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As You Say My Name

Within a moment's grace She held my heartbeat against her gentle dialect Her pearly smile and chocolate diamond retinas Prescribed laughter, as she Incompletely Spoke my name Vowels tripping against her nervous steps. Her facial tone became tomato's rejected lyric. My dignity, stunned. My smile, overpowered. She held me close to her digital breaths, With apologies, unforced There is a charm within her tender innocence. A charm I may never physically discover. But, Today, This smile cowers With a silent exhilaration ©Drake J. Eszes

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Fatima Ammar

Date: 3/24/2015 3:34:00 PM

Very cute, Drake. But those last lines really brought it around.

Wilma Neels

Date: 3/13/2015 12:01:00 PM

Hello Drake, me love this! Funny enough my favourite line is "Her facial tone became tomato's rejected lyric." Awesome to read one of your writes again ;)

Poet Tacito
Date: 3/13/2015 1:25:00 PM

HA! Nice! I laughed after I wrote that line too. Great to see you around, Wilma!!! :D

Debbie Duncan

Date: 2/24/2015 10:41:00 PM

Hi Drake, came by to read your words. You always post some great lines :) I haven't posted for a while myself, though I do have a lot written on the yellow note pads. I'm sure I have some you haven't read though Have a fab day :)

Poet Tacito
Date: 3/13/2015 1:24:00 PM

Yeah, I've been super busy lately. But, still writing. ;) Thank you kindly, Debbie!

Nette Onclaud

Date: 1/29/2015 3:15:00 PM

where have you been hiding, drake?...You've seized the a moment..and painted it's vibrancy to last forever within the world of enjambment... you rock!.. huggs

Poet Tacito
Date: 1/29/2015 3:17:00 PM

Taking care of my dreams, my dear. :) I'm all about the vibrant awesomeness! :D You rock more, Nette! Thank you so much!

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 1/29/2015 12:07:00 PM

So nice to read your verse today, Drake welcome back. The imagery was fantastic. Light & Love

Poet Tacito
Date: 1/29/2015 3:07:00 PM

Hey there, Debbie! Thank you much! That is greatly appreciated!

Monterey Sirak

Date: 1/27/2015 7:35:00 AM

Yeah!!! you have a new poem. Can you see me dancing a jig? I love the tender hesitant feel of this one. It's like you are holding your breath at her endearing awkwardness...."incomplete name, vowels tripping, nervous steps" afraid to utter a sound and break the spell of this moment.

Poet Tacito
Date: 1/29/2015 3:01:00 PM

HA! I see it. I am fully amused. As for your feedback, yes...pretty much. lol Thank you, thank you, Monterey!!!

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 1/23/2015 6:22:00 PM

"She held me close to her digital breaths, With apologies, unforced"-an unforced apology always feels great. Sounds like she's a breath of fresh air and prone to skip many heartbeats! I love that ending...a thrilling experience, thanks for sharing! Always, Laura

Poet Tacito
Date: 1/29/2015 2:50:00 PM

Needless to say, she's a figment of the imaginations, nothing more. :) Super, super great to see your feedback again, Laura! :D Thanks so much!

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 1/23/2015 7:51:00 AM

Oh at last,a comeback!!!'She held my heartbeat against her gentle dialect'..Super line!Then an outstanding continuation of. digital breaths and yum chocolate retinas..But the ending has a profound message..'But today the smile cowers with silent exhilaration' ..It gives me a sad feeling,as if someone bubbly and witg a tender voice had fallen to silence..It leaves the reader with wuestions of'Why?'..

Poet Tacito
Date: 1/23/2015 5:29:00 PM

Hi hi! :) Yes, just a little something, something...I like your perspective on the ending. It's a little different than what I was going for. But, nevertheless, it was a wonderful perspective to have. Thank you so much, Charmine!

Eileen Manassian

Date: 1/22/2015 9:46:00 PM

DRAKE!!!! You're here. Where have you been??? This is another enigmatic write. Hmmmm Hmmmmm Hmmmmmm.....There is a charm within her tender innocence...A charm I may never physically discover...my favorite lines....oh Exhilaration is sweet too. Someone's happy! ;) Hugs

Poet Tacito
Date: 1/23/2015 5:49:00 AM

EYE-LEAN!!!! :D I've been here...just super busy with life and its embrace. I hope you're doing good there! I'm always happy, FYI. ;-) Even when life tries to mess that up in certain moments...just gotta power forward. Thank you hun! Hugs!