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Another Tall Tale

Hi Mom. Sorry I'm late. I wanted to bring you something cuz I love you.
See, I was walking by the lake and saw this pretty flower waving at me.
It was like it was saying, "Hey Joey, take me home to your Mom."
It kept calling me so I just HAD to swim out and get it for you.
I even had to fight off an alligator when he tried to eat me!
He pulled me under, but I punched him in the nose and he swam away.
But then this big ole snake hissed at me.  He had teeth as big as a lion!  
I'm not kidding, Mom. I was scared, but I wanted that flower for you.
Welllll.... then this HUGE bird with gold eyes came flying out of a tree, 
you know the one that grows out over the lake?  This bird was red,
ummm...maybe it was a dragon. Anyway, he screamed real loud and 
grabbed the snake just as he was gonna get me.  I think that bird 
breathed fire and the snake burned all up.  Yeah, that's what happened.

"I'm so glad you weren't eaten, Joey, but where is the flower?"

Oh yeah, I was gettin' to that part.  I reached for it but a whole 
bunch of bees flew out of it, so I had to swim underwater to get away.

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James Inman July 11, 2016 at 10:31 PM Lin, I read this a while back but obviously did not comment about it. I think it is so imaginative and sweet. The little boy sounds much like me when I was a child. I never lied but I certain loved my tales and I would have brought home a flower for my mom.

Timothy Hicks May 16, 2016 at 9:09 PM I think this was one of more entertaining ones I've read, Lin ... loved the humor of the twist ending. Somehow I think the bees was the only believable aspect of his story ... ha ha. "Yeah, that's what happened." ... It's phrases likes these that make me smile, because I can see your personality in them ... very cute. Lin Lane May 17, 2016 at 8:47 AM Despite not placing in the contest, I consider your praises worth more than that of the judge. thanks, Tim. Lin Lane May 17, 2016 at 1:55 AM Thank you, Tim. Just tryin' to keep it real, and I'm happy to make you smile. ;)

Balveen Cheema May 16, 2016 at 4:35 AM Very sweet! A 7, lin! Lin Lane May 16, 2016 at 8:28 AM Thanks so much, Balveen.

The Grahamburglar May 5, 2016 at 5:48 PM Aha! Clever, imaginative and what a fun one to read. You have quite the imagination. Thanks for this fun tall tale, and good luck in the contest. -G Lin Lane May 5, 2016 at 10:33 PM Thank you so much, Graham. It was time well spent laughing at myself.

Charlie Smith May 5, 2016 at 10:31 AM Wait just a minute, that's what happened to me...the best I remember. Good luck in the contest, Charlie Lin Lane May 5, 2016 at 10:46 AM LOL Charlie. You probably wore that cute little innocent smile, didn't ya? Thanks for reading. ;)

Beautiful Scars May 5, 2016 at 10:24 AM awww cute Lin..good luck! :)-luloo Lin Lane May 5, 2016 at 10:45 AM Thanks, Luloo. I had so much trouble limiting it to 16 lines.