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Amidst Celestial Dark

Billy my brother drifts on a plain In my mind I still feel his hurting pain I still see you Billy, seeing me cry Dad it looks like Billy, he's saying goodbye He tell me of places that no one has seen Amidst the celestial dark amongst it's diamond screen Where no one can sail against the luff I still see you Billy, why has life been so tough Billy my brother what would I see Smiles on our faces once again when we are annealed Still inside I cry and the reasons why Billy your gone now, but your so nearby Billy my brother what would I see Smiles on our faces once again when we are annealed Still inside I cry and the reasons why Billy your gone now, but your so nearby Billy my brother drifts on a plain In my mind I still feel his hurting pain I still see you Billy, seeing me cry Dad it looks like Billy, he's saying goodbye Dad he's looking down, there's tears in his eyes My entry for John Heck's 'Dear John' contest with 'Daniel' written by Elton John & Bernie Taupin

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Date: 2/22/2011 7:42:00 AM
Congratulations on your win James in John Heck's contest "Dear John". Love, Carol
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Date: 2/9/2011 4:54:00 PM
I knew "Daniel" was the tune used for this entry as soon as I saw the first verse. Congratulations on winning in the contest, James.
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Date: 1/30/2011 8:06:00 PM
James, yours mirrors a lot the meaning of that beautiful song, Daniel, one of the few Elton JOhn songs in the contest that I actually know! Just yours, the number one winner and my own. I really did not know the others, so it was fun for me to try to sing this one to myself. Congratulations on your win! Luv, Andrea
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Date: 1/30/2011 5:30:00 PM
Oh a sad one..good for you sad has a BIg place in life congrad's on your fine win! Light & love
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Date: 1/30/2011 12:30:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, James! Love you, Carolyn
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Date: 1/30/2011 11:43:00 AM
Congrats James on your wonderful win in the Dear John contest with this fabulous write and entry luv.. enjoy...
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Date: 1/30/2011 9:02:00 AM
I just knew this one would be among the winners James!! Congratulations to you on your win in JH's contest ;) enjoy your Sunday as well :-)
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Date: 1/30/2011 8:08:00 AM
You did wonders with this beautiful song, James! Well done, and congratulations. Well deserved win!! love, Carrie
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Date: 1/30/2011 7:46:00 AM
Beautiful adaptation on a beautiful song. Congratulations on your BIG WIN in John Heck's contest. Best wishes, Kory
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Date: 1/30/2011 6:50:00 AM
Such a success with this one James.Many congratulations for this win.
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Date: 1/22/2011 5:46:00 PM
This is a definite favorite for me, James. That song has always reminded me of my fiance Dan who drowned while we were swimming together. You did a terrific job keeping the lyrics in line with the melody and the poem is very, very moving and surely comes from your heart. I don't think you'll need any luck to win this contest. The entry is outstanding -- best one I've seen! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 1/22/2011 2:43:00 PM
Good one...Very expressive of your love for your departed brother..I am glad that I chose this one to read this afternoon..Sara
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Date: 1/22/2011 12:22:00 PM
One of my favorite songs James and you did it brilliantly.. I love this, really I do ;)
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Date: 1/22/2011 1:36:00 AM
such a moving interpretation of the song, james! stunning! winning wishes to you! :) huggs, nette
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Date: 1/21/2011 8:51:00 PM
This is a very good adaptation James. All the best for the contest.
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Date: 1/21/2011 6:31:00 PM
Oh yes, James. This is music indeed. I knew before I came to the end this was a hearbreak of a lament. Beautiful write. Beautiful tribute to your brother. I love the last two lines... There are tears in my eyes as well. Love, Deb
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Date: 1/21/2011 6:07:00 PM
good luck in the contest James, it was a tragic loss for you that I can not imagine
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