Susan Ashley Poet Haiku

Allure of the Moon - Haiku

allure 
      
      of the moon pales -
               
luster lost 

            to the
     
                   c a n d l e l i g h t 
                             
          in your eyes


Susan Ashley
March 20, 2021


*not for a contest but inspired by the “Let’s Get Creative With Haiku” poetry contest sponsored by Constance La France. Thank you, Constance, for the wonderful inspiration.*

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Abdullah Alhemaidy September 20, 2023 at 9:15 PM Very lovey Haiku! So romantic too! Have a great day dear Susan ~AA Susan Ashley September 20, 2023 at 9:19 PM Dear Abdullah, your gracious visit and beautiful comments are received with joy. Thank you for your wonderful kindness. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Brian Sambourne October 15, 2022 at 6:26 AM Superbly written, Susan. Your pen often captures the heartfelt essence of human connectedness, and this fine Haiku is no exception to that high standard. Best wishes always, Brian Susan Ashley November 6, 2022 at 7:20 AM Dear Brian, the expressive sensitivity of your thoughts touch me deeply. Thank you for sharing your beautiful eloquence with me. I am honored that you thought so highly of my poem. Your kindness is truly appreciated, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Robert Warlov March 7, 2022 at 11:32 AM " . . . a shame-face'd moon wanes" ~ Irresistible Susan Ashley March 10, 2022 at 5:48 PM Dear Robert, thank you for your wonderful visit and lovely comments. Your kind words are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Maximilian G. Wolf October 28, 2021 at 3:09 AM Nice and deep. ~Max Susan Ashley October 28, 2021 at 6:24 AM Your gracious visit and wonderful comment is appreciated. Thank you, Maximilian. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Iris E. Sankey- Lewis April 29, 2021 at 7:23 PM Wow! this is as deep as those pools you plunged yourself into. Susan Ashley May 6, 2021 at 9:30 AM The beauty of your comment touches me deeply, Iris Elizabeth. Your shining presence is inspiring, my friend. Please accept my apologies for my late reply, life has been very busy lately. Warmest wishes, dear poetess.. ~Susan

Malabika Ray Choudhury April 17, 2021 at 7:36 AM Beautiful, Susan! Love the creative arrangement! Warm wishes ~ Mala Susan Ashley April 17, 2021 at 11:30 AM Dear Mala, I am embraced by the delight of your visit and the rich warmth of your beautiful comments. Thank you, my sweet lady, I relish your lovely presence. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Timothy Hicks April 13, 2021 at 5:05 PM How romantic. The candlelight of the eyes is such a poignant image. A warmth ... but also delicate. Doesn’t take much to blow it out. With or without the creative layout, the words are swell. Susan Ashley April 13, 2021 at 5:15 PM Dear Timothy, it's wonderful to see you. I relish your awesome comments.. I love the truth and beauty of what you said about the vulnerability of candlelight eyes - you truly have a tender poet's heart, my inspiring friend. Thank you for sharing your precious thoughts with me. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

D.W. Rodgers April 5, 2021 at 2:01 PM Love the shape and that your broke free of 5/7/5 restraint Susan Ashley April 6, 2021 at 5:12 AM Dear D.W., I relish your your uplifting comment. I'm so glad you enjoyed the format and the 'lack of restraint' of my haiku.. That's exactly what I was going for! :)) Thank you, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Jennifer Proxenos March 28, 2021 at 5:34 AM You are quite right, although the moon has been romanticized for ever, it is the candlelight, which with its strong flame wins over the moon, fire, luster and love brings about passion. Awesome Haiku my friend. Blessings and hugs, Jennifer. Susan Ashley April 1, 2021 at 6:09 PM My dearest Jennifer, I see that our sister muses are in complete agreement that candlelight tops moonlight! :) It is always such a lovely pleasure whenever your bright spirit appears on my poem's page. Thank you for brightening my day, I cherish your thoughts and our friendship, sweet lady. Warmest wishes, love and hugs sent to you from across the sea.. ~Susan

Gershon Wolf March 26, 2021 at 2:54 PM What a wonderful haiku, Susan. I really like how it flows beautifully without resorting to the conventional 'jarring' twist at the end. Peace and Serenity, Gershon Susan Ashley March 26, 2021 at 6:36 PM Ah, my dear friend, Gershon, your lovely comments are wonderful to receive. I agree that sometimes a ku can have a softer landing. Thank you for noticing my attempt at using a little more subtlety rather than a 'jarring twist' lol! You are so very appreciated, peace poet. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Regina Mcintosh March 25, 2021 at 2:15 PM This is beautiful. I love it... so gentle and simply breathtaking, filled with a vulnerable hope and a whisper of kindness... a musical flow to it. so so beautiful. You surely did get creative even though it's not for the contest. God bless you, love, Gina Susan Ashley March 26, 2021 at 8:07 AM Dear Gina, I am so very touched by your lovely comments. Your beautiful response to my poem elevates my heart to new heights - so inspiring are your words. Thank you, my wonderful friend. Warmest wishes and hugs always.. ~Susan

Michelle Faulkner March 21, 2021 at 9:13 PM 'Candlelight in your eyes' - this line alone makes me FAVE this! So evocative and romantic, makes me long for a full moon and candlesticks ~ Susan Ashley March 22, 2021 at 10:25 AM Ah, you are ever the beautiful romantic, my sweet friend. Thank you for your enchanting comments and for the wonderful honor of your fave. Both are truly appreciated, as is your cherished friendship. Warmest wishes, dear poetess.. ~Susan

Quoth Theraven March 21, 2021 at 8:56 AM Susan, One of my favorite lights emanates from your haiku. -Richard Susan Ashley March 22, 2021 at 10:10 AM Ah, your romantic side shines, Richard. Candlelight is most beautiful when in the sparkle of the eyes. Thank you for your beautiful comments, they are cherished. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Tania Kitchin March 21, 2021 at 3:27 AM A lovely enchanting poem Susan! Susan Ashley March 22, 2021 at 10:06 AM Thank you, Tania. Your gracious visit and delightful comment is a joy to receive. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich March 20, 2021 at 3:44 PM wonderful! Susan Ashley March 20, 2021 at 4:04 PM Thank you, Andrea! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Jan Allison March 20, 2021 at 2:18 PM what a shame you didnt submit this gem to the contest but I'm so glad you were inspired to write it Susan:-) hugs jan xx Susan Ashley March 20, 2021 at 4:17 PM Thank you for the uplifting feeling of your comments, Jan. I was actually inspired to write a non-traditional haiku after reading yours; "Flying South" (which I loved). The contest was already closed and I think Constance had specified "no humanity" just Nature, but since mine wasn't for the contest I thought I would mix a little human nature with Mother Nature after all. Your gracious visit is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Tom Cunningham March 20, 2021 at 1:07 PM Very creative Susan, love the hint of romance in your verse. Hope your weekend is going well. Tom Susan Ashley March 20, 2021 at 4:11 PM Dear Tom, I think I'm still under the romantic influence of my recent collab with Robert :) Thank you for your lovely comments. Our weekend is going wonderfully and I hope the same for yours as well, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Robert Lindley March 20, 2021 at 12:19 PM A beautiful lunar glow to this fine Hiaku my dear friend. Most definitely a very creative and image laden romantic new poem! A fav- one that gifts romantic inspiration to me if I can just find the time to compose today. God bless.. Susan Ashley March 20, 2021 at 4:08 PM My dear friend, thank you for the kind embrace of your lovely comments and for the high honor of your fav. I'm so pleased to know you enjoyed my haiku, Robert. Indeed, I know that frustration being inspired and not having the time to realize the inspiration with pen to paper. Warmest wishes always, dear poet.. ~Susan

Darlene De Beaulieu March 20, 2021 at 12:01 PM Hello Susan, oh this is lovely. Enjoy your day my friend. Darlene De Beaulieu March 21, 2021 at 6:20 AM Hello Susan, yes i will enjoy my bright sunny day. The sun is out today. Enjoy your day my friend. Hugs. Susan Ashley March 20, 2021 at 3:54 PM Dear Darlene, it’s such a pleasure to see you! Thank you for your gracious comments. I’m so pleased you enjoyed my haiku. Enjoy your day as well, my friend, and warmest wishes to you.. ~Susan

Heidi Sands March 20, 2021 at 11:34 AM Beautiful. So nice, Susan :) Susan Ashley March 20, 2021 at 11:48 AM Thank you, Heidi, for being the first to leave such lovely comments. Your uplifting presence is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan