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As One Together

moon and stars above
warm summer night breeze blowing
arms wrapped around me
closeness makes my body weak
your breath, the warm breeze, I melt
our hearts together
beat now as one forever
till death do us part
A Mesh Of Forms Contest of Russell Sivey Written by Carol Brown 03/22/2012 Using the forms Tanka & Senryu 1st Place Winner

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 1/27/2019 7:13:00 AM
Very well written!
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Date: 4/28/2015 10:38:00 AM
Beautiful!!!!
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Date: 9/10/2012 9:29:00 AM
wonderful :)
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Date: 6/18/2012 6:11:00 AM
This is a beautiful poem...it reminds me of my poem till death do us apart.
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Date: 6/8/2012 1:28:00 PM
nice peace the words say it all x david scott
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Date: 5/23/2012 4:35:00 AM
wow Carol - short and very sweet - loved it.
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Date: 5/8/2012 8:33:00 PM
refreshing... very beautiful!
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Date: 5/8/2012 10:08:00 AM
I have no expression for this one except saying lovely poem of two hearts together. Loved always, bl
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Date: 5/6/2012 1:43:00 PM
nice a d ty for the welcome carol
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Date: 4/19/2012 5:42:00 PM
Oh I love this poem,,, I can see why it won first place ;} very nice Carol
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Date: 4/18/2012 3:02:00 PM
Very beautiful Carol, Congrats on your first Place win ;0)
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Date: 4/12/2012 5:56:00 AM
A beauty Carol, congratulations on your first place win with this awesome piece :) love Wilma
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Date: 4/10/2012 8:49:00 PM
Isn't it so simple to love!! Carol, you've beautifully shown the pureness of this divine feeling.. Congrats on a very well deserved win and love always !!!
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Date: 4/10/2012 2:27:00 PM
Carol, congrats on your 1st place win with this lovely, romantic write! Love, Kim
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Date: 4/10/2012 12:18:00 PM
Beautiful. Congrats on your win Carol:)
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Date: 4/10/2012 12:07:00 PM
Thank you everyone. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/10/2012 12:39:00 AM
Awww...Congratulations Carol!!! Great win!!! big huggsss,love deb
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Date: 4/9/2012 6:44:00 PM
Truly lovely. Congratulations on your first place win. Love, Joyce
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Date: 4/9/2012 6:31:00 PM
So romantic Carol!! Congrad's on your win Light & love
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Date: 4/9/2012 4:45:00 PM
Another beauty Carol :) Congratulations on your winning entry Love, Jon
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Date: 4/9/2012 1:55:00 PM
Congrats on your win..Sara
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Date: 4/9/2012 8:40:00 AM
congrats Carol on a grand first place win for Mesh of Forms contest with a truly brilliant expression of words.. trust u enjoyed a lovely Easter day in Resurrection Power luv..
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Date: 4/3/2012 6:02:00 AM
A very nice poem. I felt it :)
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Date: 4/2/2012 12:40:00 PM
Thank you for this poem Carol! Sometimes it seems the fewest of words can have a most profound impact on emotion. x Peace, Ruby
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Date: 3/29/2012 9:17:00 PM
wow, this is beautiful Carol. good luck on the contest
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