Paul Callus Poet Dodoitsu

Aphrodite

Gorgeous, eternally young
Alluring she emerges 
Rising from the foaming waves
In dazzling beauty.

The forged magical girdle
She wears ‘round her naked waist
Attracts with enticing charms
The power of love.

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Contest: Dodoitsu
Sponsor: Dr. Ram Mehta

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Julia Ward March 10, 2015 at 3:00 AM "Eternally young" - a quality that "mutton dressed as lamb" women don't cut. Well done for your description of Aphrodite. Hugs, Julia Paul Callus March 10, 2015 at 11:16 AM Nothing wrong with wishing to be eternally young...but we know that it's not possible! But looking good is possible and satisfying....not to the extent of resorting to all kinds of beauty ops:) Hugs // paul

Carol Mays February 19, 2015 at 8:09 PM Paul--I was inspired by these beautiful images. Thank you. Carol Paul Callus February 20, 2015 at 10:51 AM I have to thank you, Carol! Knowing that you have been touched by these few lines is what matters most! // paul

Bonnie Hollywood-Cutts February 17, 2015 at 4:05 PM very vivid imagery to this one. It kept my attention as I could imagine see her ccome on short using her charms to woo the helpless man back to her Paul Callus February 17, 2015 at 4:27 PM Many thanks Bonnie for stopping by with lovely comments. Pleased to make your acquaintance. // paul

Andrea Dietrich February 15, 2015 at 5:34 PM forgot to say, sorry about your dog. that is the same age that my Callie cat got to before we had her put to sleep, age 17. Paul Callus February 16, 2015 at 3:07 PM To be exact, Snowball was a male cat, as white as snow; in the end it would have been cruel to prolong his then miserable life. My ban on animals has now gone haywire...all of a sudden my son started bringing in birds! We reached a compromise...he puts them in the shed!

Demetrios Trifiatis February 12, 2015 at 7:38 AM You have succeeded sculpturing her body having your pen a chisel, dear Paul! A masterpiece accomplished, a seven for that! In case any of your readers doesn't know! Aphrodite is a compound word from Afros=foam and the verb diome=rise or come out of the foam of the sea. Paul Callus February 13, 2015 at 4:15 PM Hi Demi! Finally managing to answer to some comments; it's been frustrating with no soup mail coming through. As you can see, I used foam and rising since they're both derived from the goddess's name. Greek mythology has long been in my heart. All the best. // paul

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders February 11, 2015 at 10:38 PM A beautiful, sensual entry for the doditsu contest, Paul! It reminds of a poem a boy wrote for me when I was 16. He compared me to Aphrodite...LOL. See, it still gives me a good laugh! Hugs, Rhonda Paul Callus February 13, 2015 at 4:03 PM At least this served to take you back to teenage years, Rhonda! Bet you have preserved that poem:) I am sure he appreciated beauty! Thanks for stopping by...and Happy Valentine's Day! hugs // paul

Richard Lamoureux February 11, 2015 at 7:20 PM This has winner written all over it! Paul Callus February 13, 2015 at 4:00 PM thank you Richard; all the best! // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen February 11, 2015 at 7:37 AM - A beautiful painting, Greek mythology Paul - Luck in contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Paul Callus February 13, 2015 at 3:59 PM Greek mythology is a favourite of mine, Anne Lise. I see that you like:) Have a happy Valentine's Day! hugs /x/ paul

Casarah Nance February 11, 2015 at 7:36 AM Oh great job with this Paul! :) Paul Callus February 13, 2015 at 3:57 PM Glad you enjoyed...thank you Casarah! // paul

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty February 11, 2015 at 3:56 AM Enticing indeed. Love Paul Paul Callus February 13, 2015 at 3:28 PM Thank you Rajat; have a nice weekend my friend. // paul

David Meade February 10, 2015 at 10:41 PM Enticing charms indeed -- I don't think we are talking chocolate brownies here. Nicely done dear friend. 7 Paul Callus February 13, 2015 at 3:33 PM Somewhat different from chocolate brownies, David! A goddess of beauty and love she is, and her charms are felt by many. Glad you read and enjoyed my friend. // paul

Eileen Manassian February 10, 2015 at 10:25 PM Love this!!! WOW! You really seem to love Aphrodite! Not the first time you've mentioned her. Lovely piece. Hugs Paul Callus February 13, 2015 at 3:27 PM Yes, Eileen; I've mentioned her before; as goddess who radiates love to others she has to be given due attention. She might be 'eternal', but it's up to us to keep her flame burning. hugs and a happy Valentine's day. // paul

Charmaine Chircop February 10, 2015 at 9:25 PM Aphrodite's beauty and love goes together,and you made this vision come to life Paul..I can picture this greek goddess..Awesome. Paul Callus February 13, 2015 at 3:15 PM Thank you for the lovely comments, Charm. Hope you have a lovely Valentine's Day...who knows, maybe roses this year, for a change!! // paul

Debbie Guzzi February 10, 2015 at 7:36 PM So nice to read your verse this evening. There is nothing like love is there? Light & Love Paul Callus February 13, 2015 at 3:04 PM Let's say that love inspires many of our writes:) glad you enjoyed. All the best. // paul

Ilene Bauer February 10, 2015 at 6:51 PM ooh, very smoothly done, paul! nice one! Paul Callus February 13, 2015 at 3:02 PM Thank you Ilene...love your smooth comment! // paul

Dorian Petersen Potter February 10, 2015 at 6:36 PM Very nice pen Paul! Your dodoitsu suit about Aphrodite is very lovely, my dear friend. Well done! A 7 from me! GL in the contest! In his light! God bless! :) Love n' hugs! xxx D. Paul Callus February 13, 2015 at 2:53 PM Thank you Dorian, especially for rating it high. Pleased that you enjoyed. Thank you also for your continued support. All the best. // paul

Andrea Dietrich February 10, 2015 at 6:09 PM You portrayed her very well, Paul. Love that you chose the Goddess of Love! Paul Callus February 13, 2015 at 2:32 PM Hi Andrea! am playing around trying to answer comments by trial and error; not getting any soup mail has disrupted me no end! Aphrodite is a favourite of mine (....and prefer the name to the Roman Venus!) Happy Valentine's Day:) // paul

Jan Allison February 10, 2015 at 6:05 PM You have portrayed this Greek godess to perfection - good luck in the contest:-) Hugs jan xx 7 xx Jan Allison February 11, 2015 at 3:11 PM I have added a picture now Paul - lol:-) Hugs Jan xx Paul Callus February 11, 2015 at 2:50 PM Thank you, Jan! Have just read your monoku:) hugs // paul