Angel

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March 15, 2025

~ Ninth Place ~
Premiere Contest: Angels
Sponsor: Mystic Rose Rose

In a state of half a dream and half awake
  I await 

tantra trinkets shine in pieces across night skies  
scattered stars the litter of our synchronized wishes 
broken symbols of our disenchanted rune  

cosmic poets cursed the lutestring verse rhymed for us
I’m lost  astray  a pearl loosed from a fractured string
lost in ashes of embers   our fire that fed the sun
will you search a cosmos of starving stars
their shimmer growing dimmer til light withers
will you search a famished universe to find me
a spec of earthly widow dust settled  stilled

sweet Venus  intercede before dark recedes
listen   a nightingale’s sonnet song rides the air
melody’s flame melts ice-blonde moonbeams
a buttery pool the singer’s smitten spotlight
his rhapsody brims his beloved to swoon
 
oh Venus  let lyric desire be my angel’s glide path

in a state of half a dream and half awake
  sensual my soulmate

an invite for my griever skin to tingle  to thaw
touch me warm  my angel  touch me warm
billow tender breeze through window’s yawn
pale cheeks brushed  lips shushed   a lover’s rush
light as a scarf’s silk slide  I tremble like a cello string
soft breaths move the curtains and swell my sighs 
wind spirit purrs my name   I close my eyes
your ethereal presence  your physical absence
how poetic this dual ache throbbing the same space
inside a pearl  weary and weeping  for you

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Paul Callus

Date: 3/19/2025 11:35:00 AM

It's amazing how a simple 'angel' prompt is capable of eliciting from you this beautiful offering, dear Susan. I haven't had the pleasure of reading many of your poems lately, but I can assure you that you have lost none of your poetic touch, especially technical richness (it would take up all the available space to laud the use of metaphor, alliteration, personification, movement, description, a strong appeal to emotion and senses, etc.) ~ Warm regards & Hugs my friend..keep flying!! // paul

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/30/2025 10:12:00 AM

Dear Paul, I revel in the delight of your visit! It's wonderful to see you and to receive your inspiring comments. I'm thrilled to know you enjoyed my poem! Thank you for sharing in the emotions and imagery of this piece. Your precious thoughts have the power to lift me to fly beyond the clouds :) Always in gratitude to you, for your kindness, encouragement and for the gift of your beautiful poetry. I hope all is well with you, my wonderful poet friend. Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan

Sam Kauffman

Date: 3/17/2025 11:32:00 AM

My Dearest Rhyme Time Friend, once again I am in awe of your poetic ability to make words fly into realms of inspiration - "lost astray like a pearl loosed from a fractured string - "sharing the same space/inside a pearl!" Your opening lines are just brilliant! And your ability to create beauty by pairing words into stunning images leaves me breathless, sweet poetry sis. Your writing is simply amazing and we are blessed by it. Congratulations on your win! Sending you strings of blessings like shimmering pearls!

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/30/2025 10:19:00 AM

My Dearest Rhyme Time Friend, it's truly wonderful to see you and to receive your heartwarming words! Your presence here has been sorely missed, by myself, and by your legion of fans at PS :) Thank you for sharing in the emotions and imagery of this poem with me. Your beautiful thoughts and kind congrats are treasured, my sweet poetry sis. Warmest wishes sent on rays of Venus light.. ~Susan

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 3/17/2025 4:13:00 AM

Thank you for joining my contest. It isn't easy writing about Angels. You all took it to a new level of consciousness for me. Each entry dove me closer to the thought that Angels exist. You are all winners in my book, grateful for all your efforts. May God bless your beautiful hearts, each and every one of you Love, Mystic

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/22/2025 10:22:00 AM

Dear Mystic Rose, thank you for my poem's placement in your wonderful contest. I enjoyed writing for your "angel" prompt. Your lovely comments are truly appreciated as was your contest sponsorship. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 3/16/2025 8:29:00 AM

A fascinating poem. The metaphors are remarkable.

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/16/2025 8:44:00 AM

Dear Hilda, I'm thrilled to receive your lovely comments. Thank you for your wonderful visit, my poet friend. I find the wind to be inspiring. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Frederic Parker

Date: 3/15/2025 4:51:00 PM

There are many poetic lines in this poem, each one melts the heart in throbbing rhythm, each one dances on the imagined image of love. A very creative take Susan, dear friend, dear poet...Frederic

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/16/2025 8:27:00 AM

Frederic, dear friend, dear poet, I relish your beautiful and poetic response to my poem. Not sure if this is what Mystic Rose is looking for but this is what the contest prompt brought our from me. Thank you for sharing in the romance and imagination of this piece with me. As always, it's such a joy when your presence graces my poem's page. Warmest wishes dear friend, dear poet.. ~Susan