Carol Sunshine Brown Poet Tanka

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A Mesh Of Forms Contest of Russell Sivey

Written by Carol Brown  03/22/2012

Using the forms Tanka  &  Senryu
1st Place Winner

As One Together

moon and stars above
warm summer night breeze blowing
arms wrapped around me
closeness makes my body weak
your breath, the warm breeze, I melt

our hearts together
beat now as one forever
till death do us part

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Valerie Staton January 27, 2019 at 7:13 AM Very well written!

Christine Malliaros April 28, 2015 at 10:38 AM Beautiful!!!!

Apoorva Patrikar September 10, 2012 at 9:29 AM wonderful :)

Nii-Ayi Solomon June 18, 2012 at 6:11 AM This is a beautiful poem...it reminds me of my poem till death do us apart.

David Scott June 8, 2012 at 1:28 PM nice peace the words say it all x david scott

Shaz Cheesman May 23, 2012 at 4:35 AM wow Carol - short and very sweet - loved it.

Danielle Lewis May 8, 2012 at 8:33 PM refreshing... very beautiful!

Bl Devnath May 8, 2012 at 10:08 AM I have no expression for this one except saying lovely poem of two hearts together. Loved always, bl

Rochelle Smith May 6, 2012 at 1:43 PM nice a d ty for the welcome carol

Debbie Duncan April 19, 2012 at 5:42 PM Oh I love this poem,,, I can see why it won first place ;} very nice Carol

April Lovett-Bradford April 18, 2012 at 3:02 PM Very beautiful Carol, Congrats on your first Place win ;0)

Wilma Neels April 12, 2012 at 5:56 AM A beauty Carol, congratulations on your first place win with this awesome piece :) love Wilma

Gautami Phookan April 10, 2012 at 8:49 PM Isn't it so simple to love!! Carol, you've beautifully shown the pureness of this divine feeling.. Congrats on a very well deserved win and love always !!!

Kim Merryman April 10, 2012 at 2:27 PM Carol, congrats on your 1st place win with this lovely, romantic write! Love, Kim

Diana-Marie Bombardieri April 10, 2012 at 12:18 PM Beautiful. Congrats on your win Carol:)

Carol Sunshine Brown April 10, 2012 at 12:07 PM Thank you everyone. Love, Carol

Deborah Burch April 10, 2012 at 12:39 AM Awww...Congratulations Carol!!! Great win!!! big huggsss,love deb

Joyce Johnson April 9, 2012 at 6:44 PM Truly lovely. Congratulations on your first place win. Love, Joyce

Debbie Guzzi April 9, 2012 at 6:31 PM So romantic Carol!! Congrad's on your win Light & love

Jon Arno April 9, 2012 at 4:45 PM Another beauty Carol :) Congratulations on your winning entry Love, Jon

Sara Kendrick April 9, 2012 at 1:55 PM Congrats on your win..Sara

Linda-Marie Sweetheart April 9, 2012 at 8:40 AM congrats Carol on a grand first place win for Mesh of Forms contest with a truly brilliant expression of words.. trust u enjoyed a lovely Easter day in Resurrection Power luv..

Lester Lagdamen April 3, 2012 at 6:02 AM A very nice poem. I felt it :)

L.Ruby Meyer April 2, 2012 at 12:40 PM Thank you for this poem Carol! Sometimes it seems the fewest of words can have a most profound impact on emotion. x Peace, Ruby

M.I.A . March 29, 2012 at 9:17 PM wow, this is beautiful Carol. good luck on the contest

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