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Amidst the Morning Hush

as lover's stroll amidst the morning hush
silent eyes yawn, stumbling fingers entwine
whilst through frothy waves reflective skies blush
squalling seagulls sip the morning sunshine

silent eyes yawn, stumbling fingers entwine
as playful dolphins tumble in the waves
squalling seagulls sip the morning sunshine
through the mist, sandpiper perched on the staves

as playful dolphins tumble in the waves
momentary embrace of lover's lips
through the mist, sandpiper perched on the staves
as darkness excites in solar eclipse

momentary embrace of lover's lips
silently gazing at horizon's edge
as darkness excites in solar eclipse
trailing footsteps fade out from ocean's ledge

silently gazing at horizon's edge
whilst through frothy waves reflective skies blush
trailing footsteps fade out from ocean's ledge
as lover's stroll amidst the morning hush

November 30, 2019

Seagulls poetry contest
Sponsored by Eve Roper

Copyright © Sandra Adams | Year Posted 2019

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Sam Kauffman Date: 12/22/2019 5:41:00 PM Hi Sandra, Congratulations on your win with this beautiful weaving of beach - aviary images. Love the phrase "playful dolphins tumble in the waves." Makes me remember how much I love to watch "life" at the ocean. Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 12/22/2019 8:23:00 PM Thank you so much Sam...i love the ocean and am amazed when i get lucky enough to see the dolphins jump...hugs :)

Na Na Date: 12/20/2019 2:08:00 PM Congrats on your winning poem Sandra Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 12/20/2019 8:31:00 PM Thank you Greg :)

Juliet Ligon Date: 12/5/2019 6:16:00 PM So romantic. Beautiful imagery. Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 12/5/2019 6:24:00 PM Thank you so much Juliet... hugs

Chris Green Date: 12/2/2019 7:07:00 AM Beautiful penned and rhymed my friend. (Who says rhymes aren't her strong suit) I beg to differ, this was fantastic, the form, the theme and the feel of the poem were exquisite. "As lover's stroll amidst the morning hush" Sigh, so very beautiful. Best wishes in the contest Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 12/2/2019 8:51:00 PM lol... thank you so much Chris...rhymes are difficult for me, as was this form ...i love my beach scenes so the imagery was the easiest part of the write...hugs :)

John Gondolf Date: 12/2/2019 4:55:00 AM You did a very nice job with this difficult form, Sandy, Pantoums are always a challenge. Best of luck in the contest. Hugs, John Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 12/2/2019 8:46:00 PM Thank you so much John...it was my first one ever written... hugs

Hello There Date: 12/1/2019 9:43:00 PM A gorgeous piece that really took me there! Wonderfully peaceful, beautifully tender, exquisitely written! Login to Reply Hello There Date: 12/2/2019 9:38:00 PM Now we each have one ;) You've done well on this, m'lady ~ Sandra Adams Date: 12/2/2019 8:46:00 PM Thank you so very much Ht :) my first pantoum...

Jeff Connelly Date: 12/1/2019 4:57:00 PM Simply so very poetic Sandra. Thanks. Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 12/1/2019 5:06:00 PM Thank you so much Jeff :)

CayCay Jennings Date: 12/1/2019 4:15:00 PM My first and prevailing thought about seagulls is that they poo on me - so I'm not inspired for the contest! For someone who hesitates about rhyme you really made the Pantoum shine; the imagery is absolutely beautiful. I haven't read about the contest (just the title had me paused) so I don't know if you had to use this form or not, but you rocked it, Sandra - a truly great job. I hope you had a GOOD Thanksgiving. Hugs ... CayCay Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 12/1/2019 5:06:00 PM Thank you my sweet friend...seagulls and ocean's go together, i love the ocean so i knew i could handle the inspiration...it had to be a pantoum with certain restraints added...i struggled surely with this one...i was pleased with the end result, but pleased with your comment more...My Thanksgiving was good but hectic, hope yours was wonderful as well... hugs :)

Ann Foster Date: 12/1/2019 3:30:00 PM So lovely... Ann Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 12/1/2019 3:47:00 PM Thank you so much... hugs :)

Ralph Sergi Date: 12/1/2019 12:34:00 PM a GREAT POETRY FORM DONE VERY WELL, SANDRA! Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 12/1/2019 12:36:00 PM Thank you so much Ralph...i struggled with this one a bit, but am finally happy with the end result...it was my first ever pantoum :) hugs

M. L. Kiser Date: 12/1/2019 10:57:00 AM This is wonderful, "through the mist, sandpiper perched on the staves as darkness excites in solar eclipse" love these lines. This is so easily visualized. Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 12/1/2019 11:25:00 AM Thank you so much. It was my first ever pantoum :) hugs

John Hamilton Date: 12/1/2019 9:27:00 AM This is lovely Sandy, I've never attempted a Pantoum, this is top quality especially for someone who struggles with form and rhyme. Very impressive..you're braver than me...I don't think I could do it. No need for luck this is a winner for sure! Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 12/1/2019 9:34:00 AM Thank you for your vote of confidence and kind words. I struggled with this form more than any form I have attempted and had it wrong and had to rework it. I think I got it now though. This one was challenging but sometimes I like being challenged. :) hugs

Vijay Pandit Date: 12/1/2019 7:15:00 AM So glad to see you venture into rhythmic forms--splendid imagery my friend--all the best, Sandy. Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 12/1/2019 9:08:00 AM Thank you so much my friend... i struggled with this one... thank you for your kind words Vijay :) hugs

Brenda Chiri Date: 12/1/2019 1:44:00 AM Wow sandy this was an amazing write! I enjoyed the read! Sounds a bit more up beat then your usual!;) but you do write upbeat amazingly! Loved it!;) Login to Reply Sandra Adams Date: 12/1/2019 9:07:00 AM Thank you so much, my first time with this form...had to rework it a bit :) hugs

Na Na Date: 11/30/2019 9:19:00 PM Hi Sandra well done. I enjoyed this. Best of luck in the contest. Thanks for sharing Login to Reply Na Na Date: 11/30/2019 9:39:00 PM It was my 1st time doing this form also. Sandra Adams Date: 11/30/2019 9:28:00 PM thank you so much... this one took me a long time to write... i don't recall writing this form before in my years of poetry, i often struggle in forms... fingers crossed... hugs