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An Eternity II

And I begin my own steep climb into The Chalkland Downs Where none but stiff blast and Continous drone, Warbling chants from drifting curlew, Muffled and alarmed bleats from Scattered flocks of confused and Wandering sheep - Home to the ancient Guardians! And still the blustering winds, Blowing hence Time-Immemorial, Eroding into disapproving frowns Etched on every crumbling brow And sharp escarpment of balding peak; Here all meddlesome tribes of men Are held in equal contempt By these benign Spirits Secured far above the bustling and Intrusive sounds; Scrupulously bearing witness To mundane existence of shabby Lives - Disorganised and unkempt! Every day noise slowly detaching, Floating absently upwards - Forever removed from the creeping Sprawl Of pretty seaside towns. Nothing but a void - An inestimable void of invisible Owl Whose serrated flight shuns the Chaotic hours of Humankind; A great void whose voluminous Updraft Could quite easily inflate the Narrowing corridors Of a wearied and depleted mind; Above, hurrying nonchalantly, And, somewhat, dismissively by:- The outlined caricature of Silhouetted clouds Weakly traced against the dreadful Expanse Of a vast grassland sky! ...And thus I find myself wondering, What now of abandoned promises? Pledges, once earnestly sworn, Callously disowned and then thrown Aside? Thee unpalatable stigma of this Undeserving unworthiness! How easy words are to utter - What an utter confoundment When one tragically feels so Compelled To irretrievably renege on all such Solemn vows! This bellowing furore that does, At an instant, Most strangely, inwardly roar As if enraged like a muted, Pebble-tossing sea! Sudden squalling gusts, slamming Into the car, Appearing, apparently, from out of Nowhere To vigourously assault unto the Angry columns of towering air; The tumultuous display of Heavens Showering Firmaments... Finally, at last - arraigned enmasse! ...Then...a subdued wail that wails Amidst a wailing silence... Which, more and more, Oh so ever disconcertingly... As if a lamentation for happier Moments long since past... Would seem to emanate from within The very depths me! Me...me...driving...all alone... Helplessly trapped in an Infinitely immeasurable, Solitary, brown-coloured bottle of Beer - For all of a damnable eternity!!

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Date: 2/26/2018 6:10:00 PM
Hi John, I'm vacationing on the Pacific coast where the vastness and emptiness of ocean and sky seems scary as well as uplifting. Your imagery is not just descriptive but powerful as in squalling gusts slamming.. the references to the interior World of unfulfilled promises and forgotten moments of happiness bring nature inside. Congrats on a multi-layered poem on an ageless theme. Would love to have you stop by my site to see my attempt to describe eternity. Best regards, dear friend, Kathy
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john fleming
Date: 6/17/2018 3:36:00 PM
Hi, Kathy. My much valued friend I will indeed revisit your excellent work...in fact I shall do it this very minute. All my warmest regards...and very best wishes as ever. :) john
Date: 1/10/2018 7:00:00 AM
You have woven an intricate tale of imagery and metaphor John. I commented recently to someone on one of my writes how a simple idea, such as your bottle of beer, can turn into a meaningful poem when emotions are added. After reading both parts I have found it to be deep and moving.
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Date: 1/21/2018 4:22:00 AM
Thank you, James...and how right you are of course; your insightful comments sum up, perfectly, how the poem came to be. Please be assured you are always most welcome here at my little corner of the "Soup". My very best regards, James. :) john
Date: 11/5/2017 9:29:00 AM
Hello John, My comments from Part One of you work here, equally apply to this Part Two. Tremendous work here and the prose and attendant metaphors are nothing less than marvelous. A FAVE also on this one too!! Best Wishes, Gary
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Date: 11/10/2017 1:39:00 PM
Yes, John -- I`ve found that this has been the same case too on my end especially considering some of my more complex poems I`ve posted at various times in the past. I dare say some poets are probably afraid to venture into reading Pound, Eliot, Rilke, Neruda, Goethe, Heine -- let alone Shakespeare, Chaucer, and Milton to boot!! (And many others too for that matter.) I tend to be, probably like you, not so much a fan directly of modern contemporary poetry such as it is today. Always a great pleasure to exchange notes with you. And I`ll try to keep in touch with your poetry as time permits. (I should have a batch of new poems coming out here before the end of this year.) My Best Wishes, Gary
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Date: 11/9/2017 7:43:00 AM
Thanks, Gary! The fact that you have taken the time to read through both poems is not wasted on me...I am very much indebted to you for this. Most people cannot be bothered to evaluate both poems as one due to their long length; obviously, therefore, this diminishes their ability, unlike yourself, to fully evaluate the poem. My very warmest regards as always, Gary! In gratitude. :) john
Date: 10/5/2017 11:22:00 PM
I can't say that I have the capacity to understand all of the nuances and depth of meaning, but...I feel that this is an important write...that maybe only 2 or 3 on this site are capable of, you John being one of course!
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Date: 10/9/2017 2:13:00 AM
Hello, John. I would like to thank you most sincerely for all your attention and extremely generous comments regarding this poem; and all the other encouraging comments you have so graciously accorded me -- Believe me I am very appreciative of all your kind words! My very warmest regards, John! :) john
Date: 10/2/2017 4:28:00 PM
Sadness seeps into broken promises in this melancholy piece John, so eloquently expressed! It is wonderful to see your muse return. I always enjoy your poetry, even if perhaps it might soar a bit above my ability to comprehend some of it. An outstanding piece my friend! : )
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Date: 10/3/2017 8:30:00 AM
Connie, I am most grateful to you for having the patience and making the time to read the poem in its entirety; most people cannot be bothered with long poems, but, if you have something to say, then, I suppose, sometimes, that is just the way it is! Thank you so very much for sparing my poem some of your precious time...it truly is very much appreciated by me. :) john
Date: 9/23/2017 8:35:00 AM
If I could John I would snap my fingers and we would spend an afternoon together hoping I might absorb your talent through osmosis. At the very least I am sure we would have a great time just laughing, talking and even sharing a drink or two at your local haunt. Regardless I am blessed that you have touched my life. This is definitely one of my favourite writes especially reading the two as one. May the universe bless you my friend. As always adding this to my favs. Lots Of Love Always, armand.
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Date: 9/24/2017 4:14:00 AM
Armand, you would be most welcome my friend! And who knows...life, after all, is indeed a most surprising thing! Thank you for all the interest you have shown my latest poems, Armand...it is because of the kindness that the likes of people like yourself have shown me, over the last several years, that I continue to strive to produce some worthwhile poetry. Again -- many, many thanks! My very warmest regards as always, Armand. Your friend. :) john
Date: 9/23/2017 5:24:00 AM
Two excellent poems John.. great use of languague.. I wonder if it is English or Scottish sea side towns? Or maybe Welsh.... great write.
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Date: 9/24/2017 4:00:00 AM
Hello, Silent One. Much obliged for the visit and the kind comments...always appreciated by me! The poem is based on a true, and, sadly, recurring experience; hence the underlying sentiment of the poem: trapped for all time in an endless cycle! The towns you wonder about form part of the chain of English south coastal towns: Worthing, Littlehampton, Brighton, Hove, and Eastbourne...they all sit beneath the beautiful rolling South Downs National Park -- a windswept place of great beauty! My very best regards, S.O. :) john
Date: 9/19/2017 1:40:00 PM
I will come and get you out my friend. You can not be inextricably trapped with your imagination...never. My tea s warm and my chair cozy yet the cill from the last few lines strikes deep.a profoundly brooding piece just like the moors. More please.
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Date: 9/20/2017 9:21:00 AM
Hhmmm...you are most certainly right in that assertion, Patricia; imaginations are fantastic places to visit...but one should never reside there! Thank you for reading the poem through...you know, of course, I truly do appreciate it. My very warmest regards, Patricia...as always! :) john
Date: 9/19/2017 8:37:00 AM
The last stanza really brought these two pieces together to form the whole. It's just absolutely stunning, your word play. I am saving both to my favorites to read and re read again. I wish I could pick a favorite line or stanza to highlight but there are simply too many greats to settle on only one or two after reading through only once. Wow John. I mean, wow.
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Date: 9/20/2017 9:16:00 AM
Hello again, Thvia. Thank you very much for taking the time to read through the poem in its entirety - Much obliged! And also thank you for the "Fav"...that is very kind of you! I really do appreciate your comment regarding the last stanza...after all, as you have so rightly noticed -- this is the main thrust of the poem! My very warmest regards, Thvia. :) john
Date: 9/18/2017 6:00:00 PM
Wow, there is a LOT going on in your poem. I will have to come back and re-read slowly to take it all in.
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Date: 9/20/2017 9:00:00 AM
Hi, Agnes...please do -- I would value your input! And thank you for taking the time to visit and leave a comment...it is always very much appreciated! My very best regards, Agnes. :) john