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An Elusive Star

An Elusive Star

In the vast silvery world he walked
  Between dancing white elves of snow,
    Singing to him in soft suppressed sounds:
      "Come to us, stay with us"
    Sirens in white, shivering entities,
  teasing his weaning fickle stability.
His blind eyes spoke to his deaf ears,
  pleading to his confused mind to
    turn around and straggle back.
      But all he wanted was to see that one star,
    and to stop everything there.
  While his gait slowed down and halted,
A duvet of white cold warmth enveloped
  his lonely determination, and he dropped
    to his knees in the icy realization that
      he finally found the elusive star.
    While a fissure emerged beneath his knees,
  the star welcomed him in, and carried
him away in rippling soothing numbness.
  He embraced to be saved from a world,
    where no one saw his bitter desolation.
  An unseen being amongst haste and hurry,
until he was nothing but a shadow among them.

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February 21, 2017
N/A in Contest: Invisible
Sponsor: Lewis Raynes
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Garcia Avatar
February 26, 2017 at 3:25 AM
this is why we mustn't skip happy wednesdays ever again. "a duvet of white cold warmth" captured the beauty of desired escapism perfectly. I'm gonna jot that down and steal it later on when you aren't looking
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February 26, 2017 at 5:49 AM
Indeed, if you're ever in the mood to skip the Wednesday, just SoupMail me and we'll talk each other through it :)
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February 26, 2017 at 5:49 AM
Oh, and it's ok, steal it if you like :D
Wolf Avatar
February 23, 2017 at 1:03 AM
I so love this one, Duir!
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February 23, 2017 at 1:13 AM
I do too. Thanks Budgie :)
Ella Avatar
February 21, 2017 at 8:02 PM
The escape and the save are a wonderful dream - nicely done my friend.
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February 21, 2017 at 9:48 PM
Thanks Sara <3
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February 21, 2017 at 10:26 AM
WINNER!!!!! This was amazing Darren, I was completely lost in these thoughts as I read this wonderful poem.
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February 21, 2017 at 10:39 AM
Thanks Chris! Winner or not, your comment makes me so happy :)
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