Alongside the Tick of the Clock

It is then, that time does mock, in fractured, punctuated dreams. Alongside the tick of the clock. Elusive, as sea serpents in a Loch, your reflection, not always as it seems. It is then that time does mock. "Come, count the years, take stock. life, expired tickets, you can't redeem, alongside the tick of the clock." And there, it comes as quite a shock. You find yourself adrift, out of steam. It is then that time does mock. "You strutted away like a Peacock, who's plumage means nothing in Death's theme, alongside the tick of the clock." Against youth's door, you stand and knock. But, it is too late and you scream. It is then, that time does mock, alongside the tick of the clock.
For the contest, Villanelle Me Sponsored by Catie Lindsey Placement: 1st
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Ramsdale Avatar
August 28, 2011 at 11:12 AM
A commendable effort worthy of 1st Place Paula. CR
Brown Avatar
June 27, 2011 at 7:45 AM
Congratulations on your win in Catie's "Villanelle Me" contest Paula. Love, Carol
Phookan Avatar
June 24, 2011 at 8:22 AM
Congratulations Paula for this outstanding work and an excellent win...love, gautami
Dietrich Avatar
June 23, 2011 at 7:20 PM
Paula, this is a theme I often write on in my poems and I love how you presented it here in villanelle form. A BIG congrats to you. How cool!!! Luv, Andrea
Dufresne Avatar
June 23, 2011 at 2:57 PM
Woops forgot to congratulate you! so congrats on the glory of the top honor, Paula...certainly well deserved
Dufresne Avatar
June 23, 2011 at 2:54 PM
oooh Paula! This is such a cool poem! I love it. Poe, eat your heart out. awesome poem into my favs
Horne Avatar
June 23, 2011 at 2:41 PM
Many congrats on your first place win, Paula : )
Mehta Avatar
June 23, 2011 at 1:11 PM
My congratulations on the first place win in the contest, Paula
Fassbender Avatar
June 23, 2011 at 12:03 PM
Amazing first place win and so well deserved. Now....let the clock tick with you, not against you...much love to you!
Guzzi Avatar
June 23, 2011 at 9:58 AM
I always am amazed at your villanellas..how you can make the lines so short! Takes alot of skill congrad's on your fine verse winning! Light & Love
Guzzi Avatar
June 23, 2011 at 9:58 AM
I always am amazed at your villanellas..how you can make the lines so short! Takes alot of skill congrad's on your fine verse winning! Light & Love
Sweetheart Avatar
June 23, 2011 at 9:31 AM
Congrats Paula on your first place win in the contest with another awesome write my friend.. enjoy with luv..
Devonshire Avatar
June 23, 2011 at 9:23 AM
I bow to the master of villanelle, Paula. Eloquent beyond words. Congratulations on your win in Catie's contest! Love, Carolyn
Hendricks Avatar
June 23, 2011 at 8:18 AM
Whoop-whoop on your first place win in Catie's contest. Time, our ally and yet worst enemy. Well done, Paula. Hugs, Licia. xxx
Richards Avatar
June 23, 2011 at 8:15 AM
Wow....Paula, I missed this earlier...but so glad to see that it is Number 1 !! so deserving! Congratulations!!!! ps...that clock is ticking and knocking on my door....I refuse to answer it...and will pretend I'm not home today!! LOL !!
Brown Avatar
May 17, 2011 at 7:13 AM
I am so pleased to have had the pleasure to read your outstanding poetry this morning Paula. Thank you for sharing it with us. Hoping you have a week filled with inspiration. Love, Carol
Sweetheart Avatar
May 16, 2011 at 9:13 PM
A definite winning piece Paula.. luv this essence that flows throughout the Villanelle and the intensity of your lines.. good luck my friend..luv..
Swanson Avatar
May 16, 2011 at 9:22 PM
Thank you Linda. I really enjoy these more difficult forms.
Macmillan Avatar
May 16, 2011 at 8:21 PM
I really like this one, especialy against youth's door, you stand and knock. I have such a dislike for the sound of clocks that for my office I bought a plug in vintage clock- soundless, except for a slight purr. My last one broke and I have yet to buy the next. So I rely on the computer clock. My husband thinks I'm quite cuckoo, since I explained to him the sound of a clock ticking is the sound of a second leaving and never to return. I am thinking YOU GET THAT! Good luck, you're sure to win!
Swanson Avatar
May 16, 2011 at 8:31 PM
Wow Cyndi...You "get" it. I hate the sound of a ticking clock. It is always reminding you of time slipping away. I am with you. Digital clocks for me. But, my husband loves the sound of a clock ticking. So the kitchen clock talks, all night long while I have insomnia, telling me of each second that is gone forever.
Long Avatar
May 16, 2011 at 7:54 PM
this is great and has a wonderful flow.. have a great night cory
Swanson Avatar
May 16, 2011 at 7:57 PM
Thanks Cory.
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