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An Elusive Star In the vast silvery world he walked Between dancing white elves of snow, Singing to him in soft suppressed sounds: "Come to us, stay with us" Sirens in white, shivering entities, teasing his weaning fickle stability. His blind eyes spoke to his deaf ears, pleading to his confused mind to turn around and straggle back. But all he wanted was to see that one star, and to stop everything there. While his gait slowed down and halted, A duvet of white cold warmth enveloped his lonely determination, and he dropped to his knees in the icy realization that he finally found the elusive star. While a fissure emerged beneath his knees, the star welcomed him in, and carried him away in rippling soothing numbness. He embraced to be saved from a world, where no one saw his bitter desolation. An unseen being amongst haste and hurry, until he was nothing but a shadow among them. *** February 21, 2017 N/A in Contest: Invisible Sponsor: Lewis Raynes

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Date: 2/26/2017 3:25:00 AM
this is why we mustn't skip happy wednesdays ever again. "a duvet of white cold warmth" captured the beauty of desired escapism perfectly. I'm gonna jot that down and steal it later on when you aren't looking
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Darren White
Date: 2/26/2017 5:49:00 AM
Indeed, if you're ever in the mood to skip the Wednesday, just SoupMail me and we'll talk each other through it :)
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Darren White
Date: 2/26/2017 5:49:00 AM
Oh, and it's ok, steal it if you like :D
Date: 2/23/2017 1:03:00 AM
I so love this one, Duir!
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Darren White
Date: 2/23/2017 1:13:00 AM
I do too. Thanks Budgie :)
Date: 2/21/2017 8:02:00 PM
The escape and the save are a wonderful dream - nicely done my friend.
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Darren White
Date: 2/21/2017 9:48:00 PM
Thanks Sara <3
Date: 2/21/2017 10:26:00 AM
WINNER!!!!! This was amazing Darren, I was completely lost in these thoughts as I read this wonderful poem.
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Darren White
Date: 2/21/2017 10:39:00 AM
Thanks Chris! Winner or not, your comment makes me so happy :)

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