Alone In a Hospital Room - An Alzheimer's Song

Don’t you remember, love, how we danced that first night;
beneath the sun’s rays, toes dipping in the cooling sand, 
to the tune of our favorite song –
with me humming the best I could – 
(I sounded terrible, but you told me I sounded divine, remember?)
while falling all over myself, and your delicate feet; 
and you, trying so hard not to laugh as I made such a fool of myself!
Did you ever think we would go 
from being love-sick teenagers dancing on the beach, 
to a couple of old-timers reminiscing 
about our best years – our long ago days together? 

Honey? 
Sweetheart, please…
If there is any part of that teenage girl 
left within that beautiful head of yours…please; 
please, just look in my eyes as you once did…
look at me, sweetheart…
Don’t you remember? 

My love, do you hear? 
They’re playing our favorite song…



*Inspired by Izzy Gumbo's Solfege Contest
I really hope I did this right! :)
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Makama Avatar
February 28, 2014 at 11:07 AM
Absolutely brilliant. Thanks for making my day. I have found it pleasurable to always begin the weekend with Poetrysoup because poets like you and poems like this do not disappoint. Have a lovely weekend
Collins Avatar
April 24, 2012 at 6:09 AM
The longing here is so well expressed. Thank you. Kathy
Yamin Avatar
January 22, 2012 at 11:30 AM
Awesome - very touching poem. I appreciate the feelings expressed. It appears you have not posted any poem for last two years, Kristin. There must be a reason for such long absence. Please let the family of PoetrySoup know. Love. -Mohammad
Esquire Avatar
March 5, 2010 at 5:52 AM
Dear Kristin, This Superb POEM Moves Me a Beautiful Show of YOUR Talent My Prayers for a Return to the SOUP YOUR Liege ALWAYS...HG
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February 21, 2010 at 3:50 PM
Dear Kristin, I often think how hurt the one with Alzheimer"s must feel when they go "Beyond" and ask How could I not Remember Such LOVE Did the ones I LOVE know it was not me but the Mind in a moment of fragile memory A very Strong Write for a Sad Defect of the Mind Excellent Presentation I hope this note Finds YOU and YOURS in Good Health but I wonder as YOU have not POSTED in 8 Months My Prayers are with YOU YOUR Liege ALWAYS...HG
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January 15, 2010 at 4:00 AM
Hi Kristen, When looking for something that really touches me, I find it always leads me back to you. Hope all is well in your world. Thinking of you. Lainie
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December 8, 2009 at 10:04 AM
Kristin, Memory loss is a devastating experience... on both sides... or maybe just on the intact thoughts. But there are good sides of it. Every day is a new day. Every pain is gone forever. Every moment can be joyful (or not if alone...) This is a sad poem. A premature loss that leaves loved ones alone before... Love to you. Where have you been Kristin? (soup mail) Lovingly, Dane Ann
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August 18, 2009 at 12:28 PM
Hello dear Kristin....don't know if you ever check the Soup these days...but just wanted to wish you well, and say that we miss you. Hope your writing is going well! And hope all the little ones are doing great, and you too, of course! :) Love, Carrie
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June 30, 2009 at 9:50 PM
This is very cute, love that....reminds me of the notebook, and I hope all is well with you, Kristin.:) You never lose your touch with words. Love, Sara:)
Chu Avatar
June 29, 2009 at 4:07 PM
Soulful. Reminds me of Leonard Cohen's "Dance Me Till the End of Love," but yours is a lot lighter in tone.
Austin Avatar
June 26, 2009 at 4:57 AM
"Hope you did it right? Kristin, how could you ever do anything wrong? I'm getting caught up on communicating. How are you? I've been rewriting a novel and so am not able, with my lousy eye sight, to read everybody. I see you're not posting as much as usual. What are you doing with that enormous talent? Love, daver
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June 9, 2009 at 5:26 PM
Wonderfully described reflection upon such an unfortunate illness~As only few such as "Yourself" can do~For I could feel "Your Precious Heart & Soul" within every word!!:)~Yet luckily for "You & Your Husband," you have many more years to gather in, before ever having to worry about such as this sorrows befalling!!? "Beautifully Penned & Expressed Emotions Kristin!!":)~"As Always, Love & Warmth To 'You All,' John!!":) ~
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June 6, 2009 at 3:43 PM
Excellent write Kristin, all the very best in the compo>James
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June 6, 2009 at 8:53 AM
Well you did it right from my vantage point ... smile ... awesome tribute to a subject that may touch us all !! When I lose things or forget names my heart freezes in horror of this disease. I do lots and lots of crossword puzzles and sudoku in the hope it will stave off what I never want to experience. Wonderful writing here, Kristin!!
Joe Avatar
May 31, 2009 at 8:32 AM
This is a great poem of free-floating verse. I like the way that the narrative doesn't attempt to emote the reader but takes us into an experience. I wish more writers would realise that poetry is about finding your own way as the reader. This is a brilliant poem whether you 'did it right' or not
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May 31, 2009 at 2:15 AM
B E A U T I F U L---charma
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May 30, 2009 at 11:49 PM
Best wishes with this one Kristion.Rgds Brian
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May 30, 2009 at 3:55 PM
FYI - my late husband was Aquarius and I'm a Moon Child, so I can relate to your comments! Love, CD
Winter Avatar
May 30, 2009 at 3:51 PM
I have no idea if it is done right because I do not under the contest :( However, your poem is wonderful, and very sad, like a scene in a movie. Good luck! Love, Shar
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May 30, 2009 at 3:46 PM
I don't know if it is done right but your poem is done exactly like the doctor ordered....this is so beautiful and sad...I was into your words my friend....the ending is gorgeous....can dudes use gorgeous?...LOL
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May 30, 2009 at 3:31 PM
Wow, Kristin! Loved the way you ended this delightful remembrance of younger days. How wonderful that your "favorite song" continues to play after all the years. Great poem! Love, Carolyn
Kendrick Avatar
May 30, 2009 at 3:28 PM
Sounds like a love that grew over the years. I hope everything ended well. I liked your poem. Sara
Richards Avatar
May 30, 2009 at 2:56 PM
Wow...Kristin....you did this so well.....I too, wasn't sure exactly how to do this contest justice.....but I think you nailed it beautifully!!!
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May 30, 2009 at 2:47 PM
Kristin, this is a beatiful, but heartbreaking poem. Wonderfully expressed yearning for connection! Best of luck in the contest! Donna
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