As I Went to Sleep

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This could be the reason not to based poems on dreams.

I was innocent as I went to sleep,
But soon I would be in trouble, deep.
My problems would pile up in a heap 
As I went to sleep, to sleep.  

I began to nap, blameless and free, 
Without a trouble in the world,
But, as I lay there snoozing soundly, 
Unfortunate events unfurled.

I witnessed the unlucky ax murder
Of a friend of a friend.
Why was I the only one to see?
Fate, I cannot comprehend.

The living friend asked me who did it.   
So I squealed on who I saw. 
A second murder, then sadly ensued, as he 
Killed her with a hammer claw.  

For that murder, then I too was guilty,
The jury reasoned, wise.
I should be sentenced unsparingly,
They sagely did advise.

In my friend's guilt, I would rightly share,
Though I went to sleep without a care, 
I woke up to the chair, the chair.
I woke up to the electric chair.

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Hilda Greenhough

Date: 6/25/2024 9:28:00 AM

A great and funny poem. It electrified my imagination. Lol.

David Crandall
Date: 6/25/2024 11:46:00 AM

Thanks Hilda!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/24/2024 11:18:00 AM

Wow! Our first clue - I was innocent as I went to sleep…murder in the eye of the dreamer…a friend of friend gets the a and the friend gets the claw. Love too - As I went to sleep, to sleep…and then the chair…the chair. Great poem, David.

David Crandall
Date: 6/25/2024 11:58:00 AM

Thanks Kim, I'm glad that you liked it, and that repetition! It seems unfair that everything's fine when you go to bed, and you wake up guilty!