Another Confession, Inspired By Denise Narayadu's Confessions of a Drug

You invigorated my mind, then followed my heart I felt the loss of myself as the dark hours passed Will this wanting ever end, how could I let it start You were so clever slowly breaking me part by part Brief moments of euphoria that never seem to last You invigorated my mind, then followed my heart Now I’m a donkey and for a carrot I’ll pull the cart Slave to a cruel master and forever I will be outcast Will this wanting ever end, how could I let it start A wise fool I am, confessing myself I’m so smart Foolishness displayed by the useless questions I ask You invigorated my mind, then followed my heart If you’re confessing your weakness, I’ll cast a dart You feel the sting, and my words make you aghast Will this wanting end, how could I let is even start You want reality to be one glorious work of art Out of that, only shame and regret have amassed You invigorated my mind, then followed my heart Will this wanting ever end, how could I let it start
As stated this was inspired by Denise Narayadu's poem. Denise is a wonderful poet who's work I recently discovered, she's gaining momentum quickly.

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Date: 12/14/2013 2:33:00 PM
You are awesome too...love ur kind of style. Alwaz, Based On Belief
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Wayland Bunch
Date: 12/14/2013 2:50:00 PM
Thanks for your visit and your comment.
Date: 12/14/2013 7:36:00 AM
WOW... a place i come to read your poetry and find a complement for myself, it means alot coming from you, thank you Wayland... i enjoyed your version of that title, it is always a pleasure reading your poetry.
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Wayland Bunch
Date: 12/14/2013 11:17:00 AM
Your poetry I'd very powerful, like I said this really only emphasises a few lines from your poem. I could probably write ten villanelles over it, but I won't attempt it lol. Thanks for your comment and always for reading.
Date: 12/14/2013 7:35:00 AM
You are very good at this form. You may wish to consider changing past to passed, it still rhymes but makes more sense in the context of how you have written the line.
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Wayland Bunch
Date: 12/14/2013 11:14:00 AM
Good eye and you're very correct it still rhymes anyway, thanks for the correction and for the comment.
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