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Atonement

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When the SERPENT REPENTS, will it offer an apple as an atonement PRESENT?


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11th December, 2015
Contest: One Liner 6 
Sponsor: Silent One

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Line Gauthier

Date: 11/21/2022 5:43:00 AM

ah ~ fun use of anagrams ~

Paul Callus
Date: 11/22/2022 5:27:00 AM

Yes...short, light, fun....a change from serious :) Thank you for visiting, my friend. Have a nice day // paul

Red Fiery

Date: 5/16/2016 8:46:00 AM

What a perfect write from someone who is so good at creating magic with just few words.... The magic worked on this reader ofyours... Briliant !

Paul Callus
Date: 5/17/2016 1:18:00 PM

Thank you Red...you too create magic, even when writing lovely comments:) Glad you enjoyed! hugs // paul

Legendary Legend

Date: 1/7/2016 2:33:00 PM

wow....s great question

Paul Callus
Date: 1/7/2016 2:43:00 PM

A question it is...but I doubt if an answer will be forthcoming! // paul

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 1/5/2016 7:46:00 AM

I really like this, Paul. Perfect title too!! A real tease to the mind..:) Always, Laura

Paul Callus
Date: 1/5/2016 12:02:00 PM

Thank you for reading and liking, Laura:) Your visits are appreciated! ~ Regards // paul

Funom Makama

Date: 12/22/2015 8:00:00 AM

your discrete lines filled with sweet smelling ingredients so palatable to the mind are just beyond gratitude and appreciation. This page is a wonder and your poetry speaks volume of creativity beyond physical perspective. keep it up friend and this is definitely a 7.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/22/2015 3:31:00 PM

Thank you, Funom...you are kind and generous! The complimentary feedback is very much appreciated, my friend. Wishing you all the best.....paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 12/16/2015 6:37:00 AM

Paul, nice one, I wasn't able to post the my one liner.. the contest was so fast too full!!~Olive Eloisa =`)

Paul Callus
Date: 12/16/2015 3:55:00 PM

Yes, these short poem contest fill too quickly. I posted mine early, but it got stuck somewhere:) Glad you liked it. Goodnight & hugs // paul

CayCay Jennings

Date: 12/13/2015 5:39:00 AM

I'm impressed! Three words you crafty, clever writer - way to go ... CayCay

Paul Callus
Date: 12/13/2015 8:57:00 AM

Thank you, CayCay:) You are kind and generous! I have not seen this one on the winners' list:( Have a lovely Sunday:) // paul

Cherl Dunn

Date: 12/11/2015 7:23:00 PM

Dear Paul Love your picture paul it fits the poem perfectly, good luck in the contest, I'll cross my fingers for you and have a wonderful weekend, and thanks for your review on my Christmas poem, it means alot that you liked it so much, cheri

Paul Callus
Date: 12/12/2015 4:57:00 AM

Thank you for another pleasant visit, Cherl:) I was lucky to read your blue mountain poem earlier today...excellent! ~ Enjoy your weekend. // paul

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 12/11/2015 1:26:00 PM

An outstanding monoku Paul ! There is another new malteser writing on ps ,called Victor Buhagiar.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/11/2015 2:37:00 PM

Hi Charm:) What a coincidence....today I happened to comment on one of his poems; his English is very good. He replied, but never let on that he's Maltese! ~ Glad you liked this monoku. By the way...lovely new avatar:) ~ Regards // paul