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As I Grow Old

The fading ancient sun casts long shadows before me, as I shuffle slowly and sluggishly down asymmetrical lanes. How age mellows me like ripe watermelon, squeezing me until all my ambrosial juices run acidulously dry as dust. Unsatisfied desire, mental torment and general malaise conquer my better moods of love, devotion and quietude. Straggling with widespread dishevelment and disillusions I try in vain to set an orderly pattern to my straying aims, hoping some guardian angel were to take my shaking hands to lead me onwards steadily towards some well defined goal. Mark my furrowed forehead, tap solidly at my potential energy fill my withering wrinkles with some sense or empirical reasoning, but at least give me one essential gift, that a grumbler I'll never be.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2020




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Date: 1/31/2023 9:40:00 PM
Taking in one of your earlier posts, Victor, to be honest the feeling of your poetry, mirrors my own. Your word though superior. Harry
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Date: 10/17/2022 8:51:00 PM
Meld with whatever draws you, Victor, dissolve in it’s embrace, sunsets, birds chirping, tree leaves rusting, meditation… awaken bliss in the cave of your heart. In silence.
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Date: 9/17/2021 8:12:00 AM
The desire to not be a grumbler is a great one. I always asked for patience but I still am imperfect in that area and right now don't want anything bad happening to help me get perfect with patience. I enjoyed reading this one today. Sara
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Date: 10/11/2020 7:17:00 PM
I love your last stanza Victor. So many 'elderly' become opinionated Grumpy Guses. Linda
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Date: 10/9/2020 4:46:00 PM
Nobody likes a grumbler ;)
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Date: 10/5/2020 12:01:00 PM
You are a poet Victor and poets don't age, their hearts and minds stay young and those two organs are very important - your heart writes such romantic poems and you soul sings them, that is not growing old! Blessings and hugs, Jennifer.
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Date: 10/4/2020 4:20:00 AM
Oh Victor you have taken those words right out of my mouth, but hey ~ as long as we can stay positive and young at heart then all will be fine~ hopefully ~ for our poetry takes us to another place and I am so grateful for that escape... With kindest thoughts Ann xx
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Date: 10/1/2020 2:23:00 PM
Are you sure that you are not writing about me, Victor?! lol. ~ Not Complaining, gw
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Date: 10/1/2020 2:46:00 AM
Thinking not of age.. spilling not a rage.. sure I am aging.. but still the mind not conceiving! Let alone the heart still young believing.. my words unable to compose a word on aging. So beautiful and so heartfelt! Every single word resonating with me as I am doubtless walking on that very same path.. just don't want to think of it.. wishing always to have that inner peace.. acceptance.. contentment.. I liked so much the whole poem, your feel and thoughts.. especially the last line! Great work
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Date: 10/1/2020 12:18:00 AM
You have described old age perfectly, Victor, no grumblings:)
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Date: 9/30/2020 12:05:00 PM
- You're young at heart ... and in your thoughts ... your pen proves it, Victor :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 9/29/2020 10:11:00 PM
Your poem portrays the challenges of aging with fine language and imagery. The youth have their challenges, too. Every age is a good age, is what I believe. Blessings. :)
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Date: 9/29/2020 3:45:00 PM
tenderly relayed with soulful imprints...victor, you found the fountain of youth whether you like it or like it...huggs
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Date: 9/29/2020 11:52:00 AM
Hello Victor, a beautiful poem. I let my inner child out. i have always felt that age is just a number. Enjoy your day my friend.
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Date: 9/29/2020 10:45:00 AM
Great imagery, but I am always told, You're as old as you feel. Hugs Eve
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Date: 9/29/2020 8:14:00 AM
I'm glad you're taking this with stride. A great write that brings a lot to think about as we age. Peace, Angie
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Date: 9/29/2020 6:02:00 AM
Enjoyed the depth of your introspection that many can relate to as they age. Emotions and feelings adorn your poem, Victor--great ending,
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Date: 9/29/2020 6:00:00 AM
They say wisdom and experience comes with a price, slower mobility and to round it off a few aches and pains. Tom
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Date: 9/29/2020 5:30:00 AM
oh, grumble Victor, grumble...it is the lion's roar muffled by wisdom....but then again it has been said the old age is a privilege not afford to all
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