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Ashes and Flakes

Scarlet scars like flowers of frozen flames Sepia stitches like thorns of burning ice Bitter-sweet pain of my sufferings tainted on my body, my soul. A beautiful shroud for my ugly demise to come, presented by the sadistic torturer who batters me with a beating pendulum as I am shackled in chains of seconds welded into minutes and minutes welded into hours of lasting misery. I scream out loud but all I could hear is mockery of silence. My cacophony out of pain is buried under the symphony of tick-tock. How ironic, isn't it? I say this with utter grief, time has never been a healer to me. In fact, my wounds got worse. Burning inside and freezing outside, feels like I was born to suffer so I walk on the needles of clock leaving behind my trail in ashes and flakes. Date: 07/19/2017 Note: For the contest (Deep & Dark II) by Laura Loo. *Placed First*

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Date: 12/8/2017 8:28:00 AM
Gorgeous gothic imagery this poem be, Afzal. The opening lines mesmerizes until the last scintillating verse. Brilliant poetry! Love and peace forever.
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Date: 5/1/2018 4:19:00 AM
Thank you very much, Freddie
Date: 11/6/2017 12:35:00 AM
Congratulations on your wonderfully dark win, Afzal - blessings, and keep up the great work! :-)
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Date: 11/6/2017 10:07:00 PM
Thank you, Greg.
Date: 10/29/2017 6:07:00 AM
Effective description of absolute hopeless misery, Afzal. Congrats on your win! Janice
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Date: 10/29/2017 11:03:00 PM
Thank you, Janice.
Date: 10/28/2017 10:25:00 PM
Afzal, deep and amazing, congratulation on your win Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 10/28/2017 11:24:00 PM
Thank you, Eve.
Date: 10/28/2017 10:48:00 AM
Lovely poem, Afzal, though it's sad and haunting:) congratulations on your well deserved win:)
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Date: 10/28/2017 11:25:00 PM
Thank you, Jo.
Date: 10/27/2017 4:56:00 PM
Congrats, Afzal! Nice win!
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Date: 10/27/2017 10:26:00 PM
Thank you, Kim.
Date: 10/27/2017 2:14:00 PM
Awesome! Congrats on your win!
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Afzal Nusker
Date: 10/27/2017 10:25:00 PM
Thanks a lot, Dale.
Date: 10/27/2017 10:57:00 AM
Wowsa! So dark. Congratulations :) xomo!
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Date: 10/27/2017 10:25:00 PM
Thank you, Maureen.
Date: 10/27/2017 9:15:00 AM
Well done Afzal and congrats on a great win!
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Date: 10/27/2017 10:25:00 PM
Thank you, John.
Date: 7/21/2017 4:55:00 PM
When the pain doesn't cease and time moves slowly, making it increase....I can relate from past experience Afzal. I find it is emotional wounds that often do not heal. A great poem Afzal! : )
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Date: 7/21/2017 10:41:00 PM
I think many of us have and do experience it from time to time. Thank you for the visit and insightful comments, Connie.
Date: 7/21/2017 6:08:00 AM
I really enjoyed this emotional write of yours Afzal. 'Burning inside and freezing outside, feels like I was born to suffer'. Especially like these deep words...Maria
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Date: 7/21/2017 10:39:00 PM
Thanks a lot, Maria.
Date: 7/21/2017 5:48:00 AM
I can relate to this somehow, Afzal, very touching:) exceptional writing:)
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Date: 7/21/2017 10:39:00 PM
Thank you so much, Jo.
Date: 7/20/2017 9:04:00 PM
This is such a creative approach to your theme. It almost looks like haibun, if the last and first parts were haiku! I especially liked the part : Time has never been a healer to me. So profound!
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Date: 7/20/2017 10:53:00 PM
Thank you very much, Andrea.
Date: 7/20/2017 12:35:00 AM
Such a emotional heartfelt write, Afzal, nicely written.
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Date: 7/20/2017 1:31:00 AM
Thank you, Eve.

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