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A Mesh Of Forms Contest of Russell Sivey

Written by Carol Brown 03/22/2012

Using the forms Tanka & Senryu
1st Place Winner

moon and stars above warm summer night breeze blowing arms wrapped around me closeness makes my body weak your breath, the warm breeze, I melt our hearts together beat now as one forever till death do us part

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Valerie Staton

Date: 1/27/2019 7:13:00 AM

Very well written!

Christine Malliaros

Date: 4/28/2015 10:38:00 AM

Beautiful!!!!

Apoorva Patrikar

Date: 9/10/2012 9:29:00 AM

wonderful :)

Nii-Ayi Solomon

Date: 6/18/2012 6:11:00 AM

This is a beautiful poem...it reminds me of my poem till death do us apart.

David Scott

Date: 6/8/2012 1:28:00 PM

nice peace the words say it all x david scott

Shaz Cheesman

Date: 5/23/2012 4:35:00 AM

wow Carol - short and very sweet - loved it.

Danielle Lewis

Date: 5/8/2012 8:33:00 PM

refreshing... very beautiful!

Bl Devnath

Date: 5/8/2012 10:08:00 AM

I have no expression for this one except saying lovely poem of two hearts together. Loved always, bl

Rochelle Smith

Date: 5/6/2012 1:43:00 PM

nice a d ty for the welcome carol

Debbie Duncan

Date: 4/19/2012 5:42:00 PM

Oh I love this poem,,, I can see why it won first place ;} very nice Carol

April Lovett-Bradford

Date: 4/18/2012 3:02:00 PM

Very beautiful Carol, Congrats on your first Place win ;0)

Wilma Neels

Date: 4/12/2012 5:56:00 AM

A beauty Carol, congratulations on your first place win with this awesome piece :) love Wilma

Gautami Phookan

Date: 4/10/2012 8:49:00 PM

Isn't it so simple to love!! Carol, you've beautifully shown the pureness of this divine feeling.. Congrats on a very well deserved win and love always !!!

Kim Merryman

Date: 4/10/2012 2:27:00 PM

Carol, congrats on your 1st place win with this lovely, romantic write! Love, Kim

Diana-Marie Bombardieri

Date: 4/10/2012 12:18:00 PM

Beautiful. Congrats on your win Carol:)

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 4/10/2012 12:07:00 PM

Thank you everyone. Love, Carol

Deborah Burch

Date: 4/10/2012 12:39:00 AM

Awww...Congratulations Carol!!! Great win!!! big huggsss,love deb

Joyce Johnson

Date: 4/9/2012 6:44:00 PM

Truly lovely. Congratulations on your first place win. Love, Joyce

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 4/9/2012 6:31:00 PM

So romantic Carol!! Congrad's on your win Light & love

Jon Arno

Date: 4/9/2012 4:45:00 PM

Another beauty Carol :) Congratulations on your winning entry Love, Jon

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/9/2012 1:55:00 PM

Congrats on your win..Sara

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 4/9/2012 8:40:00 AM

congrats Carol on a grand first place win for Mesh of Forms contest with a truly brilliant expression of words.. trust u enjoyed a lovely Easter day in Resurrection Power luv..

Lester Lagdamen

Date: 4/3/2012 6:02:00 AM

A very nice poem. I felt it :)

L.Ruby Meyer

Date: 4/2/2012 12:40:00 PM

Thank you for this poem Carol! Sometimes it seems the fewest of words can have a most profound impact on emotion. x Peace, Ruby

M.I.A .

Date: 3/29/2012 9:17:00 PM

wow, this is beautiful Carol. good luck on the contest