As the Petals Fall

The rose wilts, the petals fall, last call...last call...
     Left out in a field alone, flower beds of unhappy homes
Over the hill and far away, barely seen at all...at all...
     On the edge of fertile soil above where the sea wave foams

      Suffering from the salt air breeze, as it blows...it blows...
           Bending the stem of belief, harboring the anchor of doubt
      Question the basics of the seed and where it grows...it grows...
           Take the plunge of grief into the sea to drown the voices out

            Uprooted feet, the soul set free, watch it just fly away...fly away...
                 Left its wilted leaves as a warning to never trust the dirty soil
             It will beg and plead, lie and cheat, try to get you to stay...to stay...
                 The games begin as the roots set in, sad vegetables always spoil




                                                                     05/19/18
                                             Written for Contest: Let Your Pen Drip 
                                                Theme: Over the Hill and Far Away
                                                         Hosted by: Broken Wings

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018



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Date: 6/5/2018 9:37:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Brian. Well done.
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Brian Davey
Date: 12/29/2018 4:46:00 PM
Thank you
Date: 5/23/2018 10:42:00 AM
Brian, congratulations on your win in my contest with this great write, well done ~
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Brian Davey
Date: 5/25/2018 11:15:00 PM
Thank you for always pushing our creativity and expressiveness to a higher level my friend
Date: 5/23/2018 7:45:00 AM
Congratulations Brian ! Well done :)
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Brian Davey
Date: 5/25/2018 11:14:00 PM
Thanks again Heidi I appreciate you
Date: 5/22/2018 8:48:00 PM
Congratulations on your placement. Well done.
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Brian Davey
Date: 5/23/2018 5:21:00 AM
Thank you very much
Date: 5/19/2018 9:35:00 AM
Brian , I think this will be another popular contest for Constance. I can't wait to try it myself. She is sure to love this. By the way, your last lines are winding down to the next line. You might want to view it from my side and see if you want it to look that way! I'll have to read her rules again . Maybe she asked us to do it that way!
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Brian Davey
Date: 5/19/2018 6:41:00 PM
Thank you Andrea it doesn't show it that way on my end and I always forget to check that. Good Luck with your write for this contest I am sure it will be great as always!
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