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An Apiary Haiku

the old apiary
my mind hums
with recollections
 

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Review by Kazuko Nishimura ~ Haiku Masters ~ April 2018 
By pairing the photo of an old, now abandoned apiary with this haiku, the audience can immediately imagine the sounds of bees buzzing around, working hard to create honey. For the narrator, those buzzing sounds may confuse or distress his or her mind by bringing back old memories, but involuntarily remembering past events is something everyone can relate to, making it easy for the audience to connect with this work. The sound of bees buzzing and the soft light in the photo show hints of spring. 

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Mahtab Bangalee Date: 12/9/2018 9:29:00 PM greatly composed the haiku Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 12/10/2018 6:18:00 AM Thank you, Mahtab; pleased to meet you! Regards // paul

Debbie Duncan Date: 7/2/2018 10:56:00 PM Nicely done Paul :) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 7/3/2018 2:03:00 AM Thank you, Debbie. What a pleasant surprise your visit is! :) Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich Date: 5/4/2018 8:08:00 PM don't know how I ever missed this one. It's brilliant!! Congrats on what I hope was a GREAT placement with this one. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 5/6/2018 2:16:00 PM Thank you, Andrea. This Haiku was submitted to Haiku Masters last March and it was chosen as Haiku Master for the whole duration of April. I think you'll find the site of interest. Regards // paul

Laura Hay Date: 4/25/2018 7:51:00 AM What a perfect combination of visual and text, you are indeed a Haiku master Paul! Warm regards, Laura. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 4/25/2018 9:24:00 AM Thank you, Laura. A real pleasure to have you visiting:) Hope you're having lovely spring weather in Scotand! Warm regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich Date: 4/21/2018 5:43:00 PM wow, I was thinking : this is SO good but I did not know if it was YOU reviewing it or someone else reviewing YOU. Congrats for being featured and reviewed by a haiku master! That is awesome. (too bad we are not all writing them this way) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 4/21/2018 6:47:00 PM Many thanks, Andrea. This was my first participation @ Haiku Masters, so I was pleasantly surprised that my picture-haiku was chosen as Haiku Master for the month of April. ~ (My last comment for the night...it's 1.47am here!) Goodnight // paul

Kim Rodrigues Date: 4/19/2018 6:11:00 AM Superb! I am reading a book about a woman who became a beekeeper. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 4/19/2018 12:39:00 PM Thank you, Kim. I believe women make very good beekeepers...they use honeyed words:) Regards // paul

Eve Roper Date: 4/18/2018 7:19:00 PM Excellent Haiku, Paul Hugs eve Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 4/19/2018 12:28:00 PM Many thanks, Eve:) Hugs // paul

Elaine George Date: 4/18/2018 12:02:00 PM BRILLIANT Haiku! Paul. A HAIKU IN TRUE FASHION AS WRITTEN BY THE MASTERS. Sincerely, Elaine Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 4/18/2018 12:35:00 PM You are too kind, Elaine! Thank you for your generosity:) Warm regards // paul

Carolyn Devonshire Date: 4/17/2018 3:38:00 PM A charming haiku, Paul. Thank you for sharing that photo from the apiary in Malta. It must be a special place for you. Hugs, Carolyn Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 4/18/2018 8:17:00 AM Thank you, Carolyn. For many years, both the apiary and the garden where it is to be found, were neglected. Fortunately our Local Council finally intervened and contributed to its restoration. Hugs // paul

Tahira Parveen Date: 4/16/2018 3:47:00 PM Certainly brought some memories :) nice one Paul. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 4/16/2018 5:31:00 PM Glad you enjoyed it, Tahira. Thank you and regards // paul

Charlie Smith Date: 4/16/2018 1:35:00 PM Brilliant Paul... Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 4/16/2018 5:30:00 PM You are too kind, Charlie...thank you! Regards // paul

Maria Williams Date: 4/16/2018 8:53:00 AM This is such a deep Haiku full of past images. An Exceptional and creative thought in this write Paul. Congratulations being reviewed by a Haiku master. I do love haiku's as you know... This is going to be an instant FAVE - I'll hit the button right now.... Maria :) <3 Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 4/16/2018 5:29:00 PM Thank you for your meaningful comments, Maria, and also for the fav! Warm regards // paul

Supraja Kannan Date: 4/16/2018 3:30:00 AM Such a beautiful Haiku... Loved it... Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 4/16/2018 5:26:00 PM Thank you for reading and enjoying, Supraja; thank you. Regards // paul

Ravi Sathasivam Date: 4/16/2018 2:48:00 AM Excellent. An exceptional haiku and cleverly done. Thanks for sharing it my friend. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 4/16/2018 5:25:00 PM You are always so encouraging and supportive, Ravi...thank you! Regards // paul

Probir Gupta Date: 4/15/2018 8:52:00 PM Even without the photo, the diamond would have equally sparkled, if not greater ... Probir ... Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 4/16/2018 4:45:00 PM You are very generous, Probir...thank you! Regards // paul

Rhoda Tripp Date: 4/15/2018 3:53:00 PM It is odd how certain monotonous sounds can dredge memories or creativity. I think that may be while I'm driving, my mind is in overdrive. Very cool haiku, Paul. Love it! Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 4/16/2018 4:44:00 PM Thank you, Rhoda. Sounds(especially music) prompt our mind when we least expect it! Regards // paul

Jack Horne Date: 4/15/2018 2:56:00 PM oh, love this, Paul - very clever indeed Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 4/16/2018 4:42:00 PM Thank you, Jack. All the best // paul

Viv Wigley Date: 4/15/2018 1:10:00 AM A masterful haiku indeed, Paul, well done. Regards, Viv Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 4/16/2018 4:40:00 PM Thanks a lot, my friend. Best regards // paul

Akkina Downing Date: 4/14/2018 7:48:00 PM Paul, you're amazing Haiku is mind humming! Fantastic... Hugs :) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 4/16/2018 3:52:00 PM Thank you Akkina...your generous comments are much appreciated:) Smiles & Hugs // paul

Susan Ashley Date: 4/14/2018 6:56:00 PM Simply superb Paul, both your haiku and photo. Great imagery of being lost in deep reveries.. The review of your supreme work is awesome as well - congratulations my friend! Warmest wishes always. ~Susan p.s. A fav! Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 4/16/2018 3:50:00 PM Thank you, Susan, especially for the fav. It was a pleasant surprise to have my poem chosen as Haiku Master, considering that this was the first that I submitted. ~ Warm regards // paul

Susan Gentry Date: 4/14/2018 5:07:00 PM Beautiful haiku! Clever with pic that adds to it too. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 4/16/2018 3:47:00 PM Thank you, Susan. In a Picture-Haiku (modern haiga) both picture and haiku have to support each other. Regards // paul

Line Gauthier Date: 4/14/2018 4:44:00 PM Beautiful haiku, Paul. Solid backing too! Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 4/16/2018 3:22:00 PM Thank you very much, Line. Glad you enjoyed it. Regards // paul

Vijay Pandit Date: 4/14/2018 4:39:00 PM Great.. original creation Paul. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 4/16/2018 3:20:00 PM Thank you, Vijay. Traditional Haiga incorporated painting/drawing and a Haiku. Modern Haiga allows the use of photography. Regards // paul

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 4/14/2018 3:16:00 PM Lovely! Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 4/15/2018 3:05:00 PM Thank you, Maureen. Best regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 4/14/2018 1:43:00 PM - One word: AWESOME - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 4/15/2018 2:50:00 PM That 'awesome' means a lot, Anne-Lise...thank you:) Hugs // paul

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