Daniel Turner Poet Iambic Pentameter

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An Unpaid Debt

With less tomorrows than I've yesterdays
In looking back I have but one regret
Before that last tomorrow fades away
I wish that I could pay an unpaid debt

Back to a summer day so long ago
How frivolous we were with innocence
Two kids in love and way too young to know
Decisions made in haste have consequence

In tenderness I'd kiss away her tears
I'd tell her I am sorry for her pain
Give back the love I'd carried all those years
Convince her that her gift was not in vain

I'd ask for her forgiveness on my knees
Tears of contrition I would surely weep
Then thank her for life's sweetest memory
And with her blessing peacefully I'd sleep


  October 10 2016

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James Inman November 23, 2016 at 1:30 PM A touching write Daniel. Daniel Turner November 24, 2016 at 9:08 AM Thank you, James. Happy Thanksgiving!

Lim'Rik Flats October 25, 2016 at 9:49 AM I've never stopped writing "do-over" poetry and consider it the bane of my old guy existence. I read this last night before beddy-bye and was greatly affected by it. I've no fancy words to say, just great job! bests atcha ~ john Daniel Turner October 25, 2016 at 10:13 AM Thank you, John. i appreciate your kindness.

Freddie Robinson Jr. October 22, 2016 at 12:23 PM Very touching poem, Daniel. Hearts do heal w/time. But forgiveness make them impervious to the next heart break situation. Fine write, good work. Enjoyed it much. Ty for sharing. Daniel Turner October 23, 2016 at 4:50 PM Thank you Freddie for taking the time to read. I really appreciate your kind comments.

Sara Kendrick October 18, 2016 at 10:41 AM Enjoyed reading your winning work..Good to see it in the winners' list..Congrats..Sara Daniel Turner October 21, 2016 at 8:32 AM Thank you Mrs Sara. You are so sweet. I appreciate your kind comments:)

Joanna Daniel October 18, 2016 at 1:51 AM This is a touching write, Daniel... Congratulations on your win:) it's never too late to set right a mistake... Daniel Turner October 21, 2016 at 8:31 AM Thank you Jo. I appreciate your kind comments:)

Agnes Krampe October 16, 2016 at 4:05 PM Daniel, your poem is expertly crafted and of such beautiful sentiment; I enjoyed it very much. Congrats on your win. Agnes Daniel Turner October 16, 2016 at 4:17 PM Thank you, Mrs Agnes, You are very thoughtful. I appreciate your kind comments. I liked yours much more:)

CayCay Godwin October 16, 2016 at 1:41 AM Beautiful, Daniel - I missed this somehow and it is such a delightful and touching find. I can relate to the emotional feel so beautifully expressed. This is more than touching, it is nostalgic to me because it takes me back to young love and the residual feelings that linger through time. Congratulations ... CayCay Daniel Turner October 16, 2016 at 7:11 AM Thank you CayCay. You are very thoughtful. I appreciate your kind comments.

Connie Marcum Wong October 15, 2016 at 8:41 PM This poem has the ability to touch the heart Daniel. It is so deserving of your first place honor. Congratulations my friend! 7 ; ) Daniel Turner October 16, 2016 at 7:10 AM Thank you Mrs Connie. Nice to see you, How are you doing? Are your eyes getting better? I appreciate your kind comments.

Jack Webster October 15, 2016 at 8:09 PM wow! what great ease of voice and conversational persona. What excellent skill! Congratulations :) Daniel Turner October 16, 2016 at 7:09 AM Thank you Jack. I appreciate your kind comments.

Meenakshi Raina October 15, 2016 at 7:14 PM Daniel....Congratulations on your top placement! What a beautiful write with a smooth flow... Daniel Turner October 16, 2016 at 7:08 AM Thank you, Meenakshi. I really appreciate your kind comments.

Janis Medders Tobechi October 15, 2016 at 4:09 PM Lovely flow to this poem. Well written. Congratulations on your top placement. Daniel Turner October 16, 2016 at 7:07 AM Thank you Janis. I appreciate your kind comments.

Janice Canerdy October 15, 2016 at 2:24 PM Daniel, thank you for participating in the contest. Congrats on your win! Janice Daniel Turner October 15, 2016 at 2:30 PM Thank you Janice for letting me participate and for honoring my poem. It was lots of fun:)

Sandra Haight October 15, 2016 at 1:56 PM What a beautiful and very touching poem you have written in this difficult form, Daniel. Congratulations on your well-deserved 1st Place win. Sandra Daniel Turner October 15, 2016 at 2:29 PM Thank you, Mrs Sandra. I appreciate your kind comments and support.

Kim Rodrigues October 15, 2016 at 1:52 PM Very nice! Congrats, Daniel! Daniel Turner October 15, 2016 at 2:27 PM Thank you, Mrs Kim. That's very thoughtful:)

Jack Eldridge October 13, 2016 at 6:38 PM A fav! What a memory for many Thanks! Daniel Turner October 13, 2016 at 7:15 PM Thank you, Jack. I'm glad you liked it. I appreciate your kind comments,

Wendy Rycroft October 13, 2016 at 1:28 PM Great beautiful poem xxx Daniel Turner October 13, 2016 at 2:35 PM Thank you, Mrs Wendy. You're very sweet. I appreciate your kind comments and support:)

Janice Canerdy October 13, 2016 at 1:03 PM I wish I could give higher than 7! This is a beautiful, poignant, skillfully-written poem, Daniel. Janice Daniel Turner October 13, 2016 at 2:34 PM Thank you, Janice. I'm glad you liked it:) It's always such a pleasure for me when you drop by.

Vladislav Raven October 11, 2016 at 9:04 PM Hi Daniel, such poems as these always touch me deeply. I can relate to these words. Ut is a catch 22 situation. I sometimes wonder what would have been if i had went to the states with the lass? Would she be alive now if i had been with her? Only God knows the answer to that one. Took me over thirty years to forgive myself. Mary found me and i knew love again. Funny how some writes can bring back these thoughts. An excellent write Daniel. Let your emotional song sing. A definite seven Daniel. Daniel Turner October 13, 2016 at 10:30 AM Thanks Mike. It's really nice to see you again. I appreciate you taking the time to stop by to say hello. Thank you for the wonderful comments and support.

Andrea Dietrich October 11, 2016 at 3:14 PM wow, this is deep and beautiful, Daniel.Most guys would not even give this kind of thing a second thought. yOu are a sensitive man. Daniel Turner October 11, 2016 at 3:37 PM Thank you, Andrea. I broke a promise and it has bothered me all of my life. I appreciate your kind comments. You are very sweet. Hoping you are well:)

Eve Roper October 11, 2016 at 1:58 PM Our past and our transgressions if we could go back and do over again :-( sometimes we are led a different path for our well-being so we need to forgive ourselves because it was not meant to be . Beautiful write Daniel Hugs Eve :-) Daniel Turner October 11, 2016 at 3:34 PM Thank you, Mrs Eve. You are correct. It is more about self forgiveness. That is what the poem is really talking about. i know the person has gone on to live a happy and successful life and probably hasn't given it a second thought but I on the other hand am the one who broke a promise. I have not forgiven myself.

Tony Devers October 11, 2016 at 9:37 AM I especially love that first line - it suggests that you are actually quite comfortable being in the autumn of your years; or would be if you could make this one amend. A bitter sweet poem. Daniel Turner October 11, 2016 at 9:40 AM Thank you, Tony. Yes, I am comfortable with my age. I have always tried to be a man who kept his word and I can think of a time when I did not. We all have our regrets and I know deep down I have been forgiven but I would like to tell them personally. I appreciate your kind comments and support:)

Tim Ryerson October 11, 2016 at 8:57 AM The first line starts this gem off perfectly and I can certainly identify because I have past misdeeds as do we all...Alas, we cannot change the past, only learn from it. Yet the memories remain...GREAT piece of writing sir! - Tim Daniel Turner October 11, 2016 at 9:03 AM Thank you, Tim. Yes we have done things we would like to do over with the wisdom we have gained with life. I appreciate your kind comments and support.

Supraja Kannan October 11, 2016 at 7:27 AM How nice of you to say this!A big 7...A beautiful piece... Daniel Turner October 11, 2016 at 8:49 AM Thank you, Supraja. You are so kind. I really appreciate all of your continued support. It is ever inspiring.

Nette Onclaud October 11, 2016 at 7:01 AM daniel, you have atoned for any misdeed and that is enough to bring you peace.. what an intense, beautiful write that flows in rhythmic beats!... we all have those moments; that makes us divinely human!...thanks for being there for me!..soupie again.. huggs Daniel Turner October 11, 2016 at 8:48 AM Thank you nette. You are so sweet and a dear friend and that's what friends are for:) i always love looking up and seeing your beautiful smile.

Dave Timperley October 11, 2016 at 3:01 AM I believe we can all say we have that unpaid debt as we can also say "if only". Lovely write Daniel and thank you for reading my stuff.. God Bless. D. Daniel Turner October 11, 2016 at 8:46 AM Thank you, Dave. I believe you are right. Hopefully we have all been forgiven. I appreciate your time and support and you know I love your poetry:)

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