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An Excavation

Ensure you allude to all that has been recorded. Every creature that has lived inside the rocks. A long-forgotten former planet has appeared. Awareness arises as we break the padlocks. Electric fan blades are humming in a hot place. When you're alone, and there's no oxygen. Loneliness looms overall aped a pitiful prince. Bedlam rises when commotion inside deepens. Reveal if that's innocuous, or it may injure people. Are words yet another excavation experience? Is it feasible to resurrect a moribund principle? Did you find it bothersome or maybe mysterious? There is a hole where the hamster once paddled. Since the snake hissed at it but didn't even eat it As the animal lays on the floor, its insides splayed. Earth has morphed into the fabric under the seat. Besides birds, giant excavators lay on their palms. Underneath, you may view mind-boggling and tangled traffic. Yet, excavating a gigantic hole in the center of homes. Let Earth deal with melting lakes or roving nomadic. From the tenth balcony, the building site is visible. A goliath, dead pit discharges light, fire, and vitality. Quietness loaded up with facts yelled in din risible. Coated with glass, gaze at a flying towel on a gallery.
Written: June 19, 2021 This or That, Vol 4 Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Edward Ibeh
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Baker Avatar
December 15, 2023 at 5:21 PM
The depth of the words of your poem are enticing, they should be consumed slowing, and digested fully to receive their full meaning. Now two years later, I congratulate you on an early win, my friend. It has stood the test of time; it is still fine poetry. I thought I'd go back before I was posting on Poetry soup to enjoy a few of your older poems. Well worth the effort, my friend. Bill
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July 28, 2021 at 9:04 AM
Congratulations on your win. What a (rhyme) story/write. I love your picture. Have a blessed day with your win...............
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July 28, 2021 at 12:30 PM
Thank you much for your kind words, Paula it's so appreciated
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July 28, 2021 at 6:27 AM
Back with congratulations Lasaad, A more than worthy winner, I’m delighted you got the accolade this one deserves, cheers David
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July 28, 2021 at 12:31 PM
thank you so much, David, it's so kind of you, my deepest regards
Alex Avatar
July 27, 2021 at 10:06 PM
A beautiful Creation. Congratulations!
Poet Avatar
July 28, 2021 at 12:32 PM
Thanks, ALEX, appreciated
Balasubramanian Avatar
June 20, 2021 at 6:56 AM
Excellent take on the contest theme! Loved the line are words another excavation experience. All the best for contest. PS: Poem title should be An Excavation. Recheck contest rules
Poet Avatar
June 20, 2021 at 7:14 AM
Your lovely comment underlines the quality of this poem, which I appreciate much. Thanks for the feedback, and thanks for being right on the title. A Happy and blessed weekend.
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June 20, 2021 at 2:45 AM
Another captivating poem: profound, with plenty of powerful imagery and rhythms that add beauty to your verses, my dearest friend, Lasaad. Good luck! Blessings
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June 20, 2021 at 7:17 AM
Thanks, dearest friend Demetrios, for your great visit and incredible comment. It's so much appreciated, have a safe and blessed weekend.
Buhagiar Avatar
June 20, 2021 at 1:00 AM
That picture is my dream place. And your imagery is fabulous. Best for a win.
Poet Avatar
June 20, 2021 at 7:19 AM
Thanks for your kind words and wishes. Have a blessed weekend.
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June 19, 2021 at 3:38 PM
I was just enjoying this poem when your comment on mine popped up, Is it feasible to resurrect a moribund principle, what great thought provoking words Lasaad, perhaps only in an excavation, you opened up a whole Pandora’s box, with this wonderful write, quite extraordinary language and a multifaceted approach, to the subject matter, very best of luck, cheers David
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June 19, 2021 at 5:18 PM
Many thanks, David; your insightful remark captures the poem's tremendous appeal. I wanted to give some basic ideas on excavation since it is a broad subject with many perspectives. The universe is confused by tampering that deals with unresolved vengeance issues about an unknown future. Have a fantastic weekend.
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June 19, 2021 at 12:49 PM
Lasaad, you have written a very interesting poem full of rich images, accompanied by a beautiful painting. I loved your rhymes and the flow of your piece. Your vocabulary is extensive and you employ it well.
Poet Avatar
June 19, 2021 at 1:16 PM
Thank you so much, Milton; your lovely comment reflects an incredible allure in my poem, which is much appreciated. I intended to provide some fundamental concepts on the topic of excavation since it's a wide-ranging subject and there are various ways to see it. Have a wonderful weekend.
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