Asp of Grief Premiere Contest Winner

ASP OF GRIEF She buries her head upon this asp of grief — soft with reptilian fangs, hard with poison. Her covetous husband lies upon the Nile’s reef. She holds her abdomen in her arms - his son. with lunar belly... the shape of her husband’s seed ...a fateful eclipse The pit with its bone-chilling cold, hisses with hatchlings, dreaming of spoiled seeds and seas with a vortex, coiling around ships. A queen’s lips burn red, yearning for her king. An abandoned wreck will not lay eyes upon his baby’s sex. insanity’s kiss... eyes burn with crimson lipstick ...unrepentant flames She plays with sticks and desire, enticing asps of despair — gorges with vampiric teeth. She embraces their mock and likewise teases, beckons and pleads for death so fair. Like a breeze about her ankles snakes snip her royal purple frock. entanglement frays... dyed purple threads unravel ...rigor mortis strikes His candle ensign in the dark, a resurrected hero of vanity. The light flickers with feet in the sand, footprints at lover’s leap. His profile in death’s shadow, his purple passion of insanity — laughter litters this carnivorous cave where ashes of dust heap. alluring ashes... Salome’s serpentine dance ...Cleopatra’s veils The sound of a knife being sharpened, his sword with venom drawn, leaps upon his self-righteous chest, a single blade’s deep penetration. No handsomer lover, thighs of steel, tanned and craven brawn. He lost his rapturous beauty bright and fleeting, weeds of veneration. bilious-amber mixes with his crimson blade — a suicide pact 4/28/2018

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Date: 9/16/2021 8:40:00 AM
Beautiful and skillful! I like this alot Kim
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Date: 12/6/2020 5:15:00 AM
so agree with each and every word profound..
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 12/6/2020 8:56:00 AM
Thanks, Annie!
Date: 3/11/2019 4:46:00 PM
I agree with all the others who have commented on your very descriptive & well written work on love's irony of an historical event. A very enjoyable read.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/11/2019 5:13:00 PM
Thanks so much, Dennis, for the read and encouraging comment.
Date: 1/14/2019 6:56:00 AM
Outstanding!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/14/2019 7:37:00 AM
Thank you, my friend!
Date: 9/10/2018 6:22:00 PM
Kim, I remember this outstanding poem with so many comments, and I want to congratulate you again for another win! Hugs, Sandra
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/10/2018 7:24:00 PM
Thanks a bunch! Hugs...Kim
Date: 9/9/2018 8:16:00 PM
Back with more well deserved congrats, Kim.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/10/2018 7:24:00 PM
Thanks, sweet friend!
Date: 5/27/2018 7:44:00 PM
Hello Kim, this is a beautiful poem.Yet it is also filled with grief. Have a nice evening my friend.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/27/2018 7:51:00 PM
Thank you, Darlene!
Date: 5/27/2018 4:51:00 AM
I'm back to read this again ... exquisite, Kim, and one of the best poems I've ever seen on this site. Truly. I don't mince words or hand out empty praise - this is superb!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/27/2018 7:23:00 AM
Thanks so much, Greg! That really means a lot! <3 Kim
Date: 5/27/2018 12:18:00 AM
What a gorgeous piece - rich with all the elements that I seek in truly gifted poetry ... I am NEVER disappointed when I click on your work, and always the richer for it. Fav-ing!! Blessings, Friend! :-) <3
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Date: 5/13/2018 4:18:00 AM
Found a bright , shining and wondrous gem this morn, one glowing with verses and magnificent creations born of a great poetic mind and heart!! A fav my friend...
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/13/2018 6:30:00 AM
Thanks so much, Robert! Hugs...Kim
Date: 5/11/2018 9:06:00 AM
Wowsa! Epic drama, exquisite ink! Congratulations on your fabulous win Kim! :) xomo!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/11/2018 8:54:00 PM
Thank you, Maureen! :)
Date: 5/10/2018 1:42:00 AM
Hi Kim congratulations. Explosive passion mixed with some great metaphors. Great writing here
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/10/2018 8:27:00 AM
Thanks, Jannie!
Date: 5/9/2018 4:24:00 AM
Congrats on your top win Kim
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/10/2018 8:27:00 AM
Thank you, Joseph!
Date: 5/8/2018 12:54:00 AM
Congratulations, Kim on your great win. Fabulous poem.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/8/2018 6:26:00 AM
Thank you, Subimal!
Date: 5/7/2018 11:19:00 PM
Wow, Kim, this really is striking s very well deserved win.. A big congratulations....
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/8/2018 6:26:00 AM
Thank you, Eve!
Date: 5/7/2018 8:17:00 PM
Brilliant Kim! A big WOW! A delight to read loved the use of forms! Congratulation on your well earned first place. Mick
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/7/2018 8:36:00 PM
Thanks so much, Mick!
Date: 5/7/2018 7:54:00 PM
Wow, Kim. You certainly took this to the next level ! Congrats on your well deserved gold medal win.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/7/2018 7:57:00 PM
Thank you, Line!
Date: 5/7/2018 7:45:00 PM
Such amazing poetry, Kim! I love the story and the way you mixed the poetic forms. Congratulations on your well-deserved First Place Trophy win! A fave for me! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 5/7/2018 7:57:00 PM
Yay! Thanks, Sandra!
Date: 5/7/2018 7:35:00 PM
This poem is insanely good...wow! Your story took me to a different place in time, so dramatic and incredible! A fave, and a well deserved top win, Kim! Congrats :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/7/2018 7:38:00 PM
Thanks so much, Laura!
Date: 5/7/2018 7:35:00 PM
Congratulations on your #1 win. I'm blown away with the true poetic style and expressions you emote. What a story you weave.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/7/2018 7:37:00 PM
Thanks so much, Susan!
Date: 5/7/2018 6:08:00 PM
A great mix of rhyme and hauku Kim. Congratulations. Tom.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/7/2018 7:20:00 PM
Thanks, Tom!
Date: 5/1/2018 10:02:00 AM
WOW, Kim, this is incredible, am amazing telling. I have always been attracted by the lure of ancient Egypt and you have made this a thrilling read. Well done xxoo
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/1/2018 12:43:00 PM
Thanks so much, dear Mike! <3 Kim
Date: 4/30/2018 1:33:00 AM
So cool! I never thought of trying to weave Haiku within a rhyming poem. Nicely done.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/30/2018 7:34:00 AM
Thanks so much, Marlow! :)
Date: 4/29/2018 5:28:00 AM
The imagery in this beautiful poem has knocked me down and is dragging me through the house by my socks, wanting me to go outside and see the beauty of spring. This is REAL romantic imagery at her best, Kim. At her BEST!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/29/2018 5:37:00 AM
I really appreciate your comment! I try to feel the characters, as I write. <3 my wonderfyl friend!
Date: 4/28/2018 10:34:00 PM
I merely echo Susan's comment: Wow! What imagery! What an incredible write! If this isn't a winner, I don't know what is. Excellence, Ms. Poet!! :) gw
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/29/2018 5:38:00 AM
Thanks so much, Gershon! <3 Kim
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