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Apple and a Rose

I brushed water colors with thoughts of Adam's Eve
and the fallen one who was disguised to deceive
this naked nymph, who strikes a nubile pose
offering a ripened apple and a crimson rose

Both face and body, painted innocently pure
her femininity was unquestionably demure
but with forbidden fruit bitten, it was all lost
From Eden's paradise she and Adam were tossed.

Uprooted as a tree, she forfeited divine favor
The evil reptile's lie succeeded to enslave her
Woe to the male offspring she was created to bear
One killed by the hand of the other, his plight forswear

To them, closed forever was the garden's gate
The finality of death then became mankind's fate
A wrong path was chosen when she'd been warned
gave way to mortality that all of us have mourned

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Jan Allison February 10, 2024 at 2:42 AM excellent ink Lin, I'm not usually one to read religious themed poems but this is so beautifully penned and sneds out a powerful message:-) hugs jan xx Lin Lane February 10, 2024 at 8:25 AM I'm aware, Jan, which makes your comments on this one even more special to me. Thanks, chick.

Daniel Henry Rodgers February 9, 2024 at 4:59 PM Dearest Lin, This is a hauntingly beautiful exploration of the timeless tale of Adam and Eve. Through delicate strokes of watercolor words, you put together the complexities of temptation, innocence, and consequence with profound elegance. The ripened apple and the crimson rose evokes a sense of both allure and foreboding, mirroring the duality of human nature and the choices we face. A wonderful poem, Lin. - Blessings, Daniel Lin Lane February 10, 2024 at 8:25 AM How very kind are your comments, Daniel. I think I just might have to paint my vision for this one... of course featuring the crimson rose and an apple. Your thoughts always are delightful to read. Thank you ever so much.

Terry Flood February 9, 2024 at 3:51 PM A marvellous write, Lin, which I believe depicts the events that led to the first known use of that oft used expression… “That bloody woman!”. Seriously though, I usually steer clear of religious ‘stuff’ but this drew me in and also taught me a little. Great! Lin Lane February 10, 2024 at 8:23 AM Yeah, she was too easily influenced, but 'That bloody man' didn't have to take a bite either. LOL Thanks for reading this one, Terry. I never preach religion, but this drawing was screaming at me to pick up my pen.