Andrea Dietrich Poet Ghazal

An Angel

An Angel

Lonesome in the black of night, I think of you, an angel,
there in a river of moonlight. Oh, to view an angel!

A cameo against the dark, face seen just in profile,
its texture gossamer; I'd gasp, then pursue an angel.

Would you come If I hung in the balance of life and death?
Come to me like those of whom there are so few, an angel!

I dream of you; a shelter you would be, to take me in.
You alone could lift me, dispel my gloom, you, an angel.

Here I am, mere earth girl, rooted by rationality,
longing for one glimpse of what I never knew - an angel.


April 18, 2010

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Pashang Salehi February 8, 2016 at 4:56 PM Beautiful Ghazal Andrea.... I just read it now...... I love this style. may be you're Persian. :) Pashang

Maurice Yvonne November 12, 2014 at 8:56 PM I read up on the form first. Repeating the one word in every couplet without it standing out like a sore thumb is the real challenge of this form. Within all the rules of the form this poem reads like any of your other stunning writes. I loved it.

Sara Kendrick November 16, 2013 at 2:35 PM Congrats on this awesome winning work.Sara

Skat A November 15, 2013 at 11:05 AM Andrea, Congratulations, on your 'Take the Leap' win............ LOVE ~ SKAT ~

Debbie Guzzi November 14, 2013 at 5:08 PM Sometimes it is only the dream which brings about the reality, the mind is a powerful thing. As always a winner. Congrad's Light & Love

Sheri Fresonke Harper November 13, 2013 at 12:16 PM Clever poem about angels, very nicely laid out, Andrea, congratulations on your win.

Joseph May November 12, 2013 at 11:07 AM congrats on your win Andrea.....

Dr.Ram Mehta November 12, 2013 at 2:58 AM Congratulations on the win, Andrea

Sandra Adams November 11, 2013 at 7:37 PM good job with this form Andrea...lovely subject to write of....congrats on your win :)

Harry Horsman March 14, 2012 at 11:05 AM a poem about an Angel, yet reading the comments here, buffy fooksss seemed like she needed one badly. interesting subject this. where are them Angel? we really do need them, as your poem stresses. harry

Kash Poet February 6, 2011 at 1:24 PM Very good Ghazal !--kash

T.A. Skyles-Theoklapoet November 17, 2010 at 1:47 PM I really enjoyed this one.Yes we met when I was 13 and been together 38 yrs.married 22 of 38 he's my all.Your PS friend Teresa

Buffy Fooksss Aka Lynette C. May 21, 2010 at 3:36 PM sp reply.

Kim Hilliker May 1, 2010 at 8:24 PM You got me thinking about how awesome angels are. Thanks!

Audrey Haick April 28, 2010 at 7:43 AM Congratulations on your HM Place in the Ghazal contest!! Enjoy!! This was very challenging LOL....Audrey

Margaret Foster April 27, 2010 at 9:24 PM Good one Andrea, Congratulations I did enjoy reading this again. are you gearing up for Jared's next challenge? ....Luv Margaret

Marty Owens April 27, 2010 at 8:20 PM Congratulations on your win...enjoyed...Marty

Linda-Marie Sweetheart April 27, 2010 at 3:21 PM Congrats Andrea on your HM in Jared's contest.. amazing and awesome honor for u to enjoy .. me too..luv.. Linda-Marie..

Jared Pickett April 27, 2010 at 1:03 PM Good work Andrea... I would have loved to place you in the top six but it is what it is.... Very, Very good Ghazal.... You met all of my expectations with this beautiful poem my friend..... I hope to see you among the top in my next contest coming later today..... The Sestina...... Get your pen ready.....:JP]

Mike Butler April 23, 2010 at 2:19 PM Great entry for the contest. Good luck! -Mike

Gerard Keogh Jr. April 21, 2010 at 12:34 PM This is quite good, Miss Andrea. Better than I could ever do in a demanding form. One possible critique- how about " you're" instead of you at the end od couplet 4? Just a thought. Ithink it might read betteer, but then that's just me... Thank you for your kindness towards me. I do appreciate it! Love, Gerard.

Buffy Fooksss Aka Lynette C. April 21, 2010 at 10:17 AM I DON'T GET THIS MUCH, WHAT U MEAN BY CAEO AGAINST THE DARK, A GHOST OR SOMEHTIN? IM 26.I A RECOVERING ACHOHLIC N JUNKIE ON DRUGS, I HAVE BEEN SINSE I WAS 13.I WENT WITH THE WRONG CREW, OR MAY BE I WAS THE WRONG GANG TO THEM.I MADE MY PARENTS KICK ME OUT AT 16 BECUZ I WAS BAD AS HELL.I AM BETTER, BUT I AM STILL RECOVERING, AND STILL A LITTLE KRAZY, THIS IS Y IM THIS WAY MOST OF THE TIMEZ.SOMETIMES I THINK CAESAR DESERVE BETTER SEE, BUT HE WANTS TO MARRY.HE NEVER COMPLAIN? bUfFy

Ravindra K Kapoor April 21, 2010 at 8:54 AM Beautiful and lovely as it deals with angel. I too have a fascination for angels. You have very beautifully concluded the poem. Great write my friend. My best wishes for the contest. Love and best wishes ...xxx Ravindra...xxx Andrea Dietrich

Linda-Marie Sweetheart April 20, 2010 at 1:07 PM Yes.. its from that movie and I just saw it again so I thought why not use that theme and change it up a bit... it was pretty cool.. especially the ending.. are u still having login problems every five minutes???

Mary Meade Stephenson April 20, 2010 at 7:44 AM This is wonderfully written Andrea. Beautiful and eloquent. Good luck in Jared's contest. Thanks so much for sharing and for taking the time to read mine. Hope you have a gloriously blessed day~Mary~

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