Get Your Premium Membership

An atheist on his deathbed

An atheist living soul was floating above on  deathbed,
because if he touched it, he would leave this world.

He let the pain out and screamed through his dying soul.

A guy who was once drenched in every bit of gold
comes to him and says:
“I want to make a compromise with your soul and body—
I will save you, but for the rest of your life,
you have to serve me.”

But then suddenly the man who created every bit of the universe
comes to him and says:
“I will save you, but for the rest of your life,
you have to believe I am real.”

Then the living soul thought:
It’s no different. Both are slavery,
but in different ways.

But he thought,
since he questioned God in the life he lived before,
he would face judgment for that.
Either way, he was going to hell.

He was thinking of every possible possibility
that would grant him some life.

But he died in his imagination while sleeping.

– THEBLOODYPEN

Copyright © | Year Posted 2025




Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 8/21/2025 5:16:00 AM
Bloody well interesting. Your poem makes the assumption that God is needy, that he's desperate for humans to believe he exists. A sad fallacy. He doesn't need anything from mankind. I suppose the materialist represents the Devil. He's the desperate one. In any case, free will allows us to make a choice as to who we will serve. There is no such thing as being on the fence. Satan owns the fence. Pleasant dreams. Oh, and belated welcome to PS
Login to Reply
Woody Avatar
Tom Woody
Date: 8/21/2025 11:46:00 AM
Absolute freedom is a delusion my friend. In the end we choose servitude to one or the other. I know who I'm for...
Pen Avatar
The bloody Pen
Date: 8/21/2025 5:51:00 AM
God isn’t needy in my poem. He helps everyone, yes—but Mark 16:16 says whoever does not believe will be condemned. That’s not choice, that’s slavery. The man drenched in gold? Lucifer. I wrote it that way. It’s about fear, free will, and the soul caught between two offers—neither truly free.

Book: Radiant Verses: A Journey Through Inspiring Poetry