Premiere Contest WinnerAsp of Grief

ASP OF GRIEF She buries her head upon this asp of grief — soft with reptilian fangs, hard with poison. Her covetous husband lies upon the Nile’s reef. She holds her abdomen in her arms - his son. with lunar belly... the shape of her husband’s seed ...a fateful eclipse The pit with its bone-chilling cold, hisses with hatchlings, dreaming of spoiled seeds and seas with a vortex, coiling around ships. A queen’s lips burn red, yearning for her king. An abandoned wreck will not lay eyes upon his baby’s sex. insanity’s kiss... eyes burn with crimson lipstick ...unrepentant flames She plays with sticks and desire, enticing asps of despair — gorges with vampiric teeth. She embraces their mock and likewise teases, beckons and pleads for death so fair. Like a breeze about her ankles snakes snip her royal purple frock. entanglement frays... dyed purple threads unravel ...rigor mortis strikes His candle ensign in the dark, a resurrected hero of vanity. The light flickers with feet in the sand, footprints at lover’s leap. His profile in death’s shadow, his purple passion of insanity — laughter litters this carnivorous cave where ashes of dust heap. alluring ashes... Salome’s serpentine dance ...Cleopatra’s veils The sound of a knife being sharpened, his sword with venom drawn, leaps upon his self-righteous chest, a single blade’s deep penetration. No handsomer lover, thighs of steel, tanned and craven brawn. He lost his rapturous beauty bright and fleeting, weeds of veneration. bilious-amber mixes with his crimson blade — a suicide pact 4/28/2018
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Walker Avatar
September 16, 2021 at 8:40 AM
Beautiful and skillful! I like this alot Kim
Lander Avatar
December 6, 2020 at 5:15 AM
so agree with each and every word profound..
Rodrigues Avatar
December 6, 2020 at 8:56 AM
Thanks, Annie!
Spilchuk Avatar
March 11, 2019 at 4:46 PM
I agree with all the others who have commented on your very descriptive & well written work on love's irony of an historical event. A very enjoyable read.
Rodrigues Avatar
March 11, 2019 at 5:13 PM
Thanks so much, Dennis, for the read and encouraging comment.
Staton Avatar
January 14, 2019 at 6:56 AM
Outstanding!
Rodrigues Avatar
January 14, 2019 at 7:37 AM
Thank you, my friend!
Haight Avatar
September 10, 2018 at 6:22 PM
Kim, I remember this outstanding poem with so many comments, and I want to congratulate you again for another win! Hugs, Sandra
Rodrigues Avatar
September 10, 2018 at 7:24 PM
Thanks a bunch! Hugs...Kim
Gauthier Avatar
September 9, 2018 at 8:16 PM
Back with more well deserved congrats, Kim.
Rodrigues Avatar
September 10, 2018 at 7:24 PM
Thanks, sweet friend!
De Beaulieu Avatar
May 27, 2018 at 7:44 PM
Hello Kim, this is a beautiful poem.Yet it is also filled with grief. Have a nice evening my friend.
Rodrigues Avatar
May 27, 2018 at 7:51 PM
Thank you, Darlene!
Barden Avatar
May 27, 2018 at 4:51 AM
I'm back to read this again ... exquisite, Kim, and one of the best poems I've ever seen on this site. Truly. I don't mince words or hand out empty praise - this is superb!
Rodrigues Avatar
May 27, 2018 at 7:23 AM
Thanks so much, Greg! That really means a lot! <3 Kim
Barden Avatar
May 27, 2018 at 12:18 AM
What a gorgeous piece - rich with all the elements that I seek in truly gifted poetry ... I am NEVER disappointed when I click on your work, and always the richer for it. Fav-ing!! Blessings, Friend! :-) <3
Lindley Avatar
May 13, 2018 at 4:18 AM
Found a bright , shining and wondrous gem this morn, one glowing with verses and magnificent creations born of a great poetic mind and heart!! A fav my friend...
Rodrigues Avatar
May 13, 2018 at 6:30 AM
Thanks so much, Robert! Hugs...Kim
Pigeon Tart Avatar
May 11, 2018 at 9:06 AM
Wowsa! Epic drama, exquisite ink! Congratulations on your fabulous win Kim! :) xomo!
Rodrigues Avatar
May 11, 2018 at 8:54 PM
Thank you, Maureen! :)
Breedt Avatar
May 10, 2018 at 1:42 AM
Hi Kim congratulations. Explosive passion mixed with some great metaphors. Great writing here
Rodrigues Avatar
May 10, 2018 at 8:27 AM
Thanks, Jannie!
May Avatar
May 9, 2018 at 4:24 AM
Congrats on your top win Kim
Rodrigues Avatar
May 10, 2018 at 8:27 AM
Thank you, Joseph!
Sinha-Roy Avatar
May 8, 2018 at 12:54 AM
Congratulations, Kim on your great win. Fabulous poem.
Rodrigues Avatar
May 8, 2018 at 6:26 AM
Thank you, Subimal!
Roper Avatar
May 7, 2018 at 11:19 PM
Wow, Kim, this really is striking s very well deserved win.. A big congratulations....
Rodrigues Avatar
May 8, 2018 at 6:26 AM
Thank you, Eve!
Talbot Avatar
May 7, 2018 at 8:17 PM
Brilliant Kim! A big WOW! A delight to read loved the use of forms! Congratulation on your well earned first place. Mick
Rodrigues Avatar
May 7, 2018 at 8:36 PM
Thanks so much, Mick!
Gauthier Avatar
May 7, 2018 at 7:54 PM
Wow, Kim. You certainly took this to the next level ! Congrats on your well deserved gold medal win.
Rodrigues Avatar
May 7, 2018 at 7:57 PM
Thank you, Line!
Haight Avatar
May 7, 2018 at 7:45 PM
Such amazing poetry, Kim! I love the story and the way you mixed the poetic forms. Congratulations on your well-deserved First Place Trophy win! A fave for me! Hugs, Sandra
Rodrigues Avatar
May 7, 2018 at 7:57 PM
Yay! Thanks, Sandra!
Gentry Avatar
May 7, 2018 at 7:35 PM
Congratulations on your #1 win. I'm blown away with the true poetic style and expressions you emote. What a story you weave.
Rodrigues Avatar
May 7, 2018 at 7:37 PM
Thanks so much, Susan!
Leiser Avatar
May 7, 2018 at 7:35 PM
This poem is insanely good...wow! Your story took me to a different place in time, so dramatic and incredible! A fave, and a well deserved top win, Kim! Congrats :)
Rodrigues Avatar
May 7, 2018 at 7:38 PM
Thanks so much, Laura!
Cunningham Avatar
May 7, 2018 at 6:08 PM
A great mix of rhyme and hauku Kim. Congratulations. Tom.
Rodrigues Avatar
May 7, 2018 at 7:20 PM
Thanks, Tom!
Gentile Avatar
May 1, 2018 at 10:02 AM
WOW, Kim, this is incredible, am amazing telling. I have always been attracted by the lure of ancient Egypt and you have made this a thrilling read. Well done xxoo
Rodrigues Avatar
May 1, 2018 at 12:43 PM
Thanks so much, dear Mike! <3 Kim
Marlow Avatar
April 30, 2018 at 1:33 AM
So cool! I never thought of trying to weave Haiku within a rhyming poem. Nicely done.
Rodrigues Avatar
April 30, 2018 at 7:34 AM
Thanks so much, Marlow! :)
Krutsinger Avatar
April 29, 2018 at 5:28 AM
The imagery in this beautiful poem has knocked me down and is dragging me through the house by my socks, wanting me to go outside and see the beauty of spring. This is REAL romantic imagery at her best, Kim. At her BEST!
Rodrigues Avatar
April 29, 2018 at 5:37 AM
I really appreciate your comment! I try to feel the characters, as I write. <3 my wonderfyl friend!
Wolf Avatar
April 28, 2018 at 10:34 PM
I merely echo Susan's comment: Wow! What imagery! What an incredible write! If this isn't a winner, I don't know what is. Excellence, Ms. Poet!! :) gw
Rodrigues Avatar
April 29, 2018 at 5:38 AM
Thanks so much, Gershon! <3 Kim
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