Nette Onclaud Poet Dodoitsu

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As Cupid Thrills

A paradise rare beckons,
cradling our shadows’ whispers
to draw fine  lips  upon mine…
while tickled moon peeps.

How gently wild passion blooms…
when hands caress  each other
in a flame of surrender,
razing a night’s heat.
 
And ember’s scent lingers on
prompting rose-moon to quiver
till our eyes greet , anew
you gaze…I wink back.

Into  love’s  final blooming ,
we  vow under hazel trees 
names etched  on sand, as Cupid
marks a sweetened rite!



Sweet Valentine Contest
For  Nayda Ivette Negron  Re-posted 1/28/2018

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Line Gauthier February 4, 2018 at 1:37 PM Beautiful imagery. Congrats on your win, nette.

Heidi Sands February 2, 2018 at 4:17 PM Congratulations for your win Nette :)

Connie Marcum Wong February 1, 2018 at 10:14 PM Congratulations on this unique and creative poem being honored with Third place Nette! Kudos! : )

Eve Roper February 1, 2018 at 8:28 PM Nette, congratulations on this lovely piece :)

Poet Destroyer A December 20, 2015 at 12:46 AM Nette, awesome win. Linda

Skat A December 19, 2015 at 2:08 PM Nette, congratulations on your nice win. SKAT

Andrew Crisci December 19, 2015 at 10:20 AM Congratulations on your fantastic win, Nette. You verses are as unique as your personality. Your imagination is the force that helps to create such amazing scenes. Thank you for your comment yesterday. Merry Christmas from my heart! Have a wonderful weekend. Hugs, Andrew.

Viv Wigley December 19, 2015 at 2:46 AM Terrific, love the phrasing, wish I was there with you. Then again, nette, you'd probably slap me :) Congrats! Viv x

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser December 19, 2015 at 2:27 AM Nette, *** I find this poem creative, the imagery and the descriptive phrases that envelopes my imagination while I rest reading every line, Yes, you haven't mentioned the particular words of the theme but it's there in a few but you include even the stars, moon and bamboos trembles and thrills… =`) I find that cute and I just couldn't ignore this! BIG CONGRATULATIONS! I thank you for your kind consideration!!! ~hugs and smiles, Olive Eloisa =`)

Keith Bickerstaffe December 14, 2015 at 9:53 AM Super syllabic structure abd flow. Again, fascinating phrasing and vivid imagery. '...cradling our shadows' whispers,' 'while tickled moon peeps,' '...prompting mint stars to quiver.' Oh, if I could write like you! BRAVO nette! Keith

CayCay Godwin December 13, 2015 at 1:23 AM So good, so good, so good - oh, girl ... CayCay

Jajosh Ongado December 11, 2015 at 12:19 PM Resplendent poem on true love.Your fluid diction makes my heart sing.Off to thrill my wifey!

Amelie Mara December 11, 2015 at 11:58 AM The affection and final promise touch the heart. Truly a stunning, well-worded poem!

Maurice Yvonne December 11, 2015 at 7:15 AM Just brilliant nette what a thrill for me to read this wonderful piece this morning a definite fav and may your God given talent always serve you. Lots of Love, Armand