Alongside the Tick of the Clock

It is then, that time does mock, in fractured, punctuated dreams. Alongside the tick of the clock. Elusive, as sea serpents in a Loch, your reflection, not always as it seems. It is then that time does mock. "Come, count the years, take stock. life, expired tickets, you can't redeem, alongside the tick of the clock." And there, it comes as quite a shock. You find yourself adrift, out of steam. It is then that time does mock. "You strutted away like a Peacock, who's plumage means nothing in Death's theme, alongside the tick of the clock." Against youth's door, you stand and knock. But, it is too late and you scream. It is then, that time does mock, alongside the tick of the clock.
For the contest, Villanelle Me Sponsored by Catie Lindsey Placement: 1st

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Date: 8/28/2011 11:12:00 AM
A commendable effort worthy of 1st Place Paula. CR
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Date: 6/27/2011 7:45:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Catie's "Villanelle Me" contest Paula. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/24/2011 8:22:00 AM
Congratulations Paula for this outstanding work and an excellent win...love, gautami
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Date: 6/23/2011 7:20:00 PM
Paula, this is a theme I often write on in my poems and I love how you presented it here in villanelle form. A BIG congrats to you. How cool!!! Luv, Andrea
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Date: 6/23/2011 2:57:00 PM
Woops forgot to congratulate you! so congrats on the glory of the top honor, Paula...certainly well deserved
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Date: 6/23/2011 2:54:00 PM
oooh Paula! This is such a cool poem! I love it. Poe, eat your heart out. awesome poem into my favs
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Date: 6/23/2011 2:41:00 PM
Many congrats on your first place win, Paula : )
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Date: 6/23/2011 1:11:00 PM
My congratulations on the first place win in the contest, Paula
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Date: 6/23/2011 12:03:00 PM
Amazing first place win and so well deserved. Now....let the clock tick with you, not against you...much love to you!
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Date: 6/23/2011 9:58:00 AM
I always am amazed at your villanellas..how you can make the lines so short! Takes alot of skill congrad's on your fine verse winning! Light & Love
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Date: 6/23/2011 9:58:00 AM
I always am amazed at your villanellas..how you can make the lines so short! Takes alot of skill congrad's on your fine verse winning! Light & Love
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Date: 6/23/2011 9:31:00 AM
Congrats Paula on your first place win in the contest with another awesome write my friend.. enjoy with luv..
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Date: 6/23/2011 9:23:00 AM
I bow to the master of villanelle, Paula. Eloquent beyond words. Congratulations on your win in Catie's contest! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 6/23/2011 8:18:00 AM
Whoop-whoop on your first place win in Catie's contest. Time, our ally and yet worst enemy. Well done, Paula. Hugs, Licia. xxx
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Date: 6/23/2011 8:15:00 AM
Wow....Paula, I missed this earlier...but so glad to see that it is Number 1 !! so deserving! Congratulations!!!! ps...that clock is ticking and knocking on my door....I refuse to answer it...and will pretend I'm not home today!! LOL !!
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Date: 5/17/2011 7:13:00 AM
I am so pleased to have had the pleasure to read your outstanding poetry this morning Paula. Thank you for sharing it with us. Hoping you have a week filled with inspiration. Love, Carol
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Date: 5/16/2011 9:13:00 PM
A definite winning piece Paula.. luv this essence that flows throughout the Villanelle and the intensity of your lines.. good luck my friend..luv..
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Paula Swanson
Date: 5/16/2011 9:22:00 PM
Thank you Linda. I really enjoy these more difficult forms.
Date: 5/16/2011 8:21:00 PM
I really like this one, especialy against youth's door, you stand and knock. I have such a dislike for the sound of clocks that for my office I bought a plug in vintage clock- soundless, except for a slight purr. My last one broke and I have yet to buy the next. So I rely on the computer clock. My husband thinks I'm quite cuckoo, since I explained to him the sound of a clock ticking is the sound of a second leaving and never to return. I am thinking YOU GET THAT! Good luck, you're sure to win!
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Paula Swanson
Date: 5/16/2011 8:31:00 PM
Wow Cyndi...You "get" it. I hate the sound of a ticking clock. It is always reminding you of time slipping away. I am with you. Digital clocks for me. But, my husband loves the sound of a clock ticking. So the kitchen clock talks, all night long while I have insomnia, telling me of each second that is gone forever.
Date: 5/16/2011 7:54:00 PM
this is great and has a wonderful flow.. have a great night cory
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Paula Swanson
Date: 5/16/2011 7:57:00 PM
Thanks Cory.
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