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Atmospheric Pressure

Dropping sorrow and sadness from anguish skies of melting madness My love has not been fed within cumulous clouds that lachrymal shed Each drop of redemptive rain contains my cascading camouflaged pain I’m left blindly behind battered and bound in a cancerous cave confined Walking within diminished darkness a wounded and contorted carcass I’m decadently drowning in a whirlpool a whining frustrated fading fool When in losing love I’m boiling a pressured atmosphere forever coiling Volcanoes in eruption love will see me through all deceiving disruption.
Aug.16.2017 Atmospheric Pressure Sponsored by: Shadow Hamilton

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Date: 8/24/2017 10:36:00 AM
This is beautiful WW! Your alliteration is amazing. Great word choices! -- Dean Oh, And good luck in the contest.
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Date: 8/17/2017 9:39:00 PM
Every line is amazing. I agree with Kim about the first line being perfect. A great write! Good luck in contest:)
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Date: 8/17/2017 3:57:00 PM
An action packed write! A perfect first line, WW!
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Date: 8/17/2017 2:37:00 PM
Wow! This is impressive. How did you find such an awesome video that perfectly enhances your lovely poem? I can see this on the winner's list already! : )
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Date: 8/17/2017 2:30:00 PM
- A lot of strong feeling in your poetic writing, W.W. - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 8/17/2017 11:39:00 AM
a very metaphorical one, WW. I think Shadow will love this one in her competition!!
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Date: 8/17/2017 9:58:00 AM
Very beautiful piece sir warrior
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Date: 8/17/2017 7:34:00 AM
Nice take on the theme, WW:) I absolutely love your use of alliterations:)
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Date: 8/17/2017 6:12:00 AM
A good way-- weaving love, life, and atmosphere together!
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Date: 8/17/2017 5:09:00 AM
What wonderful alliteration within this poem, "sorrow and sadness, cumulous clouds, cascading camouflaged...etc" so expertly done! I really enjoyed reading this tremendous poem this morning, so very well done! Great Work WW!!
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Date: 8/17/2017 5:03:00 AM
Very well done WW . Good luck in the contest :) and...you also always put in the best videos to see!
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