All In Curl

give it away
give it all
all for what
all for nothing
nothing you bet
nothing yil get
get out there quick
get lost in a ditch
ditch ya wife
ditch ya dog
dog won’t miss ya
dog'll piss ya
ya think yiv got it down
ya haven’t been down under
under what ya say?
under what ya pray?
pray it ain't worth a zack
pray your honey aint outback
outback’n the wild roo’s nestin’ kick
outback and back again he’s slick
slick and kicking for a noice steak
slick and mad as a cut snake 
snake’s got death in his bite
snake’ll ruin a weddin orright
orright’cha got two seconds tah think
orright your seconds gone yeh in a stink
stink in heaps
stink the dunny rat he is
is you thinking in the wild to slack off
is you ready to rack off
off to the waters in a hurray mate
off to the sandy slates run clean
clean as a bottler at sea
clean as ya ever can see
see here we all left our lives
see this is where we feel alive
alive in the wild far from the loo
alive away from the crazy blue
blue sea soppin the sand around
blue surroundin this land we’re proud
proud in the danger of ever
proud to amaze whoever
whoever ya meet
whoever ya see
see chance give it a burl
see um tackle the crock in a curl
curl on his back is a good going off
curl in his teeth yiv gotcha limb torn off
off!
off! 


For the Down Under contest
Sponsored by:  Debbie Guzzi
*Don’t think I did this quite right! Though it was fun to try anyhow ^___^
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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Hicks Avatar
March 24, 2016 at 1:33 AM
You really have been reading me a lot lately, and I really appreciate it. Some of my older poems (and recent, too) can get a bit on the silly side --- (especially that Sitting Awkwardly So They Don't See the Evidence one ... ha ha) ... but you give your thoughts nonetheless. You're awesome my friend ... and your bro is also really kind.
Breidenthal Avatar
March 24, 2016 at 9:09 AM
Because I really enjoy reading you!!! Haha, yeah my brother David was online, and I asked him, hey, do you know who Timothy Hicks is? Read his poetry!!! Haha He knew about you already apparently. You're simply brilliant Timothy, sorry if I keep repeating that. xD Also, we all need a bit of comic relief sometimes, so its all good. I look forward to reading more from you. Youve been on my faviritw poets list for quite some time! ~Laura
Breidenthal Avatar
March 24, 2016 at 9:09 AM
favorite* I cant spell this morning... x.x
Hicks Avatar
March 24, 2016 at 1:31 AM
Ohhh I really love this form, and have tried it a few times. You never know where you'll end up and that's the fun of it :) This was not what I was expecting with all the funny slang and unusual images ... I found myself reading this in an Australian (well sort of) accent ... different indeed from your usual muse, but different is refreshing. I also didn't try very many rhymes at all with this form (only a couple here and there if they came to me) ...
Breidenthal Avatar
March 24, 2016 at 9:03 AM
I dunno what possessed me to try this, but it was fun to write nonetheless! I will have to check out your blitzes soon! ~Laura
Kendrick Avatar
September 12, 2015 at 8:57 AM
Awesome work !! No wonder it is in the winners’ list. Congrats..Sara
Breidenthal Avatar
September 12, 2015 at 1:36 PM
Thank you Sara! ~Laura
Nunez Avatar
September 11, 2015 at 11:34 PM
Wow...for a first time, you really nailed this blitz my friend, Aussie accent and all. Congrats! hugs!
Breidenthal Avatar
September 12, 2015 at 1:37 PM
Aww, thanks Kim! I had fun writing this silly piece. ~Laura
Merryman Avatar
September 8, 2015 at 5:38 PM
Now that's what I call a "down under" blitz! Great work, Laura! Congrats on your win! Love, Kim
Breidenthal Avatar
September 9, 2015 at 5:14 AM
Thanks for the sweet visit,: ) ~Laura
Callus Avatar
September 8, 2015 at 3:15 PM
Slammy and witty blitz, Laura! Makes for an entertaining read:) ~ Congratulations on a merited podium finish! // paul
Breidenthal Avatar
September 8, 2015 at 3:28 PM
Glad you were entertained, Paul! I'm heading over to your page to read some of your poetry. I'm excited! ~Laura
Richards Avatar
September 8, 2015 at 11:55 AM
Hooray for you.........you blitzed the winner's list !!!! :) Congrats !!!
Breidenthal Avatar
September 8, 2015 at 3:13 PM
Good on me, huh? Thanks for the cheer. : ) ~Laura
A  Avatar
September 8, 2015 at 8:54 AM
Laura, Congratulations on your -Down Under- win. Love .....SKAT**
Breidenthal Avatar
September 8, 2015 at 3:13 PM
Thank ya kindly mate! ~Laura
Roper Avatar
September 7, 2015 at 6:20 PM
Congratulations on your win a 7! Hugs Eve
Breidenthal Avatar
September 7, 2015 at 7:18 PM
Hello Eve, thank you for reading!~Laura
Cheema Avatar
September 7, 2015 at 5:54 AM
Debbie Congrats on your wonderful win! Balveen
Breidenthal Avatar
September 7, 2015 at 6:03 AM
Thank you Balveen! Gotter watch out for those gators!~Laura
A. Sharma Avatar
September 6, 2015 at 11:25 PM
Wow Laura great write so well placed high! Big congrats!
Breidenthal Avatar
September 7, 2015 at 6:01 AM
Thanks Dr.Upma!! This was really fun to write.~Laura
Tagore Avatar
September 6, 2015 at 11:03 PM
Enjoyed reading your off-beat write... congrats for a Big win... Cheers, Bobby
Breidenthal Avatar
September 7, 2015 at 6:01 AM
hello, Anindya... thanks..tried to sound as Aussie as possible! Glad you enjoyed.~Laura
Guzzi Avatar
September 6, 2015 at 8:53 PM
Nice to meet you Laura! Congrad's on doing it "your way" I always award creativity. Now do try another with shorter lines ;) Light & Love
Breidenthal Avatar
September 6, 2015 at 10:14 PM
Thanks Debbie! Yeah, I might try doing it again sometime! : D ~Laura
Beaufort Avatar
August 12, 2015 at 8:36 PM
You did good. You sound like you are from a distant land and not at all like usual.
Breidenthal Avatar
August 12, 2015 at 9:15 PM
Awwh, well thanks mate! it was supposed to be aussie as possible hehee ~Laura
Dietrich Avatar
August 12, 2015 at 1:02 AM
well, right or wrong. It looks like you had GREAT fun trying it. (I am shaking in my boots to do one!!)
Breidenthal Avatar
August 12, 2015 at 1:20 AM
yessum, great fun! Do it do it do it! ~Laura
Guzzi Avatar
August 9, 2015 at 8:07 PM
Ya done did it RIGHT! Huzzah! ain't it fun once you let go of the controls and let your subconscious take over! Light & Love
Guzzi Avatar
August 12, 2015 at 9:03 PM
3 word title 2nd word preposition or conjunction
Breidenthal Avatar
August 9, 2015 at 9:09 PM
Haha!! Thanks so much! It was really a treat to try it out!! Thank you for the smiles! ~Laura
Bordner Avatar
August 8, 2015 at 7:01 PM
This blitz is a good blend of slam and slang, and it displays your diversity as a truly great Poetess...xool poem about keepin whatchya got Laura...J.A.B.
Breidenthal Avatar
August 9, 2015 at 12:17 AM
This was fun to write... you're sweet! Aaaaaannd, I have read your marvelous new poem. I will find words...soon. ;) haha. Love ya lots! ~Laura
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