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Attic - Inspired By Contest

Antiques in the attic,
amazing oil paintings
are coated with thick dust.
Albums of photographs,
await my teary eyes. 
Auntie has passed away
and I must clear her house. 

Inspired by Pleiades A contest

10th August 2016

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Kim Merryman

August 13, 2016 at 11:05 PM

Jan, this is very good! You seem to have a talent for this form. Well done. Blessings!

Jan Allison

August 14, 2016 at 6:00 AM

Thanks Kim I was inspired to write this second poem:-) I am delighted you introduced us to the form:-) hugs Jan xx

Vladislav Raven

August 12, 2016 at 5:11 PM

Hi Jan, i do not know the form so i can't comment on that, I can say that as a poem this is brilliant. I can just picture this so easily in my mind. The paintings covered in dust, the albums of photos the tears would come for an aunt. Reality wrapped up in an excellent poem. THis has to be a seven Jan. Excellent write. Higs....Mike. XX

Jan Allison

August 12, 2016 at 5:44 PM

Thanks Mike - I'd never written this form before the contest and in the end I wrote 2 poems - I now wish I'd put this one in the contest but its too late now ... but of course the joy is I wrote 2 poems and have gained more experience with my writing:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

August 11, 2016 at 9:21 PM

Wow Jan...this emotive piece has winner written all over it! The ease with which this seems to be written disguises how difficult Pleiades are to create with their strict syllable count and form. I am really impressed with this entry! It leaves mine in the dust. Haha. Hugs, Connie ; )

Jan Allison

August 12, 2016 at 12:16 PM

I entered my autumn poem in the contest - wish I'd changed it to this one:-( hugs Jan xx

Joseph P. DiMino

August 11, 2016 at 6:45 AM

Always sad to clear the house of someone dear to us, and newly departed. I pause, and think of my possessions--and how many I will take with me. Happy that I write, for words do seem to last a bit longer than most other things. Blessings!

Jan Allison

August 12, 2016 at 12:17 PM

Yes our words will remain long after we are no longer here:-) hugs Jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis

August 11, 2016 at 5:32 AM

Applauds dear, Jan! Good luck! BTW do you know that Attic comes form an architectural style used in the region of Attica, Greece?

Jan Allison

August 12, 2016 at 12:17 PM

Thanks for the information Demetrios:-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud

August 11, 2016 at 4:53 AM

ohh, fantastic play of words so nostalgic, jan... huggs and love your angle on this one!

Jan Allison

August 12, 2016 at 12:18 PM

Thanks Nette:-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel

August 11, 2016 at 4:31 AM

Ah! I like this one better:) Really:)

Jan Allison

August 12, 2016 at 12:19 PM

I was too late to swap the poems over Jo:-( hugs Jan xx

Manny Paras

August 11, 2016 at 2:30 AM

This is so sentimental and languid. I like, like!

Jan Allison

August 12, 2016 at 12:20 PM

Thanks Manny:-) hugs Jan xx

Viv Wigley

August 10, 2016 at 11:54 PM

Vividly captured, Jan, that dreadful chore we will all face, yet often tinged with sparkly little flecks of a fond memory. Lovely write, Viv x

Jan Allison

August 12, 2016 at 12:21 PM

I found it traumatic clearing my parent's house especially with mum going into the care home and there is only a finite amount of stuff she could take:-( :-) hugs Jan xx

Mike Martin

August 10, 2016 at 9:56 PM

Good luck Jan. Well done.

Jan Allison

August 12, 2016 at 12:22 PM

Thanks Mike I wish I had swapped the poems over as I entered my Autumn poem in the contest ... its too late now:;-) hugs Jan xx

Lynn Marie

August 10, 2016 at 1:01 PM

Excellent writing, your imagery is super strong, even without the photo. swear i could feel the dust in my throat! Another example of your diverse talent. I will learn what a "Pleiades" is thanks to you..lol Terrific, my best to you in the contest. blessings, lynn

Jan Allison

August 10, 2016 at 1:13 PM

I have never tried this form before lynn and I wrote another poem for the contest its called Autumn. I so enjoyed the challenge i wrote this one too:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

August 10, 2016 at 11:32 AM

Hi Jan, The contest inspired you to write a good piece. This form is not easy. You have done great job. It's so clear what you are describing.(even without the picture)The imagery is amazing. A Big seven:-) Alexis

Jan Allison

August 10, 2016 at 11:38 AM

Thanks Alexis - I was inspired to write 2 poems - have never tried the form before and really enjoyed the challenge:-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith

August 10, 2016 at 11:27 AM

I love when I find old photos. I will sit for hours and reminisce...love this one Jan

Jan Allison

August 10, 2016 at 11:30 AM

Thanks Tim, I was actually thinking of going over an old album and putting some notes on... for when we are no longer around ... Thanks for all your support and comments:-) hugs Jan xx

Ronald Kent

August 10, 2016 at 10:05 AM

There's something about attics, intriguing places. Nice write.

Jan Allison

August 10, 2016 at 10:13 AM

Thanks Ronald - we still have boxes from when we moved here lol - guess you just keep stuff for sentimental reasons but one day it will have to be cleared and sorted out:-) hugs Jan xx

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