Amidst Celestial Dark

Billy my brother drifts on a plain
In my mind I still feel his hurting pain
I still see you Billy, seeing me cry
Dad it looks like Billy, he's saying goodbye


He tell me of places that no one has seen
Amidst the celestial dark amongst it's diamond screen
Where no one can sail against the luff
I still see you Billy, why has life been so tough


Billy my brother what would I see
Smiles on our faces once again when we are annealed
Still inside I cry and the reasons why
Billy your gone now, but your so nearby


Billy my brother what would I see
Smiles on our faces once again when we are annealed
Still inside I cry and the reasons why
Billy your gone now, but your so nearby


Billy my brother drifts on a plain
In my mind I still feel his hurting pain
I still see you Billy, seeing me cry
Dad it looks like Billy, he's saying goodbye
Dad he's looking down, there's tears in his eyes







My entry for John Heck's 'Dear John' contest with 'Daniel'
               written by Elton John & Bernie Taupin
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Brown Avatar
February 22, 2011 at 7:42 AM
Congratulations on your win James in John Heck's contest "Dear John". Love, Carol
Pettit Avatar
February 9, 2011 at 4:54 PM
I knew "Daniel" was the tune used for this entry as soon as I saw the first verse. Congratulations on winning in the contest, James.
Dietrich Avatar
January 30, 2011 at 8:06 PM
James, yours mirrors a lot the meaning of that beautiful song, Daniel, one of the few Elton JOhn songs in the contest that I actually know! Just yours, the number one winner and my own. I really did not know the others, so it was fun for me to try to sing this one to myself. Congratulations on your win! Luv, Andrea
Guzzi Avatar
January 30, 2011 at 5:30 PM
Oh a sad one..good for you sad has a BIg place in life congrad's on your fine win! Light & love
Devonshire Avatar
January 30, 2011 at 12:30 PM
Congratulations on your win, James! Love you, Carolyn
Sweetheart Avatar
January 30, 2011 at 11:43 AM
Congrats James on your wonderful win in the Dear John contest with this fabulous write and entry luv.. enjoy...
Neels Avatar
January 30, 2011 at 9:02 AM
I just knew this one would be among the winners James!! Congratulations to you on your win in JH's contest ;) enjoy your Sunday as well :-)
Richards Avatar
January 30, 2011 at 8:08 AM
You did wonders with this beautiful song, James! Well done, and congratulations. Well deserved win!! love, Carrie
Calhoun Avatar
January 30, 2011 at 7:46 AM
Beautiful adaptation on a beautiful song. Congratulations on your BIG WIN in John Heck's contest. Best wishes, Kory
Mannan Avatar
January 30, 2011 at 6:50 AM
Such a success with this one James.Many congratulations for this win.
Devonshire Avatar
January 22, 2011 at 5:46 PM
This is a definite favorite for me, James. That song has always reminded me of my fiance Dan who drowned while we were swimming together. You did a terrific job keeping the lyrics in line with the melody and the poem is very, very moving and surely comes from your heart. I don't think you'll need any luck to win this contest. The entry is outstanding -- best one I've seen! Love, Carolyn
Kendrick Avatar
January 22, 2011 at 2:43 PM
Good one...Very expressive of your love for your departed brother..I am glad that I chose this one to read this afternoon..Sara
Neels Avatar
January 22, 2011 at 12:22 PM
One of my favorite songs James and you did it brilliantly.. I love this, really I do ;)
Onclaud Avatar
January 22, 2011 at 1:36 AM
such a moving interpretation of the song, james! stunning! winning wishes to you! :) huggs, nette
Mannan Avatar
January 21, 2011 at 8:51 PM
This is a very good adaptation James. All the best for the contest.
Radke Avatar
January 21, 2011 at 6:31 PM
Oh yes, James. This is music indeed. I knew before I came to the end this was a hearbreak of a lament. Beautiful write. Beautiful tribute to your brother. I love the last two lines... There are tears in my eyes as well. Love, Deb
Roberts Avatar
January 21, 2011 at 6:07 PM
good luck in the contest James, it was a tragic loss for you that I can not imagine
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