Au Revoir


Blood
drips
cold
through
breathless
necrotic
lips,



au revoir.




11/09/2017

deathfree verse

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Debbie Duncan

March 15, 2018 at 12:34 AM

very interesting imaginative write :) thank you for your nice comments :)

James Inman

March 15, 2018 at 8:43 AM

Meant to be a question about life and death. au revoir (roughly meaning until we meet again) suggests that death may not be the end, but if we continue past death what awaits us, heaven? a vampyric life? ghost? some unknowable dimensional existence where our "soul" mingles with the molecules of the universe and we become the new life that forms on other worlds? Who knows. (Sorry, got a bit existential there). Thanks for the visit.

Laura Breidenthal

November 15, 2017 at 9:49 PM

"Necrotic" - A word we don't see everyday, and a great one to use in a poem! Powerful one, James. Always, Laura

James Inman

November 16, 2017 at 6:22 AM

Thank you again Laura.

Eileen Manassian

November 14, 2017 at 10:54 AM

Yes...the shape of blood. What an interesting way to drip your words on the "page". Necrotic lips cannot praise this piece, so I will! ;)

James Inman

November 14, 2017 at 11:08 AM

Thank you Eileen. What a great comment.

Andrea Dietrich

November 10, 2017 at 7:49 PM

wow, this one is not just sad but VERY imaginatively written.

James Inman

November 10, 2017 at 11:05 PM

Hi Andrea, nice of you to visit. You never sent me the list of poems I asked you for (must reads of yours).

Nette Onclaud

November 10, 2017 at 2:01 PM

james, i like the poetic mood of this stark write; it leaves much to the imagination!.. thanks for your delightful comment on my poem, ' garnet..' i'm janaury-born , too!.. huggs

James Inman

November 10, 2017 at 6:57 PM

Hi Nette, nice to hear from you. So we have something in common, cool. I used to take my daughters rock hunting in an area called Hiddenite, NC. I once found a small blue Tiger Eye. Thanks for the nice comment.