014 7:32:00 AM

Thank you so much Demetrios:-) Hugs jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 10/24/2014 12:13:00 AM

I agree Jan...autumn is bliss!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/24/2014 2:54:00 AM

Thanks for dropping by to comment Connie:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 10/23/2014 8:55:00 PM

Sounds like you seen my front yard Jan. Nice Haiku.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/24/2014 2:53:00 AM

LOL Brenda thanks for dropping by:-) Hugs Jan xxx

M. L. Kiser

Date: 10/23/2014 5:08:00 PM

They truly are "nocturnal bliss".

Jan Allison
Date: 10/23/2014 5:10:00 PM

Thanks for dropping by ML Hugs Jan xxx

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 10/23/2014 4:26:00 PM

Nice description of autumn in this haiku. Leaves are almost all down here in Sask. and I am not looking forward to snow. love phyl

Jan Allison
Date: 10/23/2014 4:31:00 PM

yes same here on the Isle of Man where I live - hopefully we won't get snow this year:-) hugs Jan xxx

James Fraser

Date: 10/23/2014 3:58:00 PM

Love this Autumn Haiku Jan, my favourite season captured splendidly in your words, James :) xx

James Fraser
Date: 10/23/2014 4:28:00 PM

Understandable when you look outside, it's very hard not to, James xxxx

Jan Allison
Date: 10/23/2014 4:01:00 PM

Thanks James I'm having an autumnal day have written two poems on it today:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/23/2014 11:18:00 AM

- Lovely haiku, dear Jan ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/23/2014 11:20:00 AM

Thanks so much Anne Lise - yours this morning was simply exquisite:-) hugs Jan xxx

Frederic Parker

Date: 10/23/2014 10:44:00 AM

Nice picture of autumn, I live in florida so it's a carpet I don't have to clean any more

Jan Allison
Date: 10/23/2014 10:56:00 AM

Oh Florida how simply wonderful. I've visited twice - such a beautiful beautiful place:-) Hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 10/23/2014 10:03:00 AM

A well veiled sexual metaphor. Withered and falling your lover leaves. Your neighbor Greg Autumnal drops in for a cup of sugar. You give it to him. Right there in the living room. Carpet of Autumnal bliss lying on the ground sexually spent. One heck of a nature haiku because after all it is our nature to love. Or it has something to do with autumn? Haha, wink, wink, nod,nod, say no more, say no more...

Jan Allison
Date: 10/23/2014 10:29:00 AM

Shhhhh Maurice my dear you are giving away all my secrets! Hugs Jan xxx