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With less tomorrows than I've yesterdays
In looking back I have but one regret
Before that last tomorrow fades away
I wish that I could pay an unpaid debt

Back to a summer day so long ago
How frivolous we were with innocence
Two kids in love and way too young to know
Decisions made in haste have consequence

In tenderness I'd kiss away her tears
I'd tell her I am sorry for her pain
Give back the love I'd carried all those years
Convince her that her gift was not in vain

I'd ask for her forgiveness on my knees
Tears of contrition I would surely weep
Then thank her for life's sweetest memory
And with her blessing peacefully I'd sleep


  October 10 2016

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Date: 11/23/2016 1:30:00 PM
A touching write Daniel.
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Date: 11/24/2016 9:08:00 AM
Thank you, James. Happy Thanksgiving!
Date: 10/25/2016 9:49:00 AM
I've never stopped writing "do-over" poetry and consider it the bane of my old guy existence. I read this last night before beddy-bye and was greatly affected by it. I've no fancy words to say, just great job! bests atcha ~ john
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Date: 10/25/2016 10:13:00 AM
Thank you, John. i appreciate your kindness.
Date: 10/22/2016 12:23:00 PM
Very touching poem, Daniel. Hearts do heal w/time. But forgiveness make them impervious to the next heart break situation. Fine write, good work. Enjoyed it much. Ty for sharing.
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Date: 10/23/2016 4:50:00 PM
Thank you Freddie for taking the time to read. I really appreciate your kind comments.
Date: 10/18/2016 10:41:00 AM
Enjoyed reading your winning work..Good to see it in the winners' list..Congrats..Sara
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Date: 10/21/2016 8:32:00 AM
Thank you Mrs Sara. You are so sweet. I appreciate your kind comments:)
Date: 10/18/2016 1:51:00 AM
This is a touching write, Daniel... Congratulations on your win:) it's never too late to set right a mistake...
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Date: 10/21/2016 8:31:00 AM
Thank you Jo. I appreciate your kind comments:)
Date: 10/16/2016 4:05:00 PM
Daniel, your poem is expertly crafted and of such beautiful sentiment; I enjoyed it very much. Congrats on your win. Agnes
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Date: 10/16/2016 4:17:00 PM
Thank you, Mrs Agnes, You are very thoughtful. I appreciate your kind comments. I liked yours much more:)
Date: 10/16/2016 1:41:00 AM
Beautiful, Daniel - I missed this somehow and it is such a delightful and touching find. I can relate to the emotional feel so beautifully expressed. This is more than touching, it is nostalgic to me because it takes me back to young love and the residual feelings that linger through time. Congratulations ... CayCay
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Date: 10/16/2016 7:11:00 AM
Thank you CayCay. You are very thoughtful. I appreciate your kind comments.
Date: 10/15/2016 8:41:00 PM
This poem has the ability to touch the heart Daniel. It is so deserving of your first place honor. Congratulations my friend! 7 ; )
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Date: 10/16/2016 7:10:00 AM
Thank you Mrs Connie. Nice to see you, How are you doing? Are your eyes getting better? I appreciate your kind comments.
Date: 10/15/2016 8:09:00 PM
wow! what great ease of voice and conversational persona. What excellent skill! Congratulations :)
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Date: 10/16/2016 7:09:00 AM
Thank you Jack. I appreciate your kind comments.
Date: 10/15/2016 7:14:00 PM
Daniel....Congratulations on your top placement! What a beautiful write with a smooth flow...
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Date: 10/16/2016 7:08:00 AM
Thank you, Meenakshi. I really appreciate your kind comments.
Date: 10/15/2016 4:09:00 PM
Lovely flow to this poem. Well written. Congratulations on your top placement.
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Date: 10/16/2016 7:07:00 AM
Thank you Janis. I appreciate your kind comments.
Date: 10/15/2016 2:24:00 PM
Daniel, thank you for participating in the contest. Congrats on your win! Janice
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Date: 10/15/2016 2:30:00 PM
Thank you Janice for letting me participate and for honoring my poem. It was lots of fun:)
Date: 10/15/2016 1:56:00 PM
What a beautiful and very touching poem you have written in this difficult form, Daniel. Congratulations on your well-deserved 1st Place win. Sandra
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Date: 10/15/2016 2:29:00 PM
Thank you, Mrs Sandra. I appreciate your kind comments and support.
Date: 10/15/2016 1:52:00 PM
Very nice! Congrats, Daniel!
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Date: 10/15/2016 2:27:00 PM
Thank you, Mrs Kim. That's very thoughtful:)
Date: 10/13/2016 6:38:00 PM
A fav! What a memory for many Thanks!
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Date: 10/13/2016 7:15:00 PM
Thank you, Jack. I'm glad you liked it. I appreciate your kind comments,
Date: 10/13/2016 1:28:00 PM
Great beautiful poem xxx
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Date: 10/13/2016 2:35:00 PM
Thank you, Mrs Wendy. You're very sweet. I appreciate your kind comments and support:)
Date: 10/13/2016 1:03:00 PM
I wish I could give higher than 7! This is a beautiful, poignant, skillfully-written poem, Daniel. Janice
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Date: 10/13/2016 2:34:00 PM
Thank you, Janice. I'm glad you liked it:) It's always such a pleasure for me when you drop by.
Date: 10/11/2016 9:04:00 PM
Hi Daniel, such poems as these always touch me deeply. I can relate to these words. Ut is a catch 22 situation. I sometimes wonder what would have been if i had went to the states with the lass? Would she be alive now if i had been with her? Only God knows the answer to that one. Took me over thirty years to forgive myself. Mary found me and i knew love again. Funny how some writes can bring back these thoughts. An excellent write Daniel. Let your emotional song sing. A definite seven Daniel.
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Date: 10/13/2016 10:30:00 AM
Thanks Mike. It's really nice to see you again. I appreciate you taking the time to stop by to say hello. Thank you for the wonderful comments and support.
Date: 10/11/2016 3:14:00 PM
wow, this is deep and beautiful, Daniel.Most guys would not even give this kind of thing a second thought. yOu are a sensitive man.
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Date: 10/11/2016 3:37:00 PM
Thank you, Andrea. I broke a promise and it has bothered me all of my life. I appreciate your kind comments. You are very sweet. Hoping you are well:)
Date: 10/11/2016 1:58:00 PM
Our past and our transgressions if we could go back and do over again :-( sometimes we are led a different path for our well-being so we need to forgive ourselves because it was not meant to be . Beautiful write Daniel Hugs Eve :-)
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Date: 10/11/2016 3:34:00 PM
Thank you, Mrs Eve. You are correct. It is more about self forgiveness. That is what the poem is really talking about. i know the person has gone on to live a happy and successful life and probably hasn't given it a second thought but I on the other hand am the one who broke a promise. I have not forgiven myself.
Date: 10/11/2016 9:37:00 AM
I especially love that first line - it suggests that you are actually quite comfortable being in the autumn of your years; or would be if you could make this one amend. A bitter sweet poem.
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Date: 10/11/2016 9:40:00 AM
Thank you, Tony. Yes, I am comfortable with my age. I have always tried to be a man who kept his word and I can think of a time when I did not. We all have our regrets and I know deep down I have been forgiven but I would like to tell them personally. I appreciate your kind comments and support:)
Date: 10/11/2016 8:57:00 AM
The first line starts this gem off perfectly and I can certainly identify because I have past misdeeds as do we all...Alas, we cannot change the past, only learn from it. Yet the memories remain...GREAT piece of writing sir! - Tim
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Date: 10/11/2016 9:03:00 AM
Thank you, Tim. Yes we have done things we would like to do over with the wisdom we have gained with life. I appreciate your kind comments and support.
Date: 10/11/2016 7:27:00 AM
How nice of you to say this!A big 7...A beautiful piece...
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Date: 10/11/2016 8:49:00 AM
Thank you, Supraja. You are so kind. I really appreciate all of your continued support. It is ever inspiring.
Date: 10/11/2016 7:01:00 AM
daniel, you have atoned for any misdeed and that is enough to bring you peace.. what an intense, beautiful write that flows in rhythmic beats!... we all have those moments; that makes us divinely human!...thanks for being there for me!..soupie again.. huggs
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Date: 10/11/2016 8:48:00 AM
Thank you nette. You are so sweet and a dear friend and that's what friends are for:) i always love looking up and seeing your beautiful smile.
Date: 10/11/2016 3:01:00 AM
I believe we can all say we have that unpaid debt as we can also say "if only". Lovely write Daniel and thank you for reading my stuff.. God Bless. D.
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Date: 10/11/2016 8:46:00 AM
Thank you, Dave. I believe you are right. Hopefully we have all been forgiven. I appreciate your time and support and you know I love your poetry:)
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