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Army of power

The iron men march on Rending the earth from the sky Landscape despoiled

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Date: 7/14/2010 5:07:00 AM
I'm inclined to agree with Deborah. The poem is about the pylons and power cable which litter our countryside, in that context it fits as a haiku a bit better, thanks for the comments.
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Date: 7/13/2010 4:45:00 PM
three actions..marching...rending...despoiling ...a single act of natural beauty frozen in time with line 3 usually a twist or cut or juxtaposition on the first 2 lines..this is what makes a haiku to me. You have written a powerful short verse.
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Date: 6/26/2010 9:23:00 PM
Good imagery here. I am sure enjoying your recent poetry. Just a few more and then I'll let you alone!
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Date: 6/24/2010 9:34:00 AM
Cool poem! I like it.
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Date: 6/16/2010 10:14:00 AM
well put. war is sickening. Look forward to the time when wars will cease. (Psalm 46:9)
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Date: 6/16/2010 9:22:00 AM
A nice haiku with apt images
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