Sandra Adams Poet Pantoum

Amidst the Morning Hush

as lover's stroll amidst the morning hush
silent eyes yawn, stumbling fingers entwine
whilst through frothy waves reflective skies blush
squalling seagulls sip the morning sunshine

silent eyes yawn, stumbling fingers entwine
as playful dolphins tumble in the waves
squalling seagulls sip the morning sunshine
through the mist, sandpiper perched on the staves

as playful dolphins tumble in the waves
momentary embrace of lover's lips
through the mist, sandpiper perched on the staves
as darkness excites in solar eclipse

momentary embrace of lover's lips
silently gazing at horizon's edge
as darkness excites in solar eclipse
trailing footsteps fade out from ocean's ledge

silently gazing at horizon's edge
whilst through frothy waves reflective skies blush
trailing footsteps fade out from ocean's ledge
as lover's stroll amidst the morning hush

November 30, 2019

Seagulls poetry contest
Sponsored by Eve Roper

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Sam Kauffman December 22, 2019 at 5:41 PM Hi Sandra, Congratulations on your win with this beautiful weaving of beach - aviary images. Love the phrase "playful dolphins tumble in the waves." Makes me remember how much I love to watch "life" at the ocean. Sandra Adams December 22, 2019 at 8:23 PM Thank you so much Sam...i love the ocean and am amazed when i get lucky enough to see the dolphins jump...hugs :)

Na Na December 20, 2019 at 2:08 PM Congrats on your winning poem Sandra Sandra Adams December 20, 2019 at 8:31 PM Thank you Greg :)

Juliet Ligon December 5, 2019 at 6:16 PM So romantic. Beautiful imagery. Sandra Adams December 5, 2019 at 6:24 PM Thank you so much Juliet... hugs

Chris Green December 2, 2019 at 7:07 AM Beautiful penned and rhymed my friend. (Who says rhymes aren't her strong suit) I beg to differ, this was fantastic, the form, the theme and the feel of the poem were exquisite. "As lover's stroll amidst the morning hush" Sigh, so very beautiful. Best wishes in the contest Sandra Adams December 2, 2019 at 8:51 PM lol... thank you so much Chris...rhymes are difficult for me, as was this form ...i love my beach scenes so the imagery was the easiest part of the write...hugs :)

John Gondolf December 2, 2019 at 4:55 AM You did a very nice job with this difficult form, Sandy, Pantoums are always a challenge. Best of luck in the contest. Hugs, John Sandra Adams December 2, 2019 at 8:46 PM Thank you so much John...it was my first one ever written... hugs

Hello There December 1, 2019 at 9:43 PM A gorgeous piece that really took me there! Wonderfully peaceful, beautifully tender, exquisitely written! Hello There December 2, 2019 at 9:38 PM Now we each have one ;) You've done well on this, m'lady ~ Sandra Adams December 2, 2019 at 8:46 PM Thank you so very much Ht :) my first pantoum...

Jeff Connelly December 1, 2019 at 4:57 PM Simply so very poetic Sandra. Thanks. Sandra Adams December 1, 2019 at 5:06 PM Thank you so much Jeff :)

CayCay Godwin December 1, 2019 at 4:15 PM My first and prevailing thought about seagulls is that they poo on me - so I'm not inspired for the contest! For someone who hesitates about rhyme you really made the Pantoum shine; the imagery is absolutely beautiful. I haven't read about the contest (just the title had me paused) so I don't know if you had to use this form or not, but you rocked it, Sandra - a truly great job. I hope you had a GOOD Thanksgiving. Hugs ... CayCay Sandra Adams December 1, 2019 at 5:06 PM Thank you my sweet friend...seagulls and ocean's go together, i love the ocean so i knew i could handle the inspiration...it had to be a pantoum with certain restraints added...i struggled surely with this one...i was pleased with the end result, but pleased with your comment more...My Thanksgiving was good but hectic, hope yours was wonderful as well... hugs :)

Ann Foster December 1, 2019 at 3:30 PM So lovely... Ann Sandra Adams December 1, 2019 at 3:47 PM Thank you so much... hugs :)

Ralph Sergi December 1, 2019 at 12:34 PM a GREAT POETRY FORM DONE VERY WELL, SANDRA! Sandra Adams December 1, 2019 at 12:36 PM Thank you so much Ralph...i struggled with this one a bit, but am finally happy with the end result...it was my first ever pantoum :) hugs

M. L. Kiser December 1, 2019 at 10:57 AM This is wonderful, "through the mist, sandpiper perched on the staves as darkness excites in solar eclipse" love these lines. This is so easily visualized. Sandra Adams December 1, 2019 at 11:25 AM Thank you so much. It was my first ever pantoum :) hugs

John Hamilton December 1, 2019 at 9:27 AM This is lovely Sandy, I've never attempted a Pantoum, this is top quality especially for someone who struggles with form and rhyme. Very impressive..you're braver than me...I don't think I could do it. No need for luck this is a winner for sure! Sandra Adams December 1, 2019 at 9:34 AM Thank you for your vote of confidence and kind words. I struggled with this form more than any form I have attempted and had it wrong and had to rework it. I think I got it now though. This one was challenging but sometimes I like being challenged. :) hugs

Vijay Pandit December 1, 2019 at 7:15 AM So glad to see you venture into rhythmic forms--splendid imagery my friend--all the best, Sandy. Sandra Adams December 1, 2019 at 9:08 AM Thank you so much my friend... i struggled with this one... thank you for your kind words Vijay :) hugs

Brenda Chiri December 1, 2019 at 1:44 AM Wow sandy this was an amazing write! I enjoyed the read! Sounds a bit more up beat then your usual!;) but you do write upbeat amazingly! Loved it!;) Sandra Adams December 1, 2019 at 9:07 AM Thank you so much, my first time with this form...had to rework it a bit :) hugs

Na Na November 30, 2019 at 9:19 PM Hi Sandra well done. I enjoyed this. Best of luck in the contest. Thanks for sharing Na Na November 30, 2019 at 9:39 PM It was my 1st time doing this form also. Sandra Adams November 30, 2019 at 9:28 PM thank you so much... this one took me a long time to write... i don't recall writing this form before in my years of poetry, i often struggle in forms... fingers crossed... hugs